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Carrot Top would be all but content to spend her whole life working her garden and lounging, but after a visit with Rarity she decides to go out to a party at Sugar Cube corner in search of love, adventure and other junk that Carrot honestly could not care less about.
Neither of them expected what they found.
A hopefully on time entry to theRandom Romance contest
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I approve of this shipping. Nice break from the usual inter-mane 6 stuff. I like the chemistry you developed.
And then Berry Punch goes BLARRGH
Berry Punch, the best matchmaker in the goddamn world.
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great!
thanks for reading.
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I was surprised by how I could get these two to work together. This ended up being one of the most interactions I've written. I need to find another excuse to get these two in a story again.
I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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Actually, you would be surprised. Rarity x Carrot Top isn't as uncommon as you would think.
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I think she is the secret star of the entire enterprise.
Hopefully this will be the beginning of a trend. Two characters need to get together? Have berry throw up on them! This will be it's own tvtropes page and everything!
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Surprising. I'll have to look around for more later.
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That would be awesome, what would it be called though?
Love the story.
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Girl meets girl, other girl throws up on girl.
Or something. I'm bad with titles. I didn't think of this one until the day before I published it. It spent most of the writing period in my drive as carrity. In hindsight, I like raritop better.
Glad you enjoyed it.
There are a few carrot x rarity but not nearly enough. This one was very good! Just a few spelling mistakes here and there and a missing word or two. Go over it a few more times to make this one a real gem.
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I wanted to be thorough. I really did!
But then I got tired...
I'll be sure to go through it soon! Thanks for reading and I'm glad you liked it.
Perhaps not a sparkler, but definitely a nice story. Who knew such total opposites could look so good together? And Berry actually made me laugh - do you know how rare it is for me to openly laugh at a story, even the funny ones? I think it was because I just wasn't expecting it.
I did have a few complaints, but most of them are clearly the result of you trying to meet the deadline and so I can forgive them. I think there were only two serious detriments to the story: first, when Rarity comes to visit at the beginning, I didn't really get a sense of her relationship to Carrot. It eventually came out that they were distant friends, but I think the story would have fared better if this had been made clear before they got into sharing lifelong romantic failures.
Second, I think you could have guided us into the mutual attraction a bit more smoothly. Yes they both acknowledged one another as attractive fairly early, but what is there beyond that? Is beauty the only thing either of them are looking for? Perhaps there was something you could have added, a past encounter maybe to show us how this really began.
But despite these two flaws you've god a solid, entertaining story that I can certainly get behind! I really hope you'll be joining the next contest, 'cause I'd like to see more.
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Part of the problem may have been what I was trying to do with the story. I wanted this to feel like something that came a bit out of nowhere. Even then though, as I went back over it I did feel like I was sort of banking on the reader accepting the nature of their relationship and that I characterized them enough to just kind of get away with it. Ideally I would have given myself another day before submitting to really go over the story and find flaws like that which I would normally miss.
I fell in love with Berry's character as I wrote this! Ideas started pouring in for more things to do with her as I wrote and I can't wait to use her more!
Pinkie pie swear that I'm gonna be in the next contest. And also that I'll give myself more then a week to bust something out
Thank you very much for the feedback! I'll see if I can do anything to fix what you mentioned soon.
Is this a one-shot? I hope it's not a one-shot.
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I'm sorry to say that this is a one shot.
But dammit, I had enough fun with these guys that I'm gonna try and write a follow up as soon as I can.
I'm glad I'm not the only one who wants more!
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Then I will make sure to watch you.
Cute and plenty of fun! Carrot and Rarity were both brilliantly characterized and tons of fun to read. I really lved Carrot's deadpan humour and the scene with both of them frankly admitting to their histories felt spot on.
I found the chemistry between them felt very non-existant til the final scene and so felt a bit forced to me but it didn't dilute my enjoyment at all. There were some typos here and there so if you get a chance I'd suggest cleaning them up but still a fabulous entry!
What if... Berry Punch is just who Cadence disguises as when she wants to get drunk, and the barf had magical love-finding powers? No? Okay, I'll admit that it's silly... Or is it? Yes. Yes it is.
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You need to be the one doing the writing. You have the better ideas xD!
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I'm slowly working my way there, whether or not I'll ever fulfill my dream of flooding FIMfiction with my strange ideas is to be seen. School's reared it's ugly head, so I may never finish my story about seeing how many P's I can fit in 1000 words. I've already finished my story about an ant and my story about a killer sock puppet bear though. Now I just need to improve and ponify it. Maybe. Possibly. In a year or so..
An interesting pairing. You make it work. Well done.