The queen of the Changelings' defeat at Canterlot left her with more than just physical wounds. In an attempt to heal the blows struck deep within her, she takes a recommended vacation to a remote area in the swamps. Ironically enough, the cottage she takes vacancy proves to be unforgiving as she finds herself with nothing but swamp berries, a lumpy floor pillow, and all the time in the world to complain about it. The only consolation to her misery made worse comes in the form of four furry felines.
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Meow! As a cat person myself, I can relate to Chrysalis and I understand that strange feline ability to bring the best out of someone through their undisputed cuteness. The question remains, what happens now? Is Chrysii going to try taking over the world with help of those devilish spawns/seasoned criminals/scum assassins?
Also, a technical thingy: the story could use some indentations whenever you start a new thought or perhaps a line of space between them to make it look clearer and easier to read. Other than that, it's a nice story!
2983906 Thanks, it means a lot to get feedback for my story.
I was worried too about the ease of reading. I was conflicted between having properly sized paragraphs and the separation of ideas by indentations. Unfortunately, I may have made the poorer choice. But it's all apart of the learning experience I guess, and I hope that my next story will be a positive product of this experience.
2978931 It's not always easy to do what you believe is right in your heart. In this case though, it is.
This story made me D'aww so hard. Not many stories can do that.
3964026 *blows off dust* Woah, this story feels ancient. it's been months since I've even received a view. Thank you very much for the feedback, it is frustrating when I can't get some tangible reaction from people besides their silence regardless if what they have to say is critical or not. Thank you, again.
This just made me go d'awwww. Chryssie + kittens = easy recipe for diabetes.
A sequel would be fun, but I guess so much after it's been released, the chances are slim, eh?
Cya
Raziel-chan