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Applejinx
Applejack will always love you 'cos that's jes' how she is, sugarcube <3
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Yusss, about time :V
Yes! I can't wait for this one now. I'm almost done with number 3 and then I'll get number four done by the end of the week.
I'm worried about that dark tag, mister
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There always has to be a dark tag
Oh come on, downthumber. It's true! I HAVE to put in a dark tag because the ponies get so worked up about stuff and the clop often leads them into difficulties.
...And that's how we got Rarity 2.0.
Honestly, I do like your take on Diamond Tiara (it's very close to something I had planned to write, and may still write someday.) I can't wait to see how you handle Filthy Rich. I'm strangely fond of him, so I have my fingers crossed that he isn't actually a jerk here.
Chaos/Discord kinda creeps me out, to be honest, but I'll give it a shot.
Honestly, the most interesting thing to me is that Apple Bloom is still worried about AJ's opinion. That's going to be a really cool relationship to explore, to see how they settle in there and how Apple Bloom balances being boss mare with being a little sister who looks up to AJ.
But the most important thing is that Mondays are awesome again!
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Chaos SHOULD creep you out, though I think she's also pretty hot. But that's still the Discord personality, which has a lot of trouble with playing nicely with others. Expect trouble, though Chaos might not see it as a problem (which is exactly what's creepy)
Well, I know what I'll be doing for the next 20+ mondays.
DiamondBloom should be mighty interesting. That prissy little filly won't know what hit her.
I am also intrigued by the Vinyl Scratch tag. It'll be interesting to see her back in the story.
IT BEGINS.
...Aw crap, my shift change means I have to wait until I get off work to read it!
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Could you give like a description of what Chaos looks like? color, familiarity to other ponies and such?
Another dark tag... nope I can't do it a fith time... I jaust can't!
Appljinx your putting me in a hay of a spot here, in that I love your characters and the universe their in but I just don't think I can handle anymore grim/dark stuff and pointless drama and nopony thing things through or talkings stuff out even though they all shoud have learned that that's somthing very important to do.
I really want to see what happens next but I can't tell how things are going to go besides bad... I mean is this going to be worse than the last book, the same, less dark I just don't know and I can't just go in completely blind anymore.
Also you do a lot in exploring the shall me say, animal, side of there brain Ie their overreaction to stress and fear and there heard mentality.
But you've don't seem to do much with the other side Ie nopony thinks things through or talks them out, they always just jump to conclusions, even though as before stated they should have learned better by now... unless they aren't learning at all in which case what's the point.
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Doesn't Twilight refusing to play with 'alicorn Discord' mean she's learned better? More to the point, don't I always get the ponies safely though in the long run? Nopony died, there haven't been any totally unredeemable villains (unfixable, sometimes). I _gotta_ claim Dark because of some of the stuff that happens to their emotions. In particular, Diamond can't get past her mean-girl thing through being given nice things and status and money, and Discord/Chaos (yes, there'll be better description when it's more relevant) unthinkingly goes to really dark creepy places because he literally thinks of nothing but himself. If nothing else, the way the ponies keep mounting each other for troubling reasons or with weird agendas justifies the 'dark'.
I'm sorry if it's that scary.
There's a reality to it, though.
All I'm gonna promise is that nopony dies, and that I always find a happy ending for the ponies who get most hurt. But if you need me to promise they won't be hurt, I can't promise that.
3073163 As long as Vinyl doesn't get hurt TOO much I'm fine. Any Vinyl beating and I personally hate that chapter(s)
Five alicorns is one short of the correct, holistic number.
In b4 appletheosis
Oh hell... now I want a spanking, and I've got work tomorrow! There's no way I'll get what I want and give both me and Thaylien any decent sleep. You cruel, cruel bugger, you, do you have any idea what that kind of story does to a girl?!
Excuse me while I go take the opportunity to 'jump in a river' myself.
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Well yes some of that is true but it just seems like none of these ponies ever have a good day other than the one chapter at the end of every story.
Still guess I beter gird my loins and press forward, hoping that things don't get too out of hoof.
One thing though... you talk about them mounting each other for not good reasons, that's kinda what I mean by the aren't learning, that was part of the problem in the fist book and there still doing it... eaither way best go see how things go.
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As if you haven't made the same mistake even after having an experience that should have taught you your lesson.
Or is that just me
I can picture Diamond Tiara as a masochist, and her crush on Applebloom is all but confirmed by the show. So I approve of their possibly future relationship. I do, however, hope that she manages to mend fences with Silver Spoon after learning some valuable friendship lessons.
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But this isn't just one time, that's the thing they've made the same mistakes over and over again which I can kind of understand but they should at least be learning, which twilight at least appears to be doing.
And since you ask yes I try my best to learn everything I can from every time I buck-up so I don't make the same mistake again, though I wont say I've never made the same mistake twice because im sure I have but I can say I haven't made the same mistake 3 times.
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its different when dicks are involved
is what i meant
3074075 I think that this particular installment will be all new ponies... making the same mistakes.
Seriously, I'd agree if it were about Dash being up to her old tricks, but seeing as DT and Chaos are both established as non-listeners, all the advice in the world won't help them, and they'll just have to learn on their own. It's going to get sloppy, and then it's going to get dark, and then they'll get it and all will be as well as it can be.
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I hope that is the case... still though I'd just like to see the characters in this universe haveing a nice day without all the crazyness but then again that is one of the cornerstones of the story.
I guess what im trying to say is that the characters and their intractians is what I care about seeing, not all the silly drama.... that and the kinky sex.
3074368 Just to clear things up: are you pro-kinky horse sex or anti?
mwahahahaha... I've been waaaaaaiiiiiting for this~ I'm reading this tomorrow morning before work!
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If you've read my posted story you'd know that I love kinky sex... I got no problem with any kind of kinky sex.
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Have you READ the other stories?
will there be a side story of featherweight and silver spoon? that would be awesome
hehehe, what a start.
Not gonna lie, spanking isn't usually my fetish. Maybe it's the fact that I used to get spanked for being a rotten little brat, but I just couldn't imagine it being erotic, despite my slight masochistic streak.
That being said, you did a wonderful job of somehow making that whole spanking thing erotic anyway. I'm not sure whether to be afraid or impressed.
I cannot wait to see how this turns out.
Why is it, when reading this part of the description, all I could think of was the Cylons from the SyFi Channel's Battlestar Galactica? lol
(If you have not seen the show, you won't understand my reference)
Dat coverart... it looks familiar for some reason...
Ummmmmmm pretty sure it's a conspiracy my real name is Vince Stuhlinger and I'm insane
Aw geez, this one already hurts. It's like Switch Thrown but the poor girl's got no idea what just happened and no one interested in helping her. Ain't that a place to be? In worse shape than Trixie.
Some day adulthood is going to come for Apple Bloom and I want the whole thing to be an extended riff on Flowers for Algernon, ending with the saddest happy sex scene ever.
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Oh, she figured it out. It just PISSES HER OFF like nothing else. Don't assume it's about her becoming a masochist or another Rarity. Diamond has no shame, and is infuriated with herself for unexpectedly coming out with that 'subject to crushingly potent orgasm when sexually mature' weakness, and doubly enraged with Apple Bloom for triggering it.
That's not spoiler, that was in there. She didn't come over humiliation fantasies, she came because she is NEVER touched and suddenly her inflamed private parts were repeatedly smacked with a hoof, physically stimulating her. That's why she spat at AB: her personality and force of will fought through a haze of erotic aftermath that many ponies would simply pass out under.
Diamond Tiara is kinda cool, but she's not a nice pony. Her schemes at this moment as she plots to take over another chapter, are not about finding and submitting to a farm pony. It should be pretty obvious what honor dictates, and it's very much in line with spitting at Apple Bloom.
The CMCs' response to all this is more in line with 'nice pony' thinking (at least in Trixieverse) but they've got problems of their own when it comes to what they do about it, and I'll get writing on the next chapter today.
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I've read all the Trixieverse stories
Oh boy here we go
....
I have so many things to say, and not enough words to say them with.
So I will just settle with one word.
JEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEZE.
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I wouldn't expect Diamond Tiara to be signing any slave contracts any time soon, but if she doesn't want to be topped, why pursue Apple Bloom? Revenge alone seems like giving AB more than her due, and Diamond isn't the type to seek challenge for its own sake. There's an easy way out, a whole classroom full of weaker-willed fillies, she ought to take it.
Eh, it's a little early for this sort of second guessing.
Aw shit, here it goes! I hope the alicorns get a lot of screen time together, I freaking loved that alicorn space segment in the last story. Their interactions together were fantastic.
I won't hey into a whole page about biology and how accurate you put in sensitivity and force together in this chapter. Diamond Tiara never being touched, and being in her peak... only to have her *extremely* sensitive swollen bit spanked by a HOOF so hard and so many times... my god. One would think Diamond Tiara would of passed out.
That was a lot of humiliation to have your first experience be lost to a pony she can't stand being more important than herself. To pick herself back up and not break down, fighting the urge to hump the ground, and not passout. To walk away with as much dignity as she could carry. Geez, I wonder what she plans on doing after all that. Really feel bad for her. Apple Bloom just took DT's honor away. What do?
I'll hold any judgements till we see another chapter. This is rather intense. Not a fan of the Silver Spoon abuse, maybe DT was just rapped with conflicting feelings thinking she'd have Silver for herself someday and got too controlling. The "Not for you!" bit was just harsh, like Silvy saying "Fuck you! I'll be giving my first to another guy with a huge penis who wants to give me his first!" was like ouch, poor Diamond got dumped.
The mud bit was confusing. She rolled off her lap and sat on dirt with the juices that mixed up with them and got inside her body? So DT was still blinking on the ground, getting mud inside her? Or just around her legs/teets area? Sounded like it was just mud caked completely inside her everything in there... poor Diamond. I wonder what Applejack would do or say about that whole scene. I guess she won't be finding out then, maybe?
Um, good start, I guess? Loved the Red Heart scene, hope she does get ruined finally. She's such an overly opinionated bitch in most fics I've read thus far, sad because I've had a lot of great nurses in my day.
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Now that we're talking about Spoon and Tiara doing their sexual experimentation,I'm led to see them as early puberty, overgrown bullies, rather than petty little bitches. Very interesting and different interpretation.
Spoiler spoiler spoiler spoiler because I'm so sure of it:
Second marriage. Half sister.
And so the grand and mighty Princess Hat Lord becomes the fifth and final Alicorn, here to rule over all things Hatly or Word-based!
Aww shit, it goes on and on and on. And i read and read and read.
Someone post that simpson's image: "remember, you're here forever"
Congratulations on the featured box, Jinx! It weirds me out that THIS is the one that made it...
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W-what? Redheart here is the sweetest, most honest... She is portrayed as the only one who isn't under DT's control, she's meant to stand in contrast to DT's beliefs about doctors, she loves her job, she loves her kids...
How in the world did the line about her crying not convey this?
3083292 She was so caught up in yet another tirade, to even notice the effects she was having on the child. It wasn't so much she was being a bitch, just that she's being dismissive and all too stern. Full of assumptions about how her ignorance of her body is due to having a bad mother.
She was constantly bombarding Diamond with interruptions and opinionated remarks and going as far as insulting her mother THRICE in front of her. Least three is all I can recall off hand.
She only began to realize her mistake all too late after the damage was done. She may not have said all those things if she'd known which filly she was speaking to, but she shouldn't be talking that way in front a child regardless. It is unprofessional. She even went so far as to describe a prescription to her parent about how to mare the buck up and take responsibility and teach your child about their body. Outright describing to Diamond, rubbing the salt in the wound, her distaste.
1) She has no idea what goes on in the household. 2) She didn't even bother to do the most basic of things like ask for a name and check her background. 3) She is supposed to comfort the patient and be reassuring at all times. NOT be forceful in tone with an emotional filly, snapping at them, to shut up is a clear sign she's easily agitated.
Nurse Redheart may care about a child's well being but she has a very dismissive "Oh it ain't that bad" and very STERN way of speaking. It's not that I didn't 'feel' or 'get' her horrifying realization that she just caused some serious trauma to a little girl, a nurse that was there the day Diamond lost her Mother, the guilt she only then felt as it dawned of what a imbecile she was.
What I said was that she is depicted to having nasty roles and always being so sour/jaded about her job. She is very opinionated and it gets in the way of performing her job sometimes. Hell, one fic really made her so bad you'd want to beat her to death with one of those bedpan. She had said some nasty things to Rarity about her nieces, its a drama filled story and her one role was just hilarious at how mean Red Heart was.
But anyways. Diamond would so want paybacks on that nurse, if it wasn't for now being humiliated by her classmate. It's about protocols though. There are just things you don't say or do as a nurse. They have a whole book on how to talk to deal with children in that field. At least there used to be a strict code of conduct, I guess these days its whatever.
It's still a good story so far, though I have no idea what it's going with its story. I'm just hoping for a decently long epic and not just a quicky. This was too much planning to be anything but an epic. So I'll be looking forward to more on this.
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The problems I had with your comment were
1) the fact that she was plainly meant to be shown in a positive light because of the reasons I listed. Even if it's hurt by close analysis (she doesn't realize that DT's bitchiness is because she's sensitive about her mother).
2) Factually, Redheart is right. This is very bad parenting, and the Jinxieverse has a VERY bad track record.
3) People were being like this about Fluttershy last time, and it was so stupid.
3085555 I don't really follow Trixie/Jinxie verses. If the things here require reading of the Trixieverse series to understand, then enlighten me on which would be relevant to this story.
Not sure what you meant on #1 and as for #2 The only thing we know is that she is never touched, hugged, thus her body is very sensitive I suppose. She's never felt skinship of a friend or a loving parent. She's never been a huggy touchy feely filly.
#3 History does tend to repeat itself doesn't it? Again, most people don't follow Luna/Trixie/Applejack whatever verses to a degree you should assume everyone is or should be familiar with all the characters' personalities in those verses. The one thing I like is a story that stands on its own merits. Something that despite being based on another storyverse, it still isn't required knowledge to enjoy all the current story has to offer.
Apologies if this offends, but I don't see the reasons you seem to take my opinion on this story so negatively.
Again, assumptions, as far as this story goes, are simply assumptions. Nurse Redheart is about as right about Diamond needing better parenting as the next individual. If DT was so bad, and her bullying so rampant, her teacher and her parents as would any of the bullied students' parents would of long since intervened.
What Redheart did was not right. What she thought, was not fact. It was opinions. Opinions do not hold up in court. This isn't a trial though, but it doesn't make it any less substantial. Opinions are not factual no matter how nice they may ring in your mind.
I've stayed up late enough as it is, apologies if I said too much. I don't mean to insult Trixieverse or whatever-verse, I just don't think it merits me having to read every person's point of view to enjoy a story based in its world. Its why I can't get into Winningverse because every Tom Dick & Harry release a new canon every other day (exaggerated but you get the idea.) This story still has much to tell, its too early to judge, and I simply want to enjoy *this* telling of the universe. Because there is honestly not many Diamond Tiara related anything out there outside the stories we churn out in our group.
This story is relevant to my interests. Trixieverse lost my interest in the early days, it may be something new and exciting now, but I'll just take the parts of its world in side stories like theses that don't require the base material to enjoy.
Now, off to bed. I'm rather done talking about an opinionated nurse.
- Bambi, Felix Salten. Thank you for that. I do not feel so alone in my reading history, now.
I think I am going to like Chaos, better than I like Discord. I see such possibility there for character growth and development - I can't wait, to tell the truth.
Diamond Tiara already intrigues me - you have a desperately unlikable character there, which to me just offers the greatest possible opportunity for growth and change, and that is exactly what I like in a story. After becoming familiar with your incredible abilities with just such, I have a very positive feeling about this already.
Oh, I expect you are going to have me spitting nails and raging inside - you do that, it's your gift - but by now, I have finally been trained to sit back and enjoy the ride. I find that interesting, actually - I know you are going to put me through story hell, yet I trust you as an author so much that I finally can just relax and enjoy it, knowing it will all... satisfy my values through friendship and ponies. I guess you are A.I.pllejinx, after a fashion.
The opening event - rich, snooty, manipulative girl has her first intense erotic experience with an individual exactly her opposite in every possible way - is a highly dynamic first move. It's also a traditional one, so I am waiting for the expected Applejinx twist... or ten... yet to come.
Oh... I wanted to mention I particularly liked the added number of prose poetry passages (alliteration, always acceptable!) you used this chapter for description and mood. Whether is was leaves or squelching mud, I felt tinges of Bradbury-esque language, and I quite enjoyed them. Is this deliberate on your part, or just you going up another level? Either way, the wording was almost musical, and I greatly enjoy well crafted poetic description.
I am happy you are gifting us with a fifth book in this series.
I don't often read clop - I'm a terrible prude. But when I do read clop, I make my clop the best it can be - I read Applejinx!