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A new school year brings a new soccer season -- but Canterlot High's already on the ropes. Their team captain just can't seem to get it together.
Fortunately the team also has a vice captain: a best friend who just isn't going to stand for sadness on her watch.
(A Bookish/iJab production! Cover by the latter as well. Thanks for everything.)
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Not bad at all!
Unique ship, too. I approve!
Also... You damn tease.
~Skeeter The Lurker
This is one of the more interesting ships I've seen today, especially considering I've seen someone ship Discord with a bath sponge. Author, your writes is muchly good, yes.
Imma let you finish, but I thought based on the picture it was a Derpy/Dash fic, and I got all excited, but uh
cloud kicker is okay too.
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That sounds like a personal problem!
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HOW DARE Y-
yeah you have a point
I wished it wasn't a oneshot I want moar!
Bonerific.
-Brian Griffin
Soaking wet girl-on-girl make-out sessions under the shower?
i.imgur.com/AiX6k.jpg
3413520 Yes I am glad to see it too. Though I thought you were going to let me know when it was posted?
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Pretty sure everyone's been shipped with a bath sponge over this fandom's 3 years! Discord just rounds out the set.
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Don't look too close! You'll go blind.
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Thanks!
Eh. Teasing's my thing.
Wingboners.
Wingboners everywhere.
I agree with 3413470 fucking teases.
Anyways good job.
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Half tempted to ask for a, um... Altered version.
But I'm good with this.
Well done!
~Skeeter The Lurker
Not sure how I feel about this one, to be honest. I really don't get the shower thing. Why would they do that in their uniforms when they had to be on the field in twenty minutes.
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That's a very good question.
...look, a moose!
Nah, seriously we thought about it, but when we looked over the story we realized a fifteen-minute makeout that involved them being under a shower for 100 seconds (check back, it gets turned off really quickly) just wasn't much of an issue.
'Sides, they're the team's fastest.
You do know that there is a Cloud kicker tag now right? Other than that, damn this was a good story. Definaty seems like a plausible situation for Dash to end up in plus an awesome ship to boot. Well done good sirs, well done.
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Thanks!
Though... am I missing something? Because the Cloud Kicker tag's been on this story the whole time. Even moused over it when I created the entry!
I am confused.
EDIT: Just checked again it's still there I'm so lost now
This was really good. I like it when you guys make stories.
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Hahaha, thanks.
Glad to hear that, by the way -- all signs point to us making more!
excellent work
3414090 hmm, strange. Wasn't showing up on mine when I first clicked the story and still wasn't there when I checked again to make sure I didn't miss it.
Huh, bought out by whom? SparkleCo, perhaps?
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Planning ahead is not really Rainbow Dash's strong point.
3414359, you're so untrusting! Why must you blame everything on poor Twilight?
The next story in this series at last gives the concrete answer you seek. :D
I love this fic!
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There's going to be more?
Really nice, quite evocative. I loved the part about the rain, that was really well done!
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I sort of had a plan for these things. This story was absolutely in no way part of that plan. So yes.
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maaaaaaaybe
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Thanks! Though at the same time I'm so sorry to hear that...
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(That was my favorite part to write, actually. Don't usually get the chance to go all experimental-atmospheric prose and stuff...)
Awww, thank you!
Needs more sex.
Me, hate two soccer girls making out? No, never, ESPECIALLY since its being done by one of my favorite writers on this site. Espeically when said writer is giving my fave pony some more character and build up to her.
I also loved how this was less , "Sex,sex,sex, hehe hawt," and more sensual as well as being sweet.Its how I enjoy my romance after all.I loved how you also applied some of the events of EQG as something that would have a reasonable effect on the girls. I also loved how you used the tech to advantage and how the parental situations might change in this world. Another thing is that I loved more of the world building in this. (why is the tech companies being bought out is perking my writer's sense? No, you fool, you have a whole world to do with these girls). As well as looking into how Dash would react to going to school alongside Tiara.
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Hoooooly crap you just made my night, AS. Thanks for that.
I'm really not into "constant sex for hawtness's sake" either. There needs to be a reason and emotion behind it. (heck, I'm lenient -- I'll take just one!) The hard part was incorporating that stuff into a type of scene that most folks understndably just use/dismiss as pointless ogle material.
While the EQG world isn't Earth there are definitely a lot of things from it which could have an effect on the values and life experiences of the pony characters we've grown to know over the years. It's a line of thinking I find most exciting.
There'll be quite a bit more of this (the techy world-building, probably not the uh, kissing) in the next EQG stories I do, so watch for 'em.
And thanks again!
I approve.
Cloud Kicker needs more love!
Nice story. 3414640 already hit on most of the points I would've raised, so I won't bother repeating anything that he said.
I liked the dynamic between Rainbow and Cloud, and the hints of backstory and a bigger universe carrying on. I'm actually a bit sad that this is a one-shot, because it feels like there's a lot of material that could be used to carry on the story. I certainly wouldn't mind seeing more of Rainbow, Cloud, and how they interact with the world around them. Granted, I always like seeing more Cloud Kicker.
So, yeah, awesome story is awesome. My biggest complaint is that there's not more of it, which is always a good sign.
Seems interesting, on a side note: my first reaction to the Equestria Girls humans was "KILL IT WITH FIRE!!!!!" followed swiftly by a "FIRE ISN'T QUICK ENOUGH!!! NUKE IT FROM ORBIT!"
Not the best of reactions, but still better than my friend who locked themselves in a closet for a week.
It's hard to explain the feeling I get when I read a fic that feels as right to me as this one does. Don't really have that much else to say, but fave'd.
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Wow. Totally appreciated!
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Starting to see this myself, yes.
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...you know, I probably would have tossed this in your group sooner if I'd been smart enough to look at the folders. I don't know how it got there but at least now it is.
Thanks bunches for the feedback! Glad to see you were okay with this; I've heard through a couple of grapevines just how big a CK fan you are and had no idea if you'd ever come across this.
(Also I do have a bit of a "universe" happening, which does contain one more Rainbow fic; check the linking, uh, "links" in the story description(s). This isn't the end of things by a long shot.)
I kind of fell in love with Cloud's Equestria Girls design and using her here worked out really well for us, so I'll definitely be keeping her in mind come future EG treatments.
3415193 I noticed you missed a couple, so I added it, Bookish. Good story. With respect to Chengar, its nice to see an alternate Cloud Kicker now and again.
3415193 Weird, FIMFiction said you replied to my comment, so either I got trolled by the site, or you edited out your reply to me from this comment, not sure which is more feasible.
I have nothing wrong with sexy soccer girls making out... but I'd feel more comfortable reading about it if they were in college instead of high school.
It is nice to see CK and Rainbow finally get together, even if it's not the Winningverse. It's kind of been overdue.
Wow talk about steamy
YYYEEEEAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHH
I came for the IJAB cover art and I stayed for the sexy soccer girls. Dayum I mean
I totally don't like sexy soccer girls <.< >.>
EDIT: Sequel?????
I don't have any problems with sexy soccer girls making out, especially in a locker room shower. I believe most guys like me get off on that stuff
Yay, Raindrops is in this.
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Yeah, it's a shame that they didn't bring over any of the background ponies from the main show.
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She's debated to be "Unnamed Girl #3"
images.wikia.com/mlp/images/a/a2/Unnamed_Girl_3_ID_EG.png
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tennis
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That would explain it, then. Thanks muchly, SR, on all counts.
(And yeah, my knowledge of Winningverse etc. is peripheral at best. I think I only really learned what it was close to when I started writing this thing.)
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Sorry about that. I'd accidentally hit your reply button when i meant to rely from someone else. Has your friend recovered?
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That's what I'd heard too, but I had no way to be sure!
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I dunno dood.
3413520 and I I have absolutely no idea how one would even continue this. Or what people would even want to see.
No idea at all.
I prefer my girls to be sexy soccer girls. That way, I have something in common with them. Besides Age, but that can flex a little. Being a Senior has perks.
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Also, for continuation, what if Rainbow and Cloud continued their "Shower" at Rainbows over the weekend?
I like this. This is focused on character, emotion, and story without being overshadowed by the juicy bits.
First off, I liked Equestria Girls. Secondly, most of us know Cloud Kicker from the Winningverse. I so far have only read "The Incredibly Dense Mind of Rainbow Dash" and "The Incredibly Trying Performance of Octavia". Anyway, compared at least the first story, I like the Cloud Kicker in this story better. You really seemed to capture what she'd be like as a high school girl. And then the story became... sexy soccer girls makin' out.
I will reserve judgment on that. I will merely say that I wasn't expecting that in a one-shot. I admit you did a very good job of depicting that. It was almost like watching one of those CW shows. No wait, scratch that. They'd never have sexy soccer girls makin' out on the CW. It was almost like watching one of those ABC Family shows. They'd definitely have sexy soccer girls making out on ABC Family. Sexy soccer girls makin' out sounds like an internet search. Sexy soccer girls makin' out... Why do I keep writing sexy soccer girls makin' out! 
So, good work I guess.
3415253 Whoa Steele Resolve read this story, and he's the best at this sort of thing.