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On the longest day of the thousandth year, the stars shall aid in her escape... It was not a prophecy. It was a promise.
Nightmare Moon's release has been a thousand years in the making. Celestia has prepared for it as best she could, but, as time runs out, she is forced to rely on her unprepared student. From her point of view, this is Celestia's Gambit.
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Nice story; good amount of angst WITHOUT being over the top.
Celestia done right
Nice work. This was really good, only two errors found:
1-
'was has'
2- Nightmare Moon didn't push Twilight back, it was her magic rebounding off of the Elements.
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I'm glad you liked it.
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Fixed the grammatical error. Thank you for pointing it out. Patched up the plot hole, too.
I loved this story, it was really good, I did a review on it In the The Pleasant Commentator and Review Group and recommended it to everyone! Hope it helps your story get more views. I faved and followed!
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Awesome! It's nice to know that it was well-received. I'll head over and check it out right now.
And thanks for the recommendation.
ThisAll my stories could definitely could use a little more attention.3804592 No problem, I'm new to reviewing so if you disagree with anything let me know! You should post some more of your stories in the group, if they are anything like this one then I'm sure it'll be well received...
Nice story
Just a suggestion because you mentioned it-
If you feel like making it fit with the current season, all you need to do is come up with a reason they couldn't be put back in the tree of harmony-even a note saying the tree refused to take them would be enough
After watching the episodes again this makes a disturbing amount of sense. O.O
Okay! That works too.
I wrote my own slightly different take on this, also with a more-involved-than-what's-seen-in-canon Celestia.
Well done. And something that could very well have been the case.
Very nice story. I've seen many retellings of the Nightmare Moon battle, and few are as well written as this. You take just the right amount of time, and you pull it off without being too angsty or heavy handed.
Well done, sir! Finally picked this up off my read later list and I wasn't disappointed. A millennia of planning leading to a single cast of the die. Plausible and keeping with Celestia's character, showing she was far from an idle or imprisoned bystander during these events. That's the way I'd rather think of her.
I agree that at least one reference to the tree of harmony would probably be a good thing, just to fit in with the current season a bit better. But it doesn't really suffer for not having it. Thumbs-up to this story and the thought that went into it.
Very well done!!
This is probably one of the best retellings of the pilot episode, if not the best. I commend you on the excellent grammar, as well, which is something I'm rather picky about. It was also very well paced, not rushed, but not so slow that I was bored out of my mind. All in all, an excellent story, and I hope you continue writing for a long time and fix the lack of well written stories.
Celestia is awesome manipulator. This is awesome story.
Very good idea/concept, and unlike many of them it actually makes sence.