i'm a brony who just wants to have fun, and make stuff people can enjoy
When Spike gets bored of regular old Ponyville, he gets help from a friend and is on his way to The human world. Not knowing what's their, or what most of the places are called, Fluttershy will have to steer him right.
Can Fluttershy handle the young boy? or will spike drag Fluttershy along for the ride?
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Quick question before I leave behind feedback or suggestions :
Is this the Equestria Girls world or literally 'our' Human world
It was ok, but i felt they should have had time to adjust to there new human forms.
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nice question
its actualy ourr human world. i hate EQgirls
3588820 good point.
but who said this was the first time?
and spike basicly is a human already(body wise.
)
Well if it's 'our' world...
then maybe Spike remembers a chunk of Twilight's studies...
like the chunk that describes magic circles and runes for enhancing spells...
and since Spike may be human in form but Dragon in spirit...
I don't think Spike would give a second thought to using Pyromancy if Fluttershy was in any danger
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Firstly, I would strongly suggest getting an editor to clean up the numerous errors in this first chapter. It made it hard very hard to read.
Secondly, this felt a little rushed. Discord just letting Fluttershy go like that felt strange to me, as was Spike's motivation to go to the human world. Though, I did think it funny that Discord thought to send clothes only after Fluttershy went. Like others said, I would like to see Fluttershy be given a little more time to adjust to her new body. When I had pony characters suddenly turn human, I detailed the characters' struggle with suddenly having to walk on two legs.
You don't have to follow all that, but I think them good suggestions.
5654092 good point and did they turn into humans or not ????