Prince Blueblood was not a very charitable stallion. Some would even call him, rude, selfish, and downright unpleasant. But one faithful night, he will be given a chance to change his ways...will he become a better pony? Or will he face judgement?
((Thought I'd give you guys my own little spin on a timeless story for Hearth's Warming! Special thanks to Magic_AI for helping me cast the characters!))
I think the Ebeneezer Blueblood thing has been done maybe twice now, but I'm not sure if either of those stories included the Jacob Marely scenes... Read on I will, when this updates.
In terms of criticism, it seems pretty solid, no weird jumps of grammar detected, nor typoes, (Not that I was scanning carefully) but narrative-wise, the prince seems pathological in his meanness. Might be a reason we'll see later and Fancy Pants did say he's generally more mellow in non-Hearthswarming times, so it's probably not too big a deal. Besides, those ghosts need a reason to visit.
Seems like a good idea... But there is grammar errors all over the place.
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it's a beatiful story...i would read the second part
Four years later...