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A mere human has been transformed by the Queen of the changelings, and throughout this, she teaches him how to cope with a new life, by sending him to a world he has yet to understand.
Rated Teen for some language and gore
Author's Note: Im sorry if the chapters are slow
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OMG dude, you need spacing big time.
Example
There are no spaces between the paragraphs, which bothers a lot of readers, myself included.
Try spacing it like this:
Makes it much smoother to read.
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Also, there is a reply button for comments you want to reply to.
3930018 yes thank you for your critique I appreciate that
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I'll read this story another day, when I have a less busy schedule. 
No problem.
I do and don't wont to be where he is and I am seeing a rely good story.
man....THIS IS GOOD ALL RETTY!
i must have more of this amazing writing
3999393 Not to worry, the next chapter will be out so sit tight and enjoy the ride
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rely? that will be nice to have a different story to reed.
You have begun the road to writing, young padawan. May the Force be with you!
Oh, and listen to good writing advice. Avoid bad advice.
I like what you've got going! Be sure to visit the groups aiding aspiring writers and ask plenty of questions. You can usually find help with group admins.
Keep writing! You've got something promising here.
4152416 thank you kind sensei for the good advise on the matter
I will keep that in mind.
well the plot thickens but why are Tia and Luna Changelings?
Nice! Saw some typos bit since I am on a tablet right now I can not point them out to you. Keep up the good work and rereqad it to catch the typos
4200796 just a headcanon I wanted to put in
4200887 ill deal with those in a bit
It is still all in all a good story keep it up please!
And please post the chapters sooner I was waiting for the next chapter for ever!
4200948 Ok well can you explain it later on then
4201453 yeah ill try to fit it into the story
4201898 Thank you
I think of this as a roller-coaster, exciting and scary at the same time.
Though, you might want to separate your dialogue and description paragraphs into separate entities.
4338150 I suppose I can do some editing on that thank you
It will get better its only just the beginning.
Good grief man, why no commas? You kinda need them.
EXCUSE ME?!
Interesting I await more
More soon please!
You wanna know what's funny?
Prologue: Encounters The Changeling Way
The Price We Pay,
The Changeling Way.
What Lies Beneath The Changeling Way?
They all fit in with the name, lol.\
Well, the second one is kinda a rhyme.
4363733 Thanks for noticing that
I didn't intend on that for happen heh heh heh
It needs some typing work, your '' is too close to the other words after a character speaks. Other then that, not a bad story so far. Keep this up, and I just might fav it.
4481850 Thanks for pointing that out, I'll fix that
Ehh, some pacing issues and a few grammatical mistakes, but a decent concept and, from what I can tell so far, a fairly solid plotline.
~Crystalline Electrostatic~
The concept of this is quite interesting. However, pacing is a massive issue throughout this story, it feels rushed and far too quick to get any detail or character development in without seeming like insignificant parts of the story.
4570829 I agree with you that the pacing I need to improve greatly, the character details needs improvement as well but hey its a working progress. I probably need to find an editor.
4575002 Emotion, don't forget emotion. o:
4575012 yeah lets not forget that
If changelings invade earth, don't have humans be incompetent.
We became powerful for a reason.
4578160 they dont know that changelings exist. but im not makimg them as incompetent as you think.
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I was more referring the how you make us think chrysalis will invade Earth.
And was afraid you would make the changeling shape shift ability incapable of being countered by human tech.
Because that annoys me to no end.
Anyways, looking forward to the inevitable invasion of Earth and the Human-Changeling War.
4580145 my apologies, I dont think I plan on the changelings being that overpowered.
Wait right there, its Not a new breed of changeling Because the human just turned into a changeling.
This is not my way! You know nothing of my work!
Nearly a year! Holy begeezus dude, take your damn time!
No, seriously... But hey, it takes as long as it takes I suppose. I'm not complaining.
5768686 well i needed to get this out and now i feel like a have a firm grip to march on with this project of mine. Ive just been pushing it off and then things happened thwt i straight up forgot about the whole thing so...... here i am ready to open upnthe door towards the world i created.
5770958now off tto write the next chapter
Dark, me likey!
Assimilation changelings are best changelings.
Ouch my eyes, it burns
Ooooohhhh...
Reached the ending already? just as the plot kicked off too
More pls