16/6/20 EDIT: Cancelled. I don't have any more idea of where this is going than I did all those years ago. May or may not revisit.
No biggie. Just trying to chat up the living embodiment of the sun. What could go wrong?
Twilight has finally gathered the courage to confess herself to the stallion she loves, the stallion who is ultimately responsible for every good thing to come her way in life.
Now if only it were simple to do so.
Partially R63 alternate universe, most things are the same otherwise (like, basically everything!).
Cover is a cropped version of this picture right here.
Mention should also go to Bud Grazer for running his eyes over it before I published.
21/12/15: Chapter 1 has been edited a little, in line with hopefully adding in a Chapter 2 soon!
Enjoyable thus far..
Dem feels man....
4523099 Praise indeed.
4523114 Yes, give me your tears...
4523648 Sorry, I tend to hold off full praise until I get a long taste of the world you're building. Still a promising beginning
4523759 Fair enough.
Oh wow. You actually made me sad for Twilight. TWILESTIA IN EVERY SENCE OF THE WORD IS GRAND! CONTINUE GOOD SIR! (Why don't they have a luna emoticon? She is literally more favorable than Applejack!)
Yay, it's out!
So, when's the next chapter?
4525377 Let's tentatively say in about a week?
4524192 Regardless of our opinions on Miss Apple, I do certainly agree that there should be a Luna emote.
Thank you for your support thus far.
R63 needs more love!
Although would rather Dusk X Celestia.
4526226 I'm sorry to disappoint you, then.
I'm wondering if the one maid wanted to date Solaris and is just mad she can't get him, because that seemed unusually petty...
4527378 Welp, he and his bro are pretty much the most desirable stallions ever, so who knows? There may well be a degree of jealousy involved...
Ah excuse me, but..
This fic is Twilight x R63 Celestia?
4528887 Yas'm, it is.
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4528967 Well it was half and half I was wondering at the end who the heck he might like. Still not sure whats going on but looks like shit is gonna hit several fans and get flung into other fans which cascade into more and more fans.
You know, the icing on the pain-cake should be that Solaris is gay for his brother. Twilight would DIE.
4532332 Made me snort, that did!
Y'know, I'm almost tempted now. Who knows, bonus alt-ending just für teh lulz?
4532868 0.0
YOU SHOULD TOTALLY DO THAT FOR AN ALTERNATE ENDING!!!
Looks promising so far. At the risk of sounding dramatic... You have my attention.
4532964 Excellent.
Great story Jet Cannon!
I shall fave and wait for next chapter you have my like from me, two if i could.
4535961 Shucks
This story dead? Because I really wanna see more of where this is going
4606893 It's not dead, I am just braindead right now.
4607962 ahhhhhh the worst well I will be faithfully waiting for the next update
I truly am enjoying this story. I do hope it's not dead!
5328833 Oh believe me, so do I...
Hot damn, first chapter and I can already tell this is going in the 'Best of Fimfiction' shelf too
5407504 Oh my.
Oh my. Oh my goodness.
*tracking*
5408377
5582039 Always relevant.
Never have I found a r63 story with Twilight and Solaris shipped. All of my yes to this story.
I just hope I can see more soon.
5717352 Thus were my thoughts in its inception, and similarly when I published the first chapter...
when will you add a new chapter?
6351775 I would very much like to answer that question in a helpful fashion, but I'm just not sure I'm afraid. Stuck.
Is super awesome
6641374
You have one of the biggiest wrighters block or you are caught up with school stuff
6739616 Most assuredly the former, with some terminal procrastinatoritis thrown in for good measure.
I can't wait until you write another chapter please write another soon
6847952 I can't wait until I stop being crap at this "doing stuff" thing...
6848339 what?
6848534 I lack inspiration. And will. It makes me sad.
How about you write a chapter that is the maids apologize profusely while Solaris, like Celestia would do forgives them in the beginning and then after that it switches to twilight in her room crying with Spike going up to her room to call her down for breakfast (this is assuming they live in the library) but before he knocks he hears her crying and asks what's wrong. If you want more inspiration then you can just reply to this comment with something along the lines of "Tell me more"
6849677 Not really the direction I had intended, but we'll see what happens. Thanks anyway.
I'll be here if you need help also I would like to know the gist of what direction you intended to go unless you're uncomfortable with telling me or think it should be a surprise
6851147 I'd like what jetman24 thought how the next chapter is going to be. But when I was reading the first chapter I thought that chapter 2 would be something else because of something you had in chapter one. Like with the part were one of the maids said
as well as
From reading all that Twilight will run all the way back to ponyville and cry her heart out. And when her friends go to her to chear her up. Maybe say somthing like. "There is no way he will like me because he likes one of you!" And after Twilight saids that the other members of the main 6 will get made at Solaris for braking Twilight's heart and wants to get pay back. As well as find out which one of them he likes. I don't even think Solaris would even know what happen until chapter 3 unless you make chapter 2 really long beacues of this part of chapter one
meaning that Solaris wouldn't even know that Twilight was even there until one of the Royal Guards tells him that they saw Twilight in the castle running and crying. Which would make him wounder what happened and for some chapters he trys to find out on his own only to find out by one of the two maids, Luna, or giving up and going strate to Twilight. Or the maid that was on Twilight's side goes to hime and tells hime everything that her fellow maid had said and that it made Twilight cry. Makeing upset that that had happened.
But that is only what I think could happen for only reading the first chapter it could be somthing eles. I don't know it is your story and what ever you put in you next chapter when you do get to it is up to you. Hope you have a good day.
6914410 Dunno whether you meant to quote ALL of that stuff, but in the future, I'd recommend doing it like this:
From here:
To here:
Just a tip.
Now regarding your suggestions, they're not bad ideas, but again they're not really what I'm aiming for overall. Might take a few little pointers here and there. Theoretically, I'm actually almost done with chapter 2, so expect it... in five months?