Always known as the Class Clown of Canterlot High, Jokesterrap has been thought of as one who rarely acts responsible. All of that will change when for his birthday, he receives a steam engine that once belonged to his grandfather. Now determined to prove himself, Jokesterrap sets out to fix and protect this little engine. But will he be able to keep his promise? And can he keep her safe from a nosy Trixie?
Based on the Thomas and Friends movie Hero of the Rails.
Interesting.
5104682 Thank you.
Before I say anything, I found some typos,
You spelt Prologue wrong. Switch the "u" and the "g".
The arrows should be [ ] and [/ ].
The dialogue's in the wrong places, switch the two I highlighted.
Now my thoughts, this is definitely a good start to your story, I'm really impressed Can't wait to see more
Also, after seeing Trixie's last line of dialogue, does anyone else get the feeling that something really bad is about to happen?
5141413 Thanks for pointing out those goofs. I'll fix them.
5141419 You're welcome
5141426
Found a typo,
To make the italics, replace the arrows with, "[ ]" and "[ / ]". Or just click the Italic icon on the top of the page.
It's only a matter of time before Trixie catches on to him, who knows what she'll do if she finds out about Gladstone?
5194618 Thanks.
5194618 Thanks. And as for Trixie, who knows?
5194618 Thanks. And as for Trixie, who knows?
5194643 You're welcome, and guess I'll have to read and find out
5194682 Eeyup.
Found a typo,
The arrows should be, [ ]
That was pretty funny with Trixie, looks karma really bit her in the butt!
5276979 Eeyup.
Uh....I'm not sure who to root for here.
5277564 Feel bad for Trixie?
5278612 Yes, actually.
5278807 I see. Well, do you think she'll find out what's going on?
5279913 If the others don't stop baiting her.
And having the entire school mocking her doesn't help matters.
5279923 I see.
I knew Trixie would try to ruin him somehow....
5289724 Yeah. She won't get away with it, though.
Actually, it's technically Jokesterrap's fault. First and foremost, he kinda started all this. And what was stopping him from simply confronting Trixie, rather than risk damaging his engine.
5289724 After what happened to her in the last chapter, who wouldn't want payback?
5289955 Since when would you know Trixie to listen to him anyway. Besides, she deserved that prank for being so cocky.
5290015
Since she had reasons to be suspicious of him, and kept asking him what was going on since the beginning. Other than explaining why he can't tell her, he simply blew her off mockingly, basically encouraging her to find out for herself.
Since when was being cocky such a crime?
5290187 Well, it was none of her business in the first place. She should have left it at that.
5290271 True.
5290281 Accidentally deleted my last post. Other than that, not a bad read.
5290287 Thank you. So, think Trixie's gonna get away with this?
5290293 You answered your own question in a previous post.
5290326 My bad.
I still feel, you're being too hard on Trixie.
Granted, trying to destroy a steam engine and make a profit might have been a bit excessive (though I wondered how was she going to accomplish that.) But I didn't like that Jokesterrap gother off scott free.
5307513 I see. Don't worry. I'll have him apologize to her soon.
Not bad! At least Jokesterrap doesn't have to worry about Trixie anymore
By the way, I found a couple typos,
The quotation at the end is a little too far to the right.
The Italic codes are supposed to be, [ i ] and [ / i ]. (Sorry, this must be pretty annoying)
5307651 Thanks for pointing out my goofs.
5307685 You're welcome
5307601 Of course, Trixie would have to apologize as well. It'll be nice if they shared a momental together.
5307805
5307810 yeah
This was a great story, great job
I found some typos,
A quotation is missing at the beginning of each one.
Take out the "n".
The first should be "his" and the second, "afterall" should be two separate words.
5367812 Thanks
5367825 You're welcome, and I figured I would annoy you with typos, sorry if I did
5367928 It's okay.
Noticed a few typos:
The "<" and ">" should be "[" "]"
5702770 Thanks.
5704424 You're welcome, just wanted to reread this
5704445 Thank you.
When I read this story I get a warm feeling in my chest....
Bravo, I say! Bravo!
10/10
*stands and claps*
This deserves a sequel