A nightmare night special based on Spike: Discord thinks is time for his retirement, but he needs to name a replacement first. Spike knows very well the Mane 6, specially certain Alicorn Princess. Who’s best to make their lives impossible?
You can find the original in spanish HERE
Also a serialized sequel HERE
Make the sequel English
Not bad, but I must confess there were a few errors overall in terms of grammar. Now, I can't say I'd be up for pointing them out in a review, but I could go for a more comprehensive editing later if you'd like. I'd recommend PMing me if you'd like me to do so, I'll then give you my email, you send a copy over, I'll do what I can and send the revised one back. Overall, it's pretty good, and a nice romp for the coming Halloween.
Spelling errors everywhere... But the story has promise, try to find someone who can clean up after you or teach yourself to do so.
make an english copy of the sequel please
You should translate the sequel to english
plz make the sequel english and on here
OH MY BUCKING GOD I CANT STOP LAUGHING XD. IT HURTS MY SIDES XD I t hink I almost passed out there. This is a FANTASTIC story. This story is totally gg onna be in my top 3 stories.
i like it, but i would have kept spike incorgnito at the end, and have the mane 6 to struggle in figuring out who is the new lord of chaos.
well we're screwed the CMC is now able to do.... well yeah this could be the end of the world because of them T_T
Spike: lord of Disharmony and Chaos, has a nice ring to it. I honestly wish they would go in a direction like this in the show: since they pretty much don't know what to do with him, some fans would don't really like him(FOR SOME REASON), and he doesn't really seem to be going anywhere, this would be a nice way to write him out of the mane cast, but still give him a pleasing end. Also, THE CUTIE MARK CRUSADERS AGENTS OF CHAOS AND DISHARMONY!!!!!!!!!!!!! So in other words, nice job.
This was really good! Funny and creative. Can't wait to read the sequel.
Well, I guess that was pretty fun. A little hard to read in some places though.
oh my lord that last line is TERRIFYING!
Behold the king, the King of Chaos.
They're bucked.
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I don't understand this line/what are they supposed to be? (the Ponyjins Snips Poku and Snails Ponyta)
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Its a great idea, i sure will cast a look at the sequel
You know, a few years ago I toyed with the idea of a cycle of Harmony and Chaos in Equestria. Each cycle ending with Chaos being tamed by Kindness and slowly weakening as the next Chaos grew.
Now, there were a lot of other little bits and pieces, but Spike was fated to be the next Chaos. I only got as far as his apotheosis before I scrapped what I had and buried it in a pit with all my other old writing, but I like that I wasn't the only one to think of Spike taking the Mantle of Chaos in Discord's place.
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It is a pretty epic Idea
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Yeah, just ended up being more than I could handle, especially with how cluttered it was becoming. All the different sidestories and backstories I'd have needed to explain everything. It was... kind of a busy world.
Even just as far as the Main 6 went, Pinkie was an ancient vampire, and Rarity was half changeling. Alicorns came into being when an Element Bearer died, and when one of THEM died their power went to one of the others. Chrysalis was one the bearer of Honesty, and picked up Love after the previous bearer bit the big one, which is how she'd kept her hive completely unknown for so long, she'd been feeding them using that. Until, that is, Cadence took Love when she ascended.
Yeah. It was nutty.
I'm pretty sure Discord did at least one of those things
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I think Saiyans Goku and Vegeta.
Oh like In treehouse of horror
How ya gonna explain that to your sisters?
Over 5 years later, and I still love this story and it's sequel.
nice work