Twilight Sparkle, a lavender unicorn who specializes in magic, casts a spell. This "number 47" is a shrinking spell. Unfortunately, this causes some big trouble for her once Ponyville's residents shrink to the size of small toys. Do ponies enjoy being little?
Answer: No.
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Well, my last one-shot was a success. Let's hope this one produces the same positive result.
Also, the image was the best one I could find. The Mane 6 and Ponyville are NOT turned into fillies.
The timeline is also just after Magic Duel, and the ponies' scale when they're small are that of the MLP:FiM toys here on Earth.
Chapters (1)
Can't wait to see where it goes from here.
5290049 If you're thinking about other chapters, it's a one-shot. After I finished, I forgot to set the status from "Incomplete" to "Complete".
5290379 oh, that actually makes a lot of sense
There's a folder in a group that this story really belongs in
You should put it there
Ponies, Big and Small
You need to work on the pacing, it is way waaaaay to fast.
5294786 KNEW IT!!!
Uhh... Thanks!
I think the line where it says "Dash flashed a look that said 'I'm gonna get you' and 'This isn't over' to the cloud she was trying to clear," was easily some of my most comedic writing. Every time I think about that line, I lose it.
5292230 But do you see anything that sparks your interest? Something that pleases you?
In short, did you find it enjoyable?
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Not really I am afraid. Sorry.
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I will give you few advices:
First off, never rush anything. Give some time and words to introduce situation, location and characters, and make the reader feel that the ponies move from one place and situation to another in natural pace instead with a speed of light.
It is alwyas good to start with place introduction, for example, sacrefice one or two sentences to show how the room or area where the ponies are looks like, or if you can, have one pony describe the area by looking at it.
Never make walls of expositions. Try to show or explain something by making characters talk to each other, or by describing something shortly.
Try not to be to repetitive with words. especially with names. If you see 5 "Twilight said" in one sentence, give some variarity like: "the unicorn" "she" and so on.
If you want to write a tiny pony story, I think you can learn a trick or two form story I wrote: "Celestia's Tiny Student"
This was my first story I wrote, and I had huge problem with writing walls filled with exposition and I was rushing, or telling instead of showing (for example, instead of writting "Twilight looked cute as she slept on Celestia's wing," it is much better to write "Twilight perched herself against the princess's wing, sinking into the sea of soft feathers before curling into a little purple ball. A sight which put a cheerful smile on Celestia's face while melting her heart."
With help of many pre-readers, I rewrote the "prologue" at least 4-5 times. Just take a good look at it, and it may help you learn how to start a tiny pony story.
If you would prefer to take example of higher quality tiny-Twilight story, check this "Ponyville's Tiny Librarian" This is a sequel I wrote when I was more experienced writter. I would suggest you to look into "prologues" in both of those stories and use them as example how to start a story of your own.
I hope I helped. Good luck.
5407664 Sometimes constructive criticism can be taken too far, to which your comment is a prime example. Don't get me wrong, I do agree with what you're saying (to an extent) but a more gentle approach is better in the long run. Instead of writing your wall of text stating all the negatives, and problems with the story, try being more positive and encouraging; being that direct and simply focusing on the problems is most likely going to make the author feel terrible, which is very wrong and generally means your advice will be seen as rude and ignorant of his/her's feelings, which again is very wrong.
No hard feelings 
You may not be trying to come across this way, but believe me it is bound to happen and cause others' pain, which again
you guessed itvery wrong; please just take my advice to heart and don't be blind of others' feelings5406448 Don't mind him/her, he's/she's just a bit
what's the word I'm looking forsillythat's the one. He/she should learn from his/her mistakes if he/she takes the hintAnyway, I kinda went off on a tangent... Sorry about that
This is how one does constructive criticism properly, take this as an example CommanderX5
"I liked the story as a whole, and found the premise to be silly and enjoyable; you might want to work on the pacing and transitions, because the story felt a little rushed.
An example would be when Twilight
darnit can't use magically because of... well... magicspontaneouslyperfect fit!arrived at Sweet Apple Acres and then found tiny AJ almost instantly. I would've like it better if Twilight, upon arrival, called out to AJ and then not having received an answer, would travel to the farmhouse to find Granny Smith, Applebloom, and Big Mac. to ask where AJ was earlier. Then after being told she was out bucking apples, Twilight would head out to find her.However, even with these issues I did still enjoyed the read.
Don't feel down about all the criticism, we all learn from practice, and writing is difficult to properly master. With a little nudge in the right direction I'm sure you'll improve greatly in your works.
5480544 I will say that I think I'm not built for authorship. Though, Name Tag, MVLP, and Never Forget... were my aces.
5480737 I like to offer help in any way I can, whether that be helping aspiring writers become better at the craft, or simply leading others' out of the darkness
I realize that my writing has a different demeanor than that of my peers, plus it seems to come more easily to me. That being said, I humbly try and help others that struggle or need a little direction.
The trick to writing is letting your imagination guide you, while your grammar makes or breaks the product. We all have different styles of writing, which makes us special and also turns each paragraph into its own work of art.
You have a very creative mind and imagination, which some of the most skilled writers lack. Plus I'm certain you have great potential, based on what you've already written. Just remember, the key to a successful story is fluency from one paragraph to the next, and details that make the reader be able to picture every scene, and connect with the characters on an emotional level. Let your imagination soar, creative mind thrive, and then fluently type all of your ideas onto the page.
The most important thing to remember is not to rush into things, take it slow, and make everything flow as if it were a river of words.
5481071 I'll take that as a compliment!