During a particularly intense day at the studio, the interrupting manager was warmly welcomed. Octavia had a couple hours to kill, and there was no way she would be spending them not sitting at home with a warp cup of tea between her hooves. Once at her house with a pot of tea brewing, she hears the sweet singing of Sweetie Bell. "Well, we do need another vocalist..."
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Looks like a cool story, and I'd like to see where it goes. Tracking.
You've got a couple of verb tense issues, though. Did you notice? Might want to watch out for that. For example:
Another thing to note is that "finally" has two Ls in it, and commas are used with said tags, not action tags. The writing guide will explain that.
I'm not trying to be critical or anything, just letting you know there are things you might want to watch out for next time. If you are still insulted, tell me so.
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Nope, sounds about like me. Hehe.