Finding a Rose

by anonymouswolf

Rose sells a rose

Interest 1, Roseluck for a slice of life story.

Observation day 001

It is now early in the morning as Roseluck
glumly trots to "the Three Flowers." her mood was heavy as one that was at their goldfish's funeral.

Roseluck owned "the Three Flowers", or part of it. She and her two sisters Lily and Daisy created this shop with a dream, but that dream was trampled like the poor pony who tripped on black friday. They soon realized that they couldn't keep a shop open that just sells magical flowers in a small town like Ponyville. The only real consistent day ponies buy flowers is hearts and hooves day, Leaving the only one who bought them on a regular basis Zecora. To survive they branched out to serve coffee and non-sugar treats. (Surprisingly no other shops in Ponyville served sugar free treats.) Becoming more of the café then a flower shop.

Rose finally got to the café and unlocked the door with a key that in my opinion, had an overly cheerful rose. she looked in despair at the apron she would have to wear once again. It was a solid blue with a name tag in the shape of a rose that said RoseLuk. Her sister forgot to put the C In Her name and the blue totally clashed with her main. She distinctly remembered the look of amusement on her sister's face, when she realized that she forgot to add the C.

Financially they were In a jam, although delicious, it's a sticky situation. In splitting the money between her two sisters and their adopted fool they were usually tight on money. But they learn to adapt, keep a good budget and never buy groceries at the same time.

She set out to work immediately, wall mumbling the song of winter wrap up. She swept the floor, put in some more baked goods in, and washed all the tables twice.

After that to the flower room Roseluck went. She trimmed the little bushes, watered all the flowers, she went over to Lily's enchanted lilies turning one of the rocks so the arrow pointed north, and did other basic gardening things. Rose turned to the final thing that she needed to do a rose she spent so much time growing, a beautiful black and red rose. it had a enchantment on it so, it would never wilted. She smiled and strengthen the enchantment.

It was time for the shop to open, so she flipped over a sign so now read open. Rose sat behind the counter and waited, and waited, and at last long she waited. Deciding nothing was going to happen the mare sat and read.

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Waves crashed upon the rockside, as Tulip looked up to her love. The drizzle of the downpour was enough to make one shiver in agony.

The cream-colored mare stuttered "D-don't leave me."

"Give me a good not reason to," said the overly buff stallion.

"I love you, I always have...

"Um, okay then, How long have you been a fan?"

*squee* Rose's fantasy world crashed down around her. Lying behind the counter Rose realize she had a bad habit of reading her books out loud.

"I-i didn't mean that I was reading a book out loud and, and um..."

The pony on the other side let out a huge breath, "good I didn't want to have to break another mares heart ."

Still laying down behind the counter Rose replied "you do that often?"

"Um, Maybe?"

Rose rose up and eyed a blue Pegasus with a cutie mark of a gray misty heart with lightning going through the middle of it, maybe his special talent was breaking hearts Rose wondered.

The awkward of the room came to a boiling point when none of them said anything, "Nice bookmark" The stallion said trying to dispel the awkwardness and failing miserably.

Pulling herself together she said, "Welcome to 'the Three Flowers', the enchanting place where you can find flowers and food."

"Oh, really," The stallion said with a huge grin. "I thought it was the three farters."

The rose colored mare just stared at the stallion.

The flabbergasted stallion continued "Oh come on, it was funny, it was a pun about farting!"

"No, just no," was the reply.

"Um, yeah I came here to get some flowers for my date later today," The blue pegasus continued.

"The roses are this way. What you like, we have. we have quite the selection."

Indeed they have a huge collection. His mouth dropped when he entered the big room filled with flowers.

"I don't even know where to start." The blue pony honestly stated.

"Well, is this is just your first date, or is it like your anniversary?"

"it is my fifteen, Although I don't know about her." He replied looking around the room for the perfect flower.

*Smack* The mare's hoof found her face for brief moment.

"I meant together"

The blue stallion gave her a weird look.

"You know, with her, The one you're talking about... Like are you going on the first date with the girl you're going to going to date with tonight."

Realization hit the stallion like a ton of bricks.

"Oh, yeah it's our first date together."

"then you should probably just get her a lily, something low-key" rose said, her mind wandering to her sister and revenge for the crappy apron she is wearing.

But her words fell on deaf ears. As the Pegasus pointed his hoof and shouted. "I want that one!"

She looked in horror as she saw the rose he was pointing to.

the beautiful black and red one.

She almost straight out refused. But money was tight she knew if she sold that rose to the stallion. It would keep them afloat for another couple of months.

"250 bits," half wishing that he didn't have the bits.

He smiled and gave the money to her. Oblivious of her ears pinned back and her soft tone.

"Thanks, oh and I also saw some bagels can I get one of those I kind of forgot breakfast." He said smiling and bouncing up-and-down.

she quickly hid her pain under smile. "Of course what kind you want?"

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Rose grimy had her head resting on the table ears pinned back looking at nothing in particular. With the opening of the door she put on her best fake smile. (which looks like Skeletor smiling by the way) When she realized it was just her sister she returned her previous state.

"Rosie, what happened?" Lily her sister said soft tone. Noticing the state of her sister.

"Lily I sold it. it took me a whole year, a lot of trial and error, and I sold it for 250. "

Instantly knowing what her sister was talking about she replied "why? You put your heart and your soul into the rose, why just sell it?" Fearing the answer was her.

Rose started a self righteous speech, managing her best dramatic voice said, "Because were behind of on payment, struggling to keep this business afloat. It became necessary don't say it wasn't, because it was. if our dream needs sacrifices, I will sacrifice."

Realizing that Rose would scare off customers with THE SMILE OF SKELETOR, she decided to give her sister a well deserved break. "Why don't you go home ponies rarely come in the winter, I think I can hold out until Daisy comes."

Dropping from the counter like a diseased animal she grabbed her book and solemnly walked out of the store. On her way out the door the world became pink. as she collided with another pony.

"Hey, Rosie the awesome, how's it going," said Pinkie in A overly cheerful voice.

"Okay," "Rosie the awesome" mumbled.

"Do you know what I do life puts me down? keep on hopping, hopping, hopping, that's what you do you hop, hop, hop." The Pink pony sang.

The first time since yesterday Rose truly smiled. "Thank you Pinkie I think I needed that."

"So Rosie where are you headed?" Party pony asked.

"Well somewhere," She decidedly replied.

"Well don't forget to have fun." Pink pony said.

The pink pony continued on her way, to the bakery. On the way there she passed the Ponyville Park, and stopped on one of benches there was a shadowy figure in a black robe with a hood. She eyed him suspiciously for a moment, "Nope not sad." She continued on her way. The figure looked up from what he was writing in the direction where party pony was making her bouncy retreat. The hooded figure spit the pencil out of it's mouth and it smiled with all the fangs it had.

Author's Note:

Scary pony in a bath robe, I'm going to go hide under the covers.

Next time on: Finding A Rose.

Rose battles for a piece of pie.

"It's my pie and I will eat it!!"

"You shouldn't have a delicious pie, it will make you fat, therefore I will do you favor by eating it."

"Nnnnnnoooooo pie. how could You?"

Comments

[fallen starr]

Hey! So the premise of this story seems interesting, and I can tell that you've put some effort into it, but it could use some work. You have Randomly Capaltalized Words all-over the place in the first part, and there are places where you have a lowercase letter when you need an uppercase one.

Another thing I noticed was your description. It seems like you're trying to add details, but you're simply stating them instead of letting them live. For example, in the beginning when you wrote "She distinctly remembered the look on her sister's face when she realized that she forgot to add the C."
Instead of simply saying that, maybe say something like, "She remembered the sheepish look on her sister's face when she realized that she forgot to add the C." That gives more of a visual for your readers.

As I said, you got what seems to be a solid idea, and with a bit of editing this will be a really great story.

[anonymouswolf]

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Thank you for the feedback, it will be most helpful in the long run.

[DashiesYandere]

Ok can I ask you a question.
Is this story Rainbow x Soarin or Rose x Soarin because I am so confused.