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LightningBass94
Dying. Funny thing, that. It never happens how you expect it.
LightningBass94
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Loved it! :D
6308990 Thanks, man!
I was starting to believe no one would comment on it. 
Lovely story. Twi was cute.
6309453 Thank you so much.
6309453 Also, thanks for the follow.
6309509
Sure thing :)
Cute, short and sweet.
I especially liked the line about the fireworks colors shining on Rarity's coat. It created a nice visual in my mind!
I'm assuming you mean Derpy/Ditzy?
They said at Bronycon that her name wasn't actually Muffins. I think.
A really nice short little story. Nervous Twilight was really cute. I felt that all the characters personalities were spot on as well.
A cute little warm and fuzzy story.
Absolutely cutsy wootsy adorbs! I love that story and I'll do everything so that others can read it and enjoy it as well!
6310691 Thank you so much.
It was actually that mental image which inspired this story. 
6310959 Did they? That's good, because I hate that name. I was just conforming to the will of the almighty Hasbro.
6311301 Thanks! I appreciate the feedback.
I'm glad you enjoyed the story.
6311643 Much appreciated!
Personally, I really enjoyed it, thought it was cute! If anything though, the one thing I might add to maybe improve is I'd advice against specifically referencing episode names like what you did with:
It kind of disrupted the flow of things, at least for me. I feel it would have been better just to remind the events of the episodes without specifically naming it. But that could be argued as more of a personal thing. Overall, I really loved it though!
6312219 I wasn't naming the episode. Lol. They called their study sessions with Twilight "Twilight Time."
Regardless, I'm glad you enjoyed the story.
6312268 Oh, well then I'm in the wrong! I completely forgot that, I read it as you were just referencing the episode. My bad, I'm sorry.
6312326 Lol. No sweat. I didn"t take any offense. =P
6317503 Thanks so much.
I really like to paint a picture for my readers so that they can feel immersed in the world, because I always love it when books do that for me. 
RARITY Y U SO PUPPET MASTER =yyyyyy
You owe me a follow up to this, you tease. There wasn't nearly enough RariLight for my tastes.
6332199 Ha! If I get an idea for a sequel that's not the same, standard "first date" story we've all read a million times, then I'll definitely write it. For now, however, this is stand-alone. It's enough to show you the beginning of something potentially beautiful, while still leaving so much more to the imagination.
You set the atmosphere very nicely and you avoided 'tunnel vision'-ing the actual ship. It was very well written and the dialogue was true to form. Excellent job. Have an upvote and a fave.
6424731 Thanks so much.
I have to say, that was hilarious.
Twilight is a very fun character to play with her awkwardness. I feel though that you may have taken it a tad bit too far, and if you ever think about, a book-worm version of her asking Rarity out would seem a little more in-character than a blurt. However, you did very well describing the emotions she was going through and had some neat comparisons.
I could be wrong, considering I haven't seen any of the new season so she may have changed a little, but this is just my take on it. Very well written, if a bit slow at first, but that's often how love stories work.
Congrats again on a good short. ^-^
6783458 Thanks!
I'm glad you enjoyed it. I'm a fairly nervous person in these types of situations myself, and so I drew on my own experience in dealing with that. Taking into account, of course, that Twilight has her own personality, a lot of the time it's just easier to get everything off your chest all at once before you Scootaloo out. 
6783573 I can understand that better thank you'd think.
But thank you for the indulgent read. ^-^
6783612 No, thank you for reading.
6785026 Glad to! I hope you keep writing. ^-^ More than likely I'll pop up on your page again.
6785117 Oh, I'm an avid writer.
I've been slow over the holidays. (slower than my usual slow) That'll change once I get back home and get over my inevitable New Year's hangover. 
I've had a lot of stuff in real life preventing me from writing regularly, unfortunately.
6785551 Lucky. xD The holidays is when I can actually get writing done. Though my next semester isn't as tough as last one so I will hopefully be able to get more done.
6786253 The next 8 months are going to be pretty hectic for me as I transition out of the Navy. Once I move back home though, I'll have all the time in the world to write.
Hmmm. RariLight isn't one of my top five-ships, though I do like a good dose of it from time to time. This little tale of yours was well-paced, wonderfully written. The characterization was spot-on, there's really nothing to nitpick.
There's a 'but' in there - of course there is. There always is one.
One of the major difficulties with RariLight - or, for that matter, any Rarity-ship besides RariSpike - is... yeah, well, Spike. Beside the fact that he still had no episode to really shine, we've seen him grow up quite a bit. And he still has his crush on Rares. Your story was technically perfect. It's just... ending at such a convenient point. Right before Twilight would've to deal with telling her greatest moral supporter that she's... dating his crush now. Yeah. Can't see that going wrong or launching any drama at all.
As it is now, it's a well-written piece of cute and fluff. But if you ever want to write a sequel? Try to give that scaly little fellow a little love and take the next logical step: Dealing with the crush that was there first. Since you seem to be quite a talented writer, I would be interested in reading your take on that.
Besides that: Awesome story.
Thank you!
6894778 Thanks for that well thought-out comment and praise. I really appreciate it. I hadn't thought of doing a sequel, but you've actually succeeded in giving me a small stroke of inspiration. That's a really great idea, and I think I might just do that. Thank you so much!
6895481
I'm always happy to help! Now I have to follow you around, waiting for that sequel to pop into existence. Not creepy at all.
6896912 Ah, but that's my evil plan to obtain followers. MUAHAHAHAHA!!!
Great little story. Quite well worded and all of the cast were in character. And I always enjoy when Rarity's teasing side makes an appearance. She's a sly one. Bravo!
7344746 Thank you! I love writing Rarity, and I don't often enough.
I'm glad you enjoyed my story.
7345241 I am the same way. Rarity is my favourite character, so I love when she's written well. Most of my stories nowadays revolve around her.