This story is a sequel to The Great and Powerful Student
There's a new talent contest in Equestria and Trixie naturally wants to take part! The only problem - every unicorn has to have a partner, and Twilight is an alicorn and not eligible to join! Trixie is forced to work with a young filly, and relucantly has to learn teamwork helps even the most magnificent unicorns.
(Sorry this ended up in the wrong group folders, mouse spazzed out and idk how to undo! This can be understood easily without the prequel but I thought I'd attach it anyway just in case)
Chapters (5)
That should be 'colt', as a filly is a female young horse.
Other than that, it's off to a good start.
6428728 Thanks for commenting! It doesn't seem to be off to as good a start as my other stories for some reason, any idea why? Is it just because of that mistake?
6430086 I can't make any assumptions on that, I'm afraid, though I doubt many readers would be put off by a minor detail like that. It's probably just a lack of exposure. You should put your works in some appropriate groups and see if that turns up more attention.
6430094 Okay, I'll try that, thanks. I might try that with my other stories too.
6430094 That helped, thanks :3 I just got bombarded with favourites XD
6433080 Thanks so much for the comment! Yeah Trixie's attitude is always fun xD
6457225 What is it with me and genders XD I sometimes accidentally call my friends "he" instead of "she" or the other way around XD In the words of Rocket Raccoon, I "got issues"
Anyway thanks for the feedback. Yeah I like your idea better really, I didn't really have a chance to think when I was writing so I'm surprised it turned out even readable.
Thank goodness I did a bit of planning first or goodness knows where the story would've gone XD
Pacing is my biggest problem even when I'm focused it seems (someone described my other Trixie story as a fever-induced dream).
Trixie: Well that's because Trixie is just so awesome that the story can't keep up
Me: Really Trixie, breaking the 4th wall in the comments section? Do you even know what will happen if you do that on YouTube?
Trixie: "Trixie hates the Republican Party and everyone who disagrees is a peasant" Done!
Me:
Run for the hills!
6457225 Glad you liked it anyway
6483735 Thanks so much for the feedback and the follow :3 I do like the idea of Trixie muttering "dork" quietly as she leaves Twilight's room, it does seem Trixie-ish
And thanks for the advice on connecting scenes too - I definitely needed that. Just slowing down the pace doesn't seem to work in my brain, so finding a way to connect scenes a bit less jarringly would be useful.
I'm thinking my next story will be something other than the usual Trixie or Scootaloo stories, but after that I could (and should... and will) definitely come back to Trixie and Gold Star again, they definitely still have some way to go as characters. I am a bit worried though that having a sequel to a sequel could drive some people away XD I'm nearly making my own season xD
I think I will do it though, like you said I didn't really give enough development to Gold Star here - and I have a few ideas in mind for Trixie too, I just have to decide which one to go with XD