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chief maximus
Why do I write? Because I can't draw! I write mainly as an outlet, and don't take it too seriously. If you like what I write, awesome! If not, that's cool too.
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Very nice to see you expand on the idea of Rainbird Dash, in a really interesting way, too.
Image is by NCMares, by the way.
...Wat.
Missing end quotations.
Missing more quotations.
Titles need capitalization. 'Doctor' 'Friendship'
Fluttershy
Some of the dialogue sounds broken(if that makes sense). Hard to give good examples other than when RD speaks. Intentional?
This was a fun read
I wonder what Dash would have done for a mating dance haha
And this is where my suspension of disbelief got shattered. There is absolutely no way anything can't be cured with more cowbell.
Shattered, just like how ice breaks.
Pegasi doing bird things are always good for a laugh. This was a fine example of that. Thanks for a most amusing story.
Reminds me of Hyzaku's Twilight's Bird Feeder, which is a five-star favorite of mine.
Too bad Discord. If it only run a little longer, maybe he would have gotten a snackish princess on a state mandated diet...
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Speaking of, I haven't pestered him about that lately... >.>
It's wise to avoid Twilight's science mode.
That description made me laugh.
Pegasi acting like birds is one of my favorite art memes. Thanks for this pile of silly!
Well played.
I don't know that I've ever seen a story that pulled this kind of thing off so well before.
Plus, Bird-Horse shenanigans are hilarious.
Sapient, not sentient. Dogs are sentient, People (or ponies in this case) are sapient. But otherwise, quite the fun little story.
Yeah, could have seen who was behind it all
Good story though! Gave me a few good chuckles.
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Brilliant!
Bird horses gonna be bird horses.
Also, am I the only one not surprised by the culprit being Discord?
I would totally read that.
I'd totally write that too, if I had any sort of storytelling skills.
Oh, you.
This was fun.
6528852 Too bad he hasn't updated it in nearly two years.
6528024 Something like this I imagine.
That was hilarious
upvoted.
That said, and it's a minor point, but I would have gone with something other than the
A WizardDiscord Did It ending. I was expecting the reveal to be something like that Rainbow Dash had a one-night stand with a griffon while in Canterlot, and now her indiscretion is going to be in all the biggest medical journals in EquestriaThis was cute and funny.
Meanwhile, on the other side of Ponyville:
Doc: Why, hello there, Dinky! How are you today?
Dinky: I'm fine. Mom's acting a little weirder than normal, but it's nothing worth mentioning.
It's rare that a story actually has me laughing audibly as I'm reading it. Kudos!
Well Rainbow's flying high now.
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BIRD!
RAINBOW WANT A CRACKER?!
I believe this is worth mentioning.
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Why are you so grand mr maximus
6531195 it's both a gift and a curse
6531206 ahh, the gift of genius... so beautiful, yet so harsh...
I cannot favorite this hard enough!
Amusing, but this feels a little rushed.
And then, just a few paragraphs later:
Then how did anyone know it could manifest in pegasi?
There are also a few quotation errors.
And some clarity issues.
It took me a second to realize that was Rarity, not Spike, as there was no attribution.
Milady.
I don't mean to nitpick, because I do like this story (I particularly liked the bit with the mirror
), but you might want to check it over a little more.
Thanks for the fun read!
"Although we probably should've!"
Goddammit Discord!
6531965 I fixed the first item. That little mix up was actually the original direction I was going to take the story, then decided to make Dash the first recorded case, and missed that paragraph during my revision. Fixed the other stuff too, and also, thanks for reading it!
6529885 This happened. Dash is a little piggy.
Notice that even Dash mistook her reflection for a male? :D
6530741 Mama's gonna worry I've been a bad bad boy
6531993 Sure thing! Like I said, it was a fun little read.
This was a little rushed, a little clunky, but overall it was still a good story with a very interesting premise. Mandated "C".
"And by the way, I'm not cheap."
No, she's cheep.
(Ok, that was a cheep shot.)
-_-
The 'where am I' cliche killed this comedy for me.
Missing a quotation mark here.
That was so funny, my new favorite rainbow short, though I wonder what other musings she has when she's high?
There's a bird looking at me, I think he wants a fight. Gimmie a sec'
I guess you could say Rainbow's got her feathers ruffled...
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6530851 6530014 Yeah probs, thats what I had in mind
... as long as it was for Mac though hey Jake ;)
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brilliant. just perfectly brilliant!
6532946 Goddammit, Carlos >_<
6530851 You'll notice that mating dance is WORKING, though - she's slowly popping a wingy! XD