"What happens when you change so much that you don't recognize yourself? What happens when you push everypony away to fit in, even going so far as to shatter your own heart in the process? What do you do to fix everything while you still can?"
Over the years Spike and the rest of the Elements of Harmony have seen a dramatic change with Rarity, even going so far as to degrade the quality, the uniqueness of her dresses. Only after confronted by Twilight and breaking Spike's heart does she finally see what has become of herself. Determined to fix it though, she sets out across the land of Equestria to try and rediscover who she is.
Well a good first start. I can't wait for more.
Applejack ain't going anywhere without her hat
Needs a bit of proofreading. Very few typos, but word choices and other awkward things are an issue. 'Anymore' isn't used like that, for example.
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Honestly, you had me until this sort of thing:
It's just... tough to believe Rarity, who was turning selfish and work-oriented, would decide that she wants to be in love with Spike and that's the reason she leaves. Even if you want her to fall for Spike eventually, that's rather fast, isn't it?
6881328 To answer your question, in the Prologue she was always in love with Spike, she just thought that he had changed, not herself. In this chapter, she had said she wasn't the 'best of friend' lately, and also too she had been ignoring her own sister. It's not just because of Spike that she's leaving, but because of her friends and family, and how she has turned their back on them. That's what I was trying to go for, sorry for any mix-up.
I decided to give this a chance, looking forward to future updates.
My only complaint was I felt the kiss was a bit "hot and heavy" for a first kiss. Something more sweet rather than a make out session especially in front of their friends (^o^) but like I said early I'll definitely check out further chapters.
MUD-DIRT-DUST! Go away dirt!
mud-dirt-dust Zzzzzzzz Zzzzzzzzz
Rarity ? You're making too much noise. . .
What are you doing here?
Delivering a letter from Spike
you needn't bother yourself on such a long flight Ms. Hooves
That's ok Spike's sleepin right over there....see!
That best be grown-up Sparity.
I was hopping could avoid a lesbian shipping but I guess not. The Sin-ometer is about to break!
6943275 Sorry to disappoint, but as I said, one of my favs
Its a really cool story cant wait to read more
Its awesome so so so sweet! must read more!
XD everyone should know that if two of the Mane 6 would be in a relationship and/or marrage it would be Twilight and Rainbow. Just saying
why!? WHY!? why must u stop!?
could i finish it plz? let me know soon
WHY DID YOU CANCEL IT?!?!?!??!?!
This chapter went from 0-100 real fast. In other words it was very rushed but it sure has alot of potential. Good job
Dead and forgotten? Or just waiting to be struck by lightning?
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More like dead, I've just never felt right writing for ready established characters, and as much as I love the Sparity pairing, I want to focus more on characterization of my own OCs and maybe some lesser established characters, cause in all honesty, characterization is where I always seem to fall short.
It never helped that I didn't really have an end goal in sight for this story. It was sort of a "what if" scenario I had thought of one night. More so though I decided to move away from the main characters so that like I said before I could focus more on actually creating characters.
To be honest, in the long run my goal is to write my own books, but first i want to get better at creating what makes a character who they are, thus i do still write fanfictions for that sole purpose. That being said, i am currently working on a major project that will pay some homage to Sparity, but more of as a mention to their relationship or maybe a cameo somewhere.
To answer you honestly though, I have no real intention of ever actually finishing this story, so if anybody feels the desire to actually continue then by all means more power to you.
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damn, sorry to hear, this was an amazing story too, good luck on the next one.