Literally translated from Latin: Spike Dragon. This is the recounting of the tale of a little purple dragon that was ranked very lowly in the social class. He was mistreated by all as childish and even womanly in some instances. Finally, through the wise words of a previous dragon king found in an ancient speech, he gains power and ascends to the throne. Follow Spike as he defeats all who stand in his way.
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Spike needs one of these:
i.imgur.com/PGp17.jpg
Okay the idea is interesting, but that where it starts to take a turn for the worse.
Republics do not have kings.
No one puts in a letter "I know you love me, but I don't really want to talk about this right know." Now if he confronted her directly sure, in a letter with a gift no.
There's a lot of useless information. Twilight forgetting to close the door adds nothing to the story for example.
The dragons did a horrible job of proving their story.
You never explain what actually happens to the princesses. You made Rarity a gold digger, which prompted a
from me.
Spike never did anything to the girls to reconcile for, at least not directly
.
A huge number of grammatical errors (not that I'm one to talk) and a decent number of spelling errors.
It could be a really cool story but as it is, it feels rushed. I found the fact Rarity didn't want Spike having a mustache hilarious, as well as the way Spike defeated the princesses. See if you can find a proofreader or editor, it needs work.
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It was just an idea, and also, I have no idea what you're talking about with the spelling. I have literally scoured the enitre thing and I only found some grammer errors. I'll admit, there were a lot of gaps in this thing but I think you should've at least just let it go. I mean come on, when I see some fic that has so many spelling errors that it's not even funny, and it receives so much good recption, it makes me wonder if I receive all of the sticklers on this site while they get the baboons.
730704 Harbonger is harbinger
arth is art
scource is source
sore is swore
it’s authenticity should be its authenticity. Possessive its has no ' only it's as in it is has one. This mistake was made multiple times.
Alicorn is always capped so is Unicorn, Pegasus and Earth pony.
When using dialogue if you're going to have something like, "Hi Twilight," Spike said, you use a comma at the end of the dialogue. Now if you have something like "You won't get away with this." Spike turned towards the princesses and exhaled a giant emerald fire ball, than you use a period.
Other numerous grammar errors.
Better to get reviews from a stickler trying to help then a baboon.
If I let it go, I would be cheating you of a chance to improve.
Sometimes i was like:
and sometimes i was like 
Loved this fic! All hail King Spike!!
Pies? seriously?........................AUTOMATIC FAVE!!!
this is in my opinion the best spike fic good job bro
Your Latin is wrong. Really, really wrong. You can't just use an online translator. Latin is a highly inflected language. You would need knowledge of Latin grammar before you can translate anything correctly. What you have there are two nominative words in the place of what should be two genitive words. The genitive case implies "of", so the word "of" in the title is redundant as well. If you want it to mean "The rise of Spike, the dragon", it would have to be "Clavi Draconis".
Well, this was a nice short fic, and I really liked the idea of dragons being an actually civilized ancient race!
Yet, I have the feeling you went over some important parts of the story with too little detail! For example, if you are going to show a "prophecy of the ancient oracles" being fulfilled, then you might want to explain a little bit who were the gods and/or mystical powers which chose Spike to be the harbinger of a new era, how did they make him fire the beam, and, last but not least, what was their true purpose and nature! 
The MLP universe portrays only Celestia and Luna as godesses, and a stronger ancient divine force of dragonhood which could predict the future and their downfall is something which might bring interest if interacting with Spike (maybe in a dream or a vision). 
Anyway, it was a happy story I really enjoyed, so congrats! Also, you might want to replace republic with kingdom, and I'm still curious why twilight got upsot about the library's roof being destroyed by Spike, while she didn't show any concern when he did the same thing to the Sugar Cube Corner's roof...
Haha! Love the twist ending!