A markless mare going by the name of Roseluck travels the country of Equestria in search of an artifact that could finally end the evil King's widespread effects of corruption. Kind of like a MLP/Skyrim crossover.
Long story short, it's another cliche "save the world from an evil villain" story plot!
I don't like writing descriptive statements, but I'll leave here 10 (bad?) things about my story, because I am a pessimistic person.
1.) The short description is basically the entire plot.
2.) The Skyrim/MLP crossover comes from my 100+ hours of Skyrim.
3.) The mistakes that you may encounter in the story is caused by my inexperience in writing. (This is my first story, okay.)
4.) The cover image is a crappy GIMP product of me testing out brushes and other features.
5.) Each chapter represents a day. It's natural the chapters should be long.
6.) I had so little motivation to write this story, so it took me around a month to write a chapter.
7.) The plot is cliche.
8.) The settings are cliche.
9.) The two sides in the story have really generic names.
10.) The vocabulary is somewhat limited.
11.) I am shaming myself so bad that I am actually starting to think that the story is pretty good.
12.) Writing 10 facts was too overused, and writing 11 facts is also overused, so I made 12.
Whatever, hope you enjoy this extremely incomplete, one chapter story (soon to be 7). Leave some feedback in the comments. Your words decide my fate if I should destroy this story or not :D
Fine, I'll make the effort to write a short description of the story:
Roseluck fights for the uncorrupted, the Lights, against the corrupted, the Darks. The Darks have taken over 90% of Equestria, and their leader, His Highness King Fthora (Greek for something, I think it was corruption? I like Greek) is close to achieving his prize.
Equestria's life force.
If he conquers the uncorrupted territories, he will harness enough power to be able to spread his influence across the sea, and conquer the known world.
But, with the last remaining uncorrupted fighting back fiercely, King Fthora needs to step up his game.
Too bad, Roseluck comes to the rescue. With the World Eater. (SPOILERS HAHA!!!)
(If my story seems extremely similar to someone else's story, it is purely coincidental. I almost never read stories on this site.)
Hey kid, heads up. Shorten yer description will ya?
"If you(?) won't do it, I'll do it"
Your pessimistic approach is not going to encourage people to read this story. A lot of people think that lowering the bar with self-depreciating remarks ("This is my first story", "English isn't my first language", "I have Asperger's", etc.) will give them sympathy and pity views, but it really doesn't work, because why should they read a story that even its own author has no confidence in? There's only so much time in my day I can spend on reading fanfics, and between one that looks promising and one that's actively discredited by its own author, which one do you think I'd pick?
Your story description is your best hook for readers, so make good use of it and make your story sound as interesting as possible if you want to get any attention.