Fluttershy never wanted to be anything powerful or great. She was an ordinary pegasus. Her only special talent was getting along with animals.
She wasn't a strong flier or gifted in magic. She could barely speak in front of a crowd.
But she is special. Unless Fluttershy can understand her own nature, she won't be able to save her friends. Even if she succeeds, nothing will be the same again.
Edited by: Looking for an editor.
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Chapters (15)
It has pottential. continue please
It's the silent one's that everyone has to watch out
7319239 especially when they are extremely nice.
Keep doing this it's good
Nice timing Twi.
I really need to find more stories as good as this.
This is a very good story.keep up the good work
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That ending tho.
OH SNAP CLIFFHANGER
THAT CLIFFHANGER!
No D: that cliffhanger.. my worst enemy!!! ; n;
Excellent story so far.. this is wonderful :D thanks for sharing the story.. i'll be waiting for the next chapter x3
Another cliffhanger to add to the collection.
Grab a rhyming dictionary, they are all over the internet.
Here's an example.
OH SNAP.
It'll probably take an hour or so just to come up with anything for zecora, because rhymes we all love rhymes! Great story so far though.
You’re mixing your it’s and its, but apart from that, it’s a very nice story so far. Keep it up
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Thank you for mentioning about it! I combed through the text and hopefully corrected them all.
I'm also relieved if my text is otherwise readable.
As we just saw, even when my grammar checker program tells me that I'm writing coherent English, there are things that both it and I will miss, so I appreciate when my errors are brought up.
I really need to find an editor one of these days, so I can stop worrying every time I publish a chapter that I wrote something that makes grammatically complete sense in my native language and none whatsoever in English.
7359618 There’s no need to worry about your grammar―that was the only thing I could spot. Either your grammar checker’s pretty good, or you’re giving yourself less credit for your English than what’s due.
Out of curiosity, what’s your native language? An inquiring mind would like to know.
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I'm from Finland, a small country in northern Europe.
Oh Faust-damn it I didn't realize this was the last chapter before the update. Great... now I have to wait. Keep up the great work!!!
Now things are getting REALLY interesting.
You sir are evil.
you might as well call Chrysalis, Cliff-Alis.
Get it? Cliffhanger/Chrysalis?
This is amazing!!! At least I now know I wasn't the only one who suspected that Chrysalis is closer to Fluttershy than she let on. Or the other way around because, I mean, why else was Fluttershy reluctant to hit a changeling? She certainly can, we have seen her against dragons, draconequie, and cocatrices
Will Fluttershy be badass in this story?
7372709 *facepalm*
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theresnostoppingmenow
I found the ending of the chapter too amusing to care that it was a cliffhanger.
So Chrysalis has a sibling?
Anyway, at this rate, I wouldn’t be surprised if every chapter till the end of the fic each ends with a cliffhanger.
7372709 sighs loudly
Well, it was original, I suppose. And it was admittedly quite a good pun.
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Puns are one of my few talents.
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Eventually, but she still has a long way to go.
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I'm bound to run out of them eventually, probably.
She does, we will find out more abour her family in the next chapter.
Puns are always welcome in the comments of my fics.
Well, this is... interesting, and I mean that in the best way possible. The writing itself isn't masterpiece quality, but everything is clean for the most part, which is already better than I can say for most fanfiction. You sometimes have an issue with "show, don't tell", and to be completely honest, it'd probably the only thing really taking away from this fic. I'll keep an eye on this. For now.
If you wanted an editor, I could probably help a bit with that. Most of the other fics I've been editing for haven't contacted me at all recently, so I have a little extra time here and there while I figure out what to do with my own fic
To be fair, that would have been my reaction, too.
It would seem that Fluttershy's comparison between Celestia and Chrysalis is accurate, down to a shared trolling nature.
So, what are the chances that the poor saps at the start of this chapter are meant to be Queen Fluttershy's lunch?
7372709 Why
7384007
Because.
I can't wait for you to continue the story.
Awesome as always and I can't wait for more!
Yeah, no.
Somehow, Chrysalis' plan will backfire, and whether it results in her death, her changing her ways, or the rest of the hive turning against her, it'll be glorious to watch.
I waited a while, and Im not dissapointed. As great as all tge other chapters
(I apologise if this comes off as rude)
7509348 Have to agree with you.
But why do i want to punch the queen bitch Chrysalis in the face and kick where the sun don't shine
Good thing Chrysalis doesn't know about Fluttershy's stare ability.
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I suspect scenario C is going to happen regardless. If she dies or becomes reformed, it will be because the Hive rebelled. Not that I think either of those options will actually happen, but I would be willing to bet iRL money that the hive is going to rebel. ...that is, if I actually HAD any money to spare. Barely staying in the black as it is.
7512882 I’m willing to bet IRL money in your stead. Imaginary Rainbow Lichs, of course. It’s a virtual currency.
I am very excited to read more! Poor fluttershy~
https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=9C-oFNrXFh8 will the changelings be like this.
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That would be spoilers.
I admit I'm doing a bit of rewriting, but fortunately most of the things in the finale were just like I thought they would be when I started this story. At least now I have a clear image what changeling kingdom looks like in style.
Thorax... So there is hope after all.
Nice to see this update again