A young Sunset Shimmer has a problem; her mentor and resident mother figure has had no time for anything but work recently. Now she just needs a way to fix it. Luckily, she has a cunning plan.
Inspired by a conversation Justice3442 and I had while discussing a piece of art I did over on my Deviant Art page. Not the cover art; that I did because I couldn't stop giggling wildly at the mental image.
As always, if anyone notices any glaring mistakes, or has constructive criticism, please let me know. I'm really not sure how to classify this, so I'll just stick with the Slice of Life tag and add more if people say I should.
Any italics not directly inserted in speech are internal monologue. Sunset talks to herself. Frequently.
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Very sweet. Have an upvote.
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Thank you very much!
I am now curious about the artwork that inspired this
Do you do requests?
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Oh, sorry, I didn't think anyone would much care about that, it's here
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Ah, I don't know? Depends on what the premise is and whether it's for art or a story. If you'd like something in specific feel free to PM me and I can let you know if it is something I think I can do. Cheers!
Aw, that was sweet and hilarious. How can young Sunset be both so cute and evil at the same time?! Yeah, Celestia is going to have to do something about those amoral tendencies, but for now, yay, so adorable.
This was absolutely adorable. I can actually imagine young Sunset Shimmer doing something like this. It's not quite evil more just "I want what I want and I can get it." Still at least she had the antidote ready and waiting. That does show some level of empathy.
One small nitpick. You mention Yaks tearing up diplomatic meetings. The episode gives the impression that Yak's haven't been open to Equestria since before Twilight's time. They do use the term moons which is sketchy at best and confusing at worse but I'm not sure they would be considered all that secluded if they were around about 15 years ago. Then again that would explain how Twilight got all that history on them. 15 years is just long enough to be long but not long enough to fade from history. Okay sorry I'm rambling it's just something I thought I'd bring up.
It was an enjoyable read. Thank you for it.
Well that was cute, and honestly seems like something a young Sunset with the best of intentions and absolutely wrong methods would do.
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Yeah, Celestia doesn't have a hope.
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Actually, the point you brought up about 15 years being long enough for ponies/people to be making statements such as 'they're extremely secluded, and their borders have been closed for a really long time.' But, still have functional information on a matter as simple as. 'They have to have everything done precisely to their liking or they will get very, very angry.' That semi time limit is a large chunk of the reason I chose to keep them in the story at all. I was wondering if anyone was going to call me on it.
After about fifty years, Intel like that is more likely to be outdated and considered an insult to uphold than it is to be accurate. So I personally always figured that a peace summit between the two countries happened well within living memory, but went so disastrously that relations between the countries were strained for a decade and a half. Essentially, think of it like the Cold War between the United States and Russia during the (I believe) 1980's to 1990. They weren't actively fighting, but they certainly weren't on peaceful terms either. It would also explain why Celestia wanted them as far away from her city as possible during the talks without running the risk of insulting them under the guise of "You don't like opulence, and the gentry piss you off, these are country folk trying to make a living, they shouldn't actively insult you."
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Thank you very much!
Oh, such a cute ending! But because of the "Nobleese Oblige" I must do this: Waga tomo KaGAmi!
https://youtu.be/xE2f1T6zdak
very cute story loved it
7626857 Fair enough. It wasn't a huge deal but I decided to bring it up. Does make you wonder why ponies would want to have peace ties with yaks. Maybe to stop them trying to invade? Maybe Twilight heard rumours about these past failed meetings and decided to try again? Maybe it came up in a conversation with Sunset herself. I dunno my mind is just firing stuff off right now. Keep up the good work! Have a nice day!
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I'm sorry, I don't understand that reference at all. I really don't watch Japanese Live Action stuff... but thank you very much for the kind comment.
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Thank you, I'm delighted you enjoyed it!
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Personal head cannon says that Twilight either got the story from Sunset or Celestia, and since the Yaks likely have tradeable goods that would at the very least be beneficial to the Crystal Empire, if not to the rest of Equestria retrying a trade agreement would have been a useful plan. So when Celestia asked her if she'd be willing to host the summit until she herself got there, Twilight jumped at the chance. Likely with the statement "Pinkie can make friends with anyone, how bad could they possibly be?"
Cold Wars aren't beneficial to any party involved. The Yaks likely wanted some of the pony produce, and the ponies likely wanted some of the Yak goods.
7632143 Kukukuku, I knew you probably wouldn't get the reference. I made it because the words "Nobleese Oblige" reminds me so much of that character.
Also, where is the fun in making the references I like if I keep worrying about people getting them or not?
Can you link the artwork that inspired this?
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Ah, alrighty then, it's been added to the long description for future people's curiosity, but since you asked directly, it's here.
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Very true my friend, very true.
That ending was cute as
, yo.
Ahhhh, loved Sunset and Celestia in this. I mean... not punishing Sunset for things like this but rewarding her with cake and ice cream is the sort of stuff that probably helped contribute to a melt-down in the future. Definitely feels like the sort of dynamic they'd have. Glad to see you turned this into a story.
7660509 I didn't have much choice! It wouldn't leave me alone.
Glad you liked the story though, thank you for commenting.
Okay, this was both hilarious and adorable.
And...is there any reason Celestia can't let them sit for exactly 24 hours? If she depetrifies them all at once, they might not even realize anything happened until they get home.
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That, my dear, was the plan.
This was adorable.
So cute and hilarious!
Cute, and very believable as well.
Sunset and Starlight both have that 'borderline evil' and creative mindset when it comes to solving things, so this felt like it could easily belong in that canonical backstory we haven't gotten for Sunset!
I also love cockatrices, so that alone got me to read this.
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I've always imagined young Sunset to be moderately self centered and mildy amoral. It makes her really fun to write. Especially against the paragon of good FOIL that Celestia is.
Besides, when they don't give us a backstory, the wild mass guessing is going to get pretty interesting.
Cockatrices are boss. Love me some stone chickens.
Guy that was sickeningly sweet.
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That was the intent, yes.
So was Sunset calling Celestia mom because she is her mom (biological or adopted), or just something they have? All the questions I got.
Love the story.
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Head cannon of Sunset was adopted by Celestia.
A lot of her behavior in the first EQG movie was more of a rebellion against her Mom, than a proper plan to be evil.
Daaw.
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Eh Tsurugi?!
Okay that was an abuse of power in the most adorable way given that all she really wanted was for her mum to enjoy her birthday I think karma will let it slide. Though I have to admit my favourite part had to be Raven's melt down
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I feel like young Sunset had two settings - calm, and 'eleven.' Not unlike now, come to think of it...
Raven was pretty fun to write. Thank you for the comment, I really appreciate it.
Well, that was cute
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Not wrong. And OMC! This was such an adorable piece. Would you like me to add it to the Chronological Timeline in MadVerse?
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Uh, sure? Justice did eventually incorporate the noodle incident into his own works.
Thank you, I had a lot of fun doing it.
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Sweet! I'll toss that in for you ^_^.
dawww
that is funny
not seeing the down side here.
An improvement if you ask me.
yes, yes there is. The stronger the mage the looser their grip on reality.
try the only way.