James Oakfield, an engineer for Avalon Technologies, has the job of testing out experimental technologies. On a day like any other, he is given a "small" box, a starship, and a note. Some mistakes and a computer's random number generator result in him landing on an unknown world.
Sex due to sexual reference, gore due to injury descriptions.
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Not bad so far - one thing I would like to suggest though is more spacing between paragraphs, a single empty line should make it easier to read
A lot of other hints are listed in the Ezn's guide from the FAQ - currently the link is down, but here is a copy:
http://web.archive.org/web/20160502070657/http://eznguide.neocities.org/