I've spent the past few years coming up with plans for every fictional situation imaginable, and with a 'recent' influx of X-turned-Nightmare stories, I've already come up with several but I never thought I'd be able to field test 'em!
Unfortunately, it looks like practice is harder than planning.
May contain beaten horse.
Tagged sex for possible innuendo as I usually can't resist.
Tagged the other bad things for the repeated failure of the MC to not be horribly maimed.
I've wanted to create one of those nutty over the top stories where the author blatantly doesn't give a flying fangdoodle for ages. So here I am making a lighthearted story despite all the horrible death and gore. Consistency of tone, I barely know her.
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Dunno if this story is going to pass as teen or get bumped up to mature, I'll just have to wait and see.
I can't wait to see where this goes.
This should be interesting. Definitely tracking.
This seems fun
Ok you got me interested go on.
Yep definitely interesting as hell :D.
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This is great.
I can't wait to see Moonie explain where she has been this entire time.
More!
This is, without a doubt, the darkest yet funniest things I've come across so far. Good job!
can almost see it next chapter twilight wakes up see she in bed with nightmare moon twilight.exe has crashed
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I guess it is acceptable that the main char already get's a strong feeling he knows where he is if he sees the castel, but I'm not sure if he should know it for sure without having some kind of proof like seeing some of the creatures in the Everfree or a pony.
I'm not that confident in my english, but shouldn't it be " And giving of a somewhat hungry feeling"?
To be honest for some certain shit they can pull off, I often prefer it if the main char doesn't knows about the show. I hope he is not a "Hey I know you already from the show and everything" kind of guy/Mare.
I also hope, but that is more a wish, he isn't planning on telling them to fast that he isn't Nightmare and plays dumb a bit making them trying to figure out what she does here and what she wants. I also hope Luna isn't just able to go into her mind and pry for informations, sometimes her or Cadance powers go a bit to far in my opinion. At least Luna is crossing a line with her powers in some stories.
He is a pony without legs in a certain moment in this story?, because he was partly eatend and kept alive?
Okay I get it that he isn't so strong yet, but it's still somewhat strange
Why the focus on him being eaten?
yes please burn him.
Now I really just want him to play dumb, act like Nightmare and act really loving towards Twilight. You now just caring enough to make it akward to her that her enemy is pampering her.
The chapter was nice enough.
Want me to proofread? Also, liked and followed.
The underlined section there needs to either begin with "within" or have "in" after "hour and a half"
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A quite interesting story, this is.
It's like one of the classic nightmare stories of the pony age. I love it!
With the catch phrase "Don't Panic!", was half-expecting Arthur Dent and Ford Prefect to show up midway though the story thanks to the Infinite Improbability Drive. There's a thought; have Zaphod Beeblebrox meet Princess Celestia and see who has an aneurysm first.
Has anyone ever done a crossover with the "Hitchhikers" universe?
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I'd say the most critical mistake was he/she forgot his/her towel.
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Definitely not froody. At least he/she already knows not to panic.
The Nightmare possesse clearly studied well from the school of Kojima.
Things are gonna be interesting when Twilight wakes up
My brain, it HUNGERS... for MOAR.
Ok night nightmare moon is the deadpool of my little pony now, i wonder if she will dress up and kill crime secretely from time to time XD, i know she will be as annoying :D.
This reminds me of anime a whole lot of wtf is happening and a hell of a lot less here's an explanation
Have a follow.
This is great!
Love this. Getting eaten was a genius way to relieve the self-insert concerns!
As crack fics go, this is off to a great start.
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I don't do drugs.
At least not until pony is considered a drug anyway.
moar! plz?
This was hilarious, and i greatly enjoyed it.
Do you plan to release another chapter soon? I can understand needing to take a while for ... reasons (I'm still only on chapter three), but I do hope to see an update soon.
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I do, and I'm about a third of the way through the next chapter at the moment.
If I really wanted to I could knock it out in a couple of hours like normal, but I've been very busy with course work and personal issues; I didn't want to rush it too much despite the somewhat hurried nature of the story.
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Where DAT chapter at
Fucking. Glorious. I need more, right now, you magnificent bastard. And I mean that in the best way possible.
You.. you trademarked it... Hahaha!!! Clever.
I need more please.😁
Guess who has over a week of time off? With the exception of having to write 20k words on various history topics while also being behind on some other projects that I can't work on until after the break but still cause a fair bit of stress in daily life which when combined with a spouse having a medical condition that cropped up out of nowhere and is going to cost a small fortune relative to my adult student income as well as my own general lazy nature on projects with no looming deadline and oh the horror, the horror! Please won't somebody think of the children!? Don't you dare spend your time writing shitty pony whatever the hell genre that story is instead of getting a job you lazy sack of manure, I'll have you know I have over 200 confirmed oc kills on my various bot accounts and have served for 30 years in the great emu war and I can't believe you kept reading this after it looked like it was going to become a copypasta, but if I didn't expect you to read this then who did I write it for? The answer may surprise you, but I'm actually your mother. Don't think I don't know how painful this revelation is, but if you want proof just go tell your father that "today is not a monday" and all will be revealed...
It's me, baby!
Next chapter posted soontm
I don't do drugs, only insomnia.
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That's how I've felt lately... with much the same results.
never understood the whole kill flash with fire thing I mean I get it waifu shouldn't date cause she belongs with x but they attempted it and didn't continue it cause it messed with peoples headcannons which is sad I think cause it could have added new plots to the show I mean look what they did with celestia and crystalverse sombra?....whatever the universe was called in the comics where they went to a alternate equestria celestia fell in love with sombra and was forced to leave him cause reasons I know I read it somewhere but I never actually read the comic I just remember the plot summary and few scenes in the manga point is it could have added something to the show I mean look at how many comfirmed couples there are that are either married comfirmed dated broke up I can only name a couple off the top of my head sorry for rambling point is why do so many people hate flash for twilight being written to show romantic intrest in someone in what could be arguably called almost non canon in the same way that the good king sombra from the manga and celestia fell in love and I dont think anyone lost there mind hated sombra for that
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HA! JOKES ON YOU MY FATHER IS RUNNING FROM THE LAW!!!! lazy ass sperm doner who is to much of a chicken shit to man up and smoked weed most of his teen life so his mental growth was stunted and now he won't pay child support for myself or my dozen-and-a-half half-siblings and if I ever see his face I'm a puch it harder than the bombs fell on Hiroshima(?).
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yay! ^^
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Eh I'll get yez... The plotholes... Ahh just gimme a few weeks, I'm workin' on it, me and my brothers Joey Jimmy Joe Jimmie Jo' Jammie and Johnson over here and we're taking our lunch break.
But seriously, soon(tm).
Is this dead, cause I don't want it to be.
More?
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Boo.
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Not soon enough.
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3 weeks isn't a lot of time to fully edit a 6k+ chapter if you haven't got much free time.
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Fair enough.
Well, it has been an year, how the editing is going?