As they continue their adventure, they stumble upon more enemies, Applejack in the Box, and a Super Rainbow hero who joins their team. As the three journey off, the army of bad guys is waiting. In these kind of conditions, it is brutal.
As they continue their adventure, they stumble upon more enemies, Applejack in the Box, and a Super Rainbow hero who joins their team. As the three journey off, the army of bad guys is waiting. In these kind of conditions, it is brutal.
Uh...
um...
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Well...
Emoticons in the synopsis are very... distracting. They're also unnecessary. And I've noticed emotes are in one of your other stories' synopses. Could you please... remove the emotes? I find myself unable to focus on what the story is about because of it. :/
Why are there emoticons in the synopsis?
Also, as a general rule of thumb, try to make each chapter roughly a thousand words each; it looks better and it gives the readers something to, well, read.
I can excuse the overuse of emoticons, but I won't excuse false advertising.
Why did you name it 'Fallout Equestria' when it has NOTHING TO DO WITH FALLOUT EQUESTRIA?
It's also a really lazy ponification of those weird Youtube videos. Like, no creativity at all. I'm surprised this even got past moderation.