After arriving in the final future, Starlight refuses to believe it isn't an illusion and tears the scroll, trapping them both and Spike in a scorched wasteland where the only safe place is Everfree.
Death is the end of a pony's life, their Twilight. As a newly ascended alicorn, one mare is in for the time of her life, no wait... time of her death, as she takes over one job most ponies never thought existed...
Princess Nightmare Moon had tried to keep it secret. She had feigned ignorance, but the charade could not last. She nocked the arrow. Tirek was a large target; he would fall easily. Then the true challenge would come: explaining herself to Celestia.
Syera, one of the last Saiyans sent to Equestria and her Destiny lies ahead with Twilight Sparkle, Pinkie Pie, Rarity, Rainbow Dash, Fluttershy, Applejack and most importantly Princess Celestia, Princess Luna Shining Armor and Princess Cadence
After reading: Well, grammatical mistakes are a plenty. But as far as world building is concerned it is alright. I'll have it written within the hour. And I'll include it with the first batch of releases next month.
Almost cried. That was so good. And not to echo everyone else; but yes, you need an editor. Do you use gdocs? If so, I wouldn't mind going over this for you and editing it. Grammar is somewhat of my forte. ~Melly~
Before reading:
Chrysalis tries to save her old friend.
After reading: Well, grammatical mistakes are a plenty. But as far as world building is concerned it is alright. I'll have it written within the hour. And I'll include it with the first batch of releases next month.
8115156 Tare it apart my good man
8115449 Yeah, I'll try to find an eider for anything I write in the future.
Almost cried. That was so good. And not to echo everyone else; but yes, you need an editor. Do you use gdocs? If so, I wouldn't mind going over this for you and editing it. Grammar is somewhat of my forte.
~Melly~
Here's the review...
This was a great story I’m thinking about the ending if Luna was saved or not.