When something in the Everfree Forest starts preying on the citizens of Ponyville, the ponies must decide where the line is between pony and monster while also confronting a question they don't know how to answer: what makes a good mother?
Very good story. I just want to suggest to you that you put spaces in between paragraphs. Also, I have problems with the following sentence, "Her age had been getting the best of her, lately. Had been for a long time, honestly." I think it sounds weird. I think a better sentence would be, "Her age had been getting the best of her lately; honestly, it had been for a long time." Just some suggestions.
Very good story, with a concept that I haven't read before. I'm going to see where this goes.
879232 Thanks for the comment! I'll be editing and looking over the formatting again soon, and hopefully at least part of a new chapter will be in the works soon.
Just released today and already on Hiatus?
Very good story. I just want to suggest to you that you put spaces in between paragraphs. Also, I have problems with the following sentence, "Her age had been getting the best of her, lately. Had been for a long time, honestly." I think it sounds weird. I think a better sentence would be, "Her age had been getting the best of her lately; honestly, it had been for a long time." Just some suggestions.
Very good story, with a concept that I haven't read before. I'm going to see where this goes.
Promising
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Thanks for the comment! I'll be editing and looking over the formatting again soon, and hopefully at least part of a new chapter will be in the works soon.