Coming out

Fluttershy has a secret. Now she needs to tell her friends about it.

Thank you Blueright for the cover

NOTE this is a short story

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Masterweaver

Masterweaver #1 · May 3rd, 2017 · 2 · ·

....why is this marked comedy?

*cough*

So. On the nature of the story, this is... honestly, not a story. I get that you're trying to express your thoughts on a social (or personal?) issue through the medium of ponies, and that's perfectly fine, but the simple fact is this is a scene that happens, and there is no... emphasis. Fluttershy is slightly nervous. And then, she is not. We don't see her struggle with this issue at all, we barely get a hint there would be reason to struggle... this is really a list of "Hey, I have a question, what about so and so?" "Oh, well here is the answer to that question," and no connection. You could swap out the character names at random, with any medium, and you'd have the same thing--heck, you could pull this from a 'primer on transgenderism' and it would be mostly the same.

I was actually expecting Fluttershy to reveal she's trans-tribal, believing herself more earth pony then pegasus...

All and all, this is a coming out with no conflict dressed up in ponies. Again, if this is an issue for you, I applaud your bravery and hope you have as good a result in real life, but as a story... this falls flat.

Xanderfox

Xanderfox #2 · May 3rd, 2017 · · ·

My problem is with transformation spells is genetic gender and gender identity being different really an issue in Equestrian? There would be no need for surgery and genetic gender could be changed so transponies would be fully functional as their new gender. Heck while it would be shady, their birth gender could be kept secret successfully. In such and environment transgenderisum would be treated much differently than it is among humans. Yes you aim is clear to state you views on transgendersum among humans though ponies, but I don't feel that explores the idea in a unique way that a fictional species offers. If you treat them as humans with the same problems and views as humans, why not use humans? Set it in the Equestrian girls universe where magical gender reassignment is not possible.

Comment posted by Patchwork Dreams deleted May 5th, 2017

Geeknerd

Geeknerd #4 · May 4th, 2017 · 1 · ·

Um.... wow... just ah shit. Way too fast and the responses of the main six feel.... forced. Like, I think most of us here have no problems with transgender people, but this just isn't accurate to their struggle

Comment posted by blackblood deleted May 7th, 2017

MrEditor