Luna tries to convince Celestia that the sun belongs to her because it is a star.
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Night Doughnut
"Writing is easy. All you have to do is cross out the wrong words." Mark Twain
Night Doughnut
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I absolutely love the concept. Made me smile in queue. Good job.
The true reason Luna became Nightmare Moon
Great story! It now sits in my favorites folder
8371292
Aww Thankyou!
8370881
Ha ha yes, it is
8370818
Thank you! You just made my day!
So cute. I like it so far.
Nice story. Can't wait for more of you stories in the future.
8371753
Thank you! There will be more, i am working on a longer story right now
8371750
thank you
Cute story, needs an editor.
8371881
Yha I just noticed some mistakes, thanks for pointing this out!
I surpise twilight is not there say "well sun is a star and I am the princess of stars now" and side with luna....
8372453
But Twilight is the princess of friendship....
8372769
but she has a star or group of them on her butt, luna was just in charge till twilight is ready and luna just in charge of dreams and moon
also many fan think twilight is princess of stars cause of her butt lol,
Lunas right
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I know
A little nice random read, I wouldn't mind if it was a little longer
The idea is a really great one. I like that even thousand years later, they are still bickering like little foals 
However, I'll be honest with you, there are lots of errors in capitalization and direct speech (Completely normal given this is your first story - to be honest I haven't yet met a writer that would have all of those correct for the first time
) and also some typos (Hoofs instead of hooves, for example.) We can discuss those issues if you wish. Other than that, have an upvote! 
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Thank you! I have noticed a few spelling and grammar mistakes as I look back on it. Upcoming stories will definitely be more edited. (I might get a proofreader).
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You're welcome. If you ever need help, feel free to shoot me a PM.
Fuller review here, but in brief: a brilliant concept, and potentially a very cute fic. In desperate need of editing, though.
A real shame this looks like it will be your only story, because an author with ideas like that would be worth watching.