Immortals should never fall in love... at least, that's what Celestia tells herself. The young princess has recently become the ruler of Equestria, and romance is the last thing on her mind. Until she meets a certain Prench unicorn, that is.
Loss. What is a loss? Is it losing something close? Or is it feeling like something inside you gave way? How do you cope with such a thing? No one knows for sure.
This story is a continued sequel of MLP season 4 and Spyro: Dawn of the Dragon. Spyro and Cynder have ben sent to Equestria to stop Malefor from taking over and cause chaos. They learned the secrets of friendship and must now rely on it to stop him.
Princess Twilight Sparkle and her friends have been summoned by Princess Celestia to embark on an expedition into the Frozen North to discover the origins of an unknown magic.
With war on the horizon, Celestia and Luna must find a solution before conflict threatens the peaceful ponies of Equestria. The last hope for Equestria sneaks onboard an enemy airship to find what secret weapon the Saddle Arabian's have in store.
Interesting... I shall read the next chapter soon I can't really make any larger judgements just yet, but so far, it seems that a great and dangerous adventure lies ahead. You have made really good job emphasizing especially the dangerous fact with how worried the princesses seem.
Sorry for taking so long to get back to this chapter It's a really great premise, I'm looking forward to the main story. I hope to see more of both Dagger and Spice there, for even this short adventure was enough to prove how skilled both of them are. And of course, I'm curious what 'Trouble' is gonna cause. You do well with descriptions, painting the atmosphere nicely. The downside I see are some punctuation slip-ups here and there, as well as some run-on sentences. Still, it was enjoyable
One thing my scientific mind can't keep out...
Moment by moment the airship lost altitude, and the less buoyant it was.
By what kind of airship were they travelling exactly? If I remember correctly, buoyancy is by no means defined by height/altitude as long as the whole volume of the body is in the liquid. Just a little nitpick, sorry
8414774 Lol, you're right to point that out. It was a slip up and was only meant to stay in there for a bit until my proofreader, the editor got back to me about edits. We both messed up on that!
But thank you, the next story will be as incredible. I'll work to describing things better and less run-on. :) Thank you for your critiques and I look forward to hearing your thoughts on future chapters!
Interesting... I shall read the next chapter soon I can't really make any larger judgements just yet, but so far, it seems that a great and dangerous adventure lies ahead. You have made really good job emphasizing especially the dangerous fact with how worried the princesses seem.
Wow... defiantly a good start to what sounds like an epic tale. I'm looking forward to Bonded!
And hello Crecious. Fancy seeing you here!
Sorry for taking so long to get back to this chapter It's a really great premise, I'm looking forward to the main story. I hope to see more of both Dagger and Spice there, for even this short adventure was enough to prove how skilled both of them are. And of course, I'm curious what 'Trouble' is gonna cause. You do well with descriptions, painting the atmosphere nicely. The downside I see are some punctuation slip-ups here and there, as well as some run-on sentences. Still, it was enjoyable
One thing my scientific mind can't keep out...
By what kind of airship were they travelling exactly? If I remember correctly, buoyancy is by no means defined by height/altitude as long as the whole volume of the body is in the liquid. Just a little nitpick, sorry
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Lol, you're right to point that out. It was a slip up and was only meant to stay in there for a bit until my proofreader, the editor got back to me about edits.
We both messed up on that!
But thank you, the next story will be as incredible. I'll work to describing things better and less run-on. :) Thank you for your critiques and I look forward to hearing your thoughts on future chapters!
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No problem, happens to all of us You're welcome!
By the way, the two 'guards' making bets there gave me a laugh
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Thank you so much!
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Your welcome