How did you find your way here? Nobody here but us ghosts.
Twilight Sparkle always tries to do things by the book and think things through logically. When logic isn't enough, Twilight must learn to soar above her failings and grow, with a little help...
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looks interesting, ill add it to the list
the unimpressive person just impressed me....well maybe until you create more chapters and add to the story :D
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Sorry, I don't plan to add anything to it. It's finished.
I love stories like this.
You managed to do in a couple of pages what others do not over the course of several chapters, and in addition to that you didn't make it feel rushed.
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I'm trying to work toward such brevity in all my works, but have been failing constantly.
I remember reading this a few months back on EqD and its still good!
-Minty
I can relate to this.
Well done sir. *brohoof*
Twilight an Alicorn...EPIC!
really good stuff!
Very nice.
Well, huzzah. A flying fic with both Twilight and Rainbow Dash and there's *no* shipping. And I do believe I just wrote "Rainbow Dash".
Gorgeously written. But, hey, it's you.
If there's any fault to the story, it's that the "twas all a dream" trope is easily predictable. However, that doesn't friggin' matter, because it's not like the fact that it's a dream is some dominating exploit. It's a mechanic to show some really nifty insight to Twilight and her aspirations and her future dreamimajigs. I especially liked the early hint that it was a dream by having Twilight rationalize about Spitfire, and then characters and elements of the experience started becoming more ethereal. It makes me wanna watch Inception again, or wutnot.
If anything, this oneshot exemplifies your lurve for Twilight Sparkle. I assume she's your favorite pony. If it's not and it's Pinkie Pie, I'll forgive you.
More stories should be written in first-person, considering that most authors of the fandom aren't daring enough to pretend that they have hooves... or a uterus.
-SS&E
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This is probably better than either of my other fics, yeah. Twilight is my favorite pony, indeed, although Pinkie Pie rates pretty highly on my list.
It's funny; this was actually written for a fic challenge that just said "A pony has a dream." In two days, I whipped this up. To my frustration, I haven't been able to perform similar feats since.
Glad you liked it, Skirts.
What a nice story! I'll admit, I was a little disappointed when it turned out it was just a dream (even though you could see it was going that way), however the pay-off at the end made the disappointment worthwhile, if that makes sense... the dream felt like it had real meaning instead of just being a cop out. Made me want to go and watch Inception again as well
And yeah, Twilight as an alicorn was pretty awesome
nice introspective story, great job
Cool story bro
um okay that stoy was both weird and epic at the same time.
>A double Sonic Rainboom
ಠ_ಠDouble Sonic Rainboom all the way across the sky.
Fun story, but how can you write a description like that and not have shipping ;-;
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Because among my many interests, selfcest is not among them.
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Oh no, I didn't mean to imply anything like that. More of the fact that the description hints at shipping, which would be a very different story. Geez, even I have limits. >.>
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I think those famous shipping goggles of yours are on a little too tightly. The description only hints at the involvement of another character in Twilight's personal struggle, not shipping.
Well-written...I'd add more but I have to go.
Silver out!
I quite liked the way it suggests it is a dream from the very first sentence. In a way, knowing it is a dream that will end makes it all the more meaningful and beautiful... (... wait a minute...that seems kinda profound...)
It can be taken either that Dash is a love interest or (and this is the notion I'm subscribing to) being the spontaneity she is, naturally becomes the equinopomorphic personification of Twilight's own repressed need for immersion. (Read : Dash is cool, we should all emulate her)
I especially liked the bit where she was flying.
I quite liked the way it suggests it is a dream from the very first sentence. In a way, knowing it is a dream that will end makes it all the more meaningful and beautiful... (... wait a minute...that seems kinda profound...)
It can be taken either that Dash is a love interest or (and this is the notion I'm subscribing to) being the spontaneity she is, naturally becomes the equinopomorphic personification of Twilight's own repressed need for immersion. (Read : Dash is cool, we should all emulate her)
I especially liked the bit where she was flying.
Lovely. Perfectly descriptive with moments ranging from intense action to tender emotion, and a delightful ending sweeter and softer than gossamer and morning dew. Thank you, Vimbert. I hope I, too, can learn to fly.
I'm glad this was mentioned in the comments of your recent blog, this is a great story.
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It was the first story I wrote for the fandom, and it remains some of my favorite work.
Awesome!
Well thought through, and very well written.
Finally got to reading this (picking away at my read-later backlog) and... not bad.
Not a favorite, but worth adding your other fics to the read-later... aw, shit.
I seem to recall last Thursday (was it Thursday? *checks*) last Thursday I said something along the lines of 'taking a (precautious) look at your other stories would have to wait until the weekend,' and it is now Monday. "Why?" you ask. It's because one thing you can count on me for it's that you can never count on me to get anything done by the time I say I'll have it done. And no, indulging in a reckless binge of Zero Punctuation reviews like a fat kid in a warehouse full of Cheetos repeating to myself "just one more..." was not the only reason for the delay; nothing eats up the time like feeling like a worthless f
cking idiot over not being able to learn how to play Jesper's part on 'Reroute to Remain' completely by my semi tone-deaf ears.
And speaking of Zero Punctuation, forgive me in advance if the mannerisms of a hyper-critical machine gun that fires a thousand rounds of sarcasm a minute worms it's way into my syntax like the neighbor's dog sneaking through that hole in the fence to hump the family pet... or your leg. So excuse me while I try to beat the cynically snippy part of me that spawns from my 1/16th British genetics back into submission with a cricket bat.
So jumping straight into this, we have a fairly well written part with Twilight falling, then.. wha- she's got wings? No; full on alicorn princess bull sh
t? Now she's pulling off things that should be honest-to-goddess impossible for a first time flyer like we're in the matrix and somepony downloaded the complete instruction manual into her head? Now Rainbow Dash just shows up and they're going to pull off a Sonic Rainboom? I.. what the- PULL IN THE REINS THERE, KID; YOU'RE ABOUT TO LET SILVER LOOSE. We've already hit three of the major My Little Pony fan fiction stereotypes, and we're not even a thousand words in!
Speaking of which, have I actually gotten an explanation for any of this yet? Because with all of these banal cliches being flung at my face, I'm going to add one more to the list and take the Dallas/Super Mario Bros. 2 route (and not one that would have us redirect through remains) and say; "It was all a dream."
I f
cking called it.
Now, to be fair, the part at the very end is actually rather brilliant, what with the revelation that Twilight's experiences with both her projections of Princess Celestia and especially Rainbow Dash were actually devices for some introspective analysis on the adorkable bookworm's part. So good in fact that it partially makes up for the sod I have to sludge through to get to it. Even with what little I've seen of your work, I'm starting to think that you've got enough fridge brilliance under your belt that it all has to be stored in a walk-in freezer.
I will give you props for having such an intelligent way to wrap everything up at the end, but overall I'd have to say that this story feels awfully generic. It's got some clever bits that put a spice of freshness into some of the most bland things that can be written about in pony fandom, but you can't really slap pickles onto a serving of mousse and not have such conflicting tastes oppose each other. A stereotypical set-up of Twilight becoming an alicorn and performing aerial maneuvers that would leave Amelia Earheart rolling over in her watery grave only to find out it was just a dream is exactly that; stereotypical. But to give you credit, it's readable enough, and as Short Skirts and Explosions pointed out, at least you don't have Rainbow and Twilight hooking up afterwords or just committing to a bout of wild sex at terminal velocity... but it could be also looked at as disheartening that this story goes to such places that the discussion of 'at least you didn't do that' gets brought up.
And the whole thing with it being a dream reminds me of something that Brad Bird (a name that if you have to Google I should wallop you with a crate stuffed with Pixar DVDs containing curiously disproportionate numbers of Ratatouille and The Incredibles with a copy of Mission Impossible 4 thrown it for the hell of it) about how much he generally disliked dream sequences. Because in his own (paraphrased) words it's about as certain that it'll be far too obvious that the character is in a dream as it is they'll inevitably wake up with an over-dramatic gasp... one reason why I hated, hated, Hated, HATED, F
CKING HATED that ungodly sickening atrocity of an NBC series (and that's saying something), Medium.
Medium... A program so bad, that they don't even show reruns of it on Lifetime anymore. A show so awful that if I was put into a room without any objects that I could use to kill myself with before giving the ultimatum of either having to read 'Twilight, Revised' again or watch Medium, and I would actually go with the Nightmare Moon approved mind f
ck rape train, because at least that aberration is well written, albeit so horrifying and morally derogatory that doing so makes me think "this is another one of those awkward sins that Jesus Christ bled and died for." And at least then I could go through it with a fine-toothed comb and point out every typo I claimed the story had like it was a capital offense.
But I digress.
That, however, is certainly NOT to say that dream sequences can't be well done. (Inception, anyone?) And this is still Emmy-worthy compared to that smoothie of steaming sh
t formerly staring Patricia Arquette, but I'm still not going to let it off scotch free. The dream is riddled with stereotypical plot points and way too obviously a dream too early on because it's riddled with too many stereotypes that could only be explained if it was taking place in a dream. In a bit a constructive criticism (I know; "Finally..." right?), I think this story could've been vastly improved and incalculably better without the cliches breaking my suspension of disbelief worse than Pinkie Pie high off her tw
t on shrooms, and all it would've taken would be a few minor adjustments and slight toning down to not making so obvious we're dancing around in Twilight's night visions. Like if Twilight's wings showed up after the projection of Celestia cast a spell to give them to her, and if it has just been wings without her becoming a f
cking full grown horse-pegasus-unicorn... thing (That part was pointless, by the way.). And had the stunts she and Rainbow Dash thereafter performed been a little more feasible, it would have had just as much if not more impact that jumping straight to one of the most used (and abused) spectacles in the pegasus flight book... even if it had meant sacrificing the opportunity to fit in a meme joke.
... And after she gained the ability to fly, shouldn't Twilight, for the sake of her friend's assurance, flown back up to Spike and have been all like; "Dun wry; its k."?
That's just my opinion, but those little changes could've made this from 'meh' to 'that was actually pretty good.' And I hope that I'm not coming across as being too blunt; I actually did take into consideration that this is your first fic, that it probably isn't as good as your others and that you've probably already learned through experience everything that I've had to say. But I still said it anyway. Because I saw an opportunity to leave a comment longer than entire short fics, and I took it.
And the title makes me think of Tom Petty.
....
It just now occurred to me after I just wailed on your story that the story we're writing has a cover image of Twilight with wear like a princess's and her own set of wings, and that out of the fifteen planned chapters, fourteen of them have some sort of dream sequence in them...
Crawls back into my hole....
- Christian 'I'm wearing a Santa hat' Harisay
YOU SHOULD SUE HASBRO FOR STEEL UR DONUTS :(
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Wut.
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they totally ripped twilicorn off you D:
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Alicorn Twilight was already a tired fandom cliche when I wrote this two years ago.
Reading this, I honestly thought some sort of shipping fic. But I was wrong, and expected the wrong kind of love.
I couldn't tell this was a dream. Characters are usually out of character during dream sequences, but it was nice to see a normal Dash and Tia personality. Celestia giving Twilight wings? I thought nothing of it until I read a bit more. I think the pace was quickened, even through the vast amount of Twi's books, she couldn't of learned how to fly without a decent bit of physical practise and performance. I really thought Dash was a little over excited for the Sonic Rainboom.
Dash could be a little ooc for she wouldn't just go and teach her special trick that earned her a cutie mark to anyone. Even a princess knowing her stubborn self. But the colour detail was nice and Spitfire and Dash's reaction was perfect. I thought that Spitfire was a little odd, but as I know it's a dream, anything could happen. Twilight is comfortable here, but then she woke up.
If any unicorn could give themselves wings, the world would be a quarter percent alicorn I think. Maybe Celestia could have done something about that? Overall, it was a nicely written story and I thought the chemistry (non-romantic) was wonderful with Rainbow and Twilight. Wonderful job Vincent
Things felt amiss very quickly in this story. The pacing was incredibly off near the beginning. I assumed it was due to bad writing, but was soon provided with a more suitable (and satisfying) explanation for everything, so you did a good job on that front. I liked how Rainbow Dash embodied Twilight's adventurous spirit (or something to that effect), given that season 1 Twilight was so anti-interaction.
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Well, Twilight having a special talent for magic probably lets her use spells most others can't, but as far as I remember the Dew Wings spell was readily available in the library. Any unicorn with enough stamina could probably cast it. There really should be more winged unicorns flying about, huh?