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EyesoreForTheBlind


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On behalf of the Alicornian lands, Snowy Powder has come to represent her home during the Grand Equestrian Pony Summit. During her time there, she runs into another pony who ruffles her feathers just by his appearance alone.

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DumbDog
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I enjoyed reading this. I can't say the same for the majority of the fics in queue, but I can with this one.

This seems like a nice story, but it seems like it has a lot more potential than simply a one-shot. I mean, where are the reactions of the citizens at another alicorn just wandering around, let alone that she represents a whole NATION of alicorns? And who is this alicorn stallion she's bumped into?

This really should be expanded into a multi-chapter story, at the least.

Also, this shouldn't have the "2nd Person" tag because it's 3rd person perspective.

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