"Only the most subtle of references." -No fanfiction writer ever
Pinkie Pie is a very busy mare. Between her friends and her family, her party-planning job and her world-saving Element duties, she barely has any time for herself. Sometimes she wishes she had some help.
This wish is answered in the form of a small changeling, lost and alone.
Little did she or he know what series of events this would kickstart, or the marvelous new chapter it would open in the party mare's life.
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A wonderful tale of everything going horribly right. A bit of an anticlimax at the end—almost a foregone conclusion, really—but still a great tale of victory through pink. The only question I have is why Pinkie never got sucked dry, no matter how many changelings she fed. Perks of being queen? And there is the question of what the Joy Hive thought of the pastel reformation, but I suppose something had to give to fit in the word limit.
Whatever the case, thank you for this and best of luck in the judging.
This was a delightful read. It did leave open the question; what happened to Rarity? Concerned minds would like to know.
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Ahh, I'm sure she's fine. Probably locked in a closet somewhere or something!
I got to the end and loved it. Though I won't lie I said I can't wait for the next chapter... only to see it marked complete.
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Indeed, Chryssi was really banking on her missing subjects still being loyal. Oops.
As for Pinkie's endless supply: The fun answer is that she just naturally is an endless font of happiness and joy. She is Pinkie Pie, after all. A more worldbuildy explanation though would be her connection to the Element of Laughter. Trying to drain her is like using a battery that's still itself charging from a wall outlet.
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Alas, such is the nature of writing for a contest with a word limit. I'm glad you enjoyed it!
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i hope u decide to do a sequel
Now this was marvelous. 'tis so difficult to get Pinkie right, but you definitely managed it.
Poor Rarity, forgotten again.
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9936666 I mean, have you ever seen Chrysalis and Rarity in the same room?
Other than all those times?
Aside from Rarity's whereabouts being left unexplained (Pinkie should've just sent some lings to find her), and a couple spelling errors, nice work.
The more i think about it, what this needs is an epilogue to wrap up things Pinkie, her hive, Chrysalis and Rarity.
To those readers who have been wondering about Rarity, I have heard your concerns. I've written a small additional scene to tie up that loose end, however, as this story is still being judged for a contest I cannot make any official edits. Therefore, I present it to you below with a few lines either end so you know where the scene goes.
If you are not a judge or other person related to the contest, please enjoy this additional scene:
Definitely interested to see where this goes, also wondering if changlings feeding off of pinkie is different and she is almost like a generator to them rather than other ponies which seem to be more like a slowly filling battery
Loving this story so far
Loved this story, I hope we see more from the joy hive
Well this is certainly a very cute beginning. Pinkie Pie has to be one of the better possible ponies to discover a lost changeling.
C'mon, Pinkie, you know how this works with parasprites... For pretty similar reasons, actually.
Interesting that these changelings understand but don't speak. I assume communication back to Pinkie will be coming at some point.
Reading between the lines, it seems like in the hive they're from, giving names is something that does happen, but only to certain very special lings, maybe, and in a kind of ceremony.
For now this continues to be extremely cute.
Couple of typos in this chapter: "good am mimicking" should be "good at mimicking", and "her usual au natural style" needs to change "au natural" to "au naturel" (probably in italics but that's up to you).
This chapter was delightful. I was suspecting Rarity's hypothesis was wrong somewhere, but I absolutely was not prepared for her imagining a liaison with one of the Flim Flam Brothers. And I laughed out loud at the bit where Rarity "wished her good fainting chaise wasn't at the cleaners." Lovely.
(Though I was taken aback by the mention of Starlight Glimmer. I had thought this was set around season 3. Or is there meant to be an implied timeskip?)
This is certainly adorable. But I do find myself wondering quite how Pinkie Pie caused these eggs to come into existence. We've skipped forward to season 8 now, so we're years after the hive first formed (and the mention of Maud suggests that at least a handful of other ponies know about Pinkie's little nation here). If eggs can spontaneously form near satisfied changelings I'd have expected it to happen sooner.
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There are hints (or at least, there's supposed to be) that we've been skipping along trough the canon timeline.
This was fantastic. I love it. Such an unapologetically cheerful and sweet way to deal with the changelings. (The extra scene is indeed a sensible addition.) I'm particularly entertained by how Twilight views Pinkie as doing an insultingly poor imitation of Pinkie's voice!
Thank you very much for writing it, and best of luck in the contest!
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But given how much work that takes off her hooves, it's clear that this is where their independence pays.
I regret nothing.
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I'm so used to reading stories set in season 5 or later that it didn't even occur to me that the mention of the roots of Twilight's castle had pulled us forward in time a bit. The timeskip cues are reasonably well done, I just missed the first one or two until we got to the really blatant one here 
Yeah, I worked it out eventually
This was bloody delightful. I don't think I've ever been happier to see Chrysalis--whom I normally adore--being smacked down. The ending felt really abrupt, both with Chrysalis' appearance and Pinkie not really getting a chance to explain things, but dammit, this was fun and endearing and I just loved it. Thank you so much for writing this!
I love it when Pinkie's engineering side comes out. Party Cannons and Helicopters don't just HAPPEN you know.
Given how ling hives morph and shift, and that Pinkie Pie was involved in the design, I expect this to turn into a hyper-dimensional Tardis like structure soon enough.
That's adorable. The first changelings born loved.
I wrote a critique/review of this story. It can be found right over here.
You know, it seemed really odd to me that given her personality and upbringing Pinkie Pie had only one child at her apparent age in the season finale. But, if Li’l Cheese has a few hundred older Changeling brothers and sisters that would explain a lot.
This was quite nice.
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Ah, hmm, they must be on the subtle side then, because I was also surprised at the mention of Starlight. :B
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This actually ought to be added in, not just for the "what happened to Rarity?" bit, but because it'll also make dealing with Twilight and co.'s numb shock a little easier. I mean, there's suddenly a party; I have no more idea what's going on than they do!
This was great, though. :)
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To restate the authors note, this chapter no longer is part of the story. It ends at the previous one. This version's only still around so I don't lose the comments or their original context.
Maybe I should strikethrough this chapter so thats clearer.
No more Chrysalis, huh? That's a clever edit.
I liked the old ending, but this one feels more fitting to me.
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Oh! :O
This is great. XD The whole thing is a massive improvement, top to bottom, well done. :D
Looks promising...
Moving on to the next chapter after this auspicious start!
And two by two the Hive of Joy grows under the limitless font of happiness that is Queen Pinkamina Diane Pie.
Now all Pinkie needs to do is realize that she's the Queen!
"I dunno… Queen's okay, but I'm more of an Elton John pony."
"That's not what he meant, Pinkie."
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Most likely, given Auntie Pinkie's influence?
Cake, ice-cream, and parties, of course!
Pinkie giggled and raised a hoof to pat Cherry as the nymph played with her crown. "It's kind of a funny story really. You know how when you were a filly, and your parents always told you not to feed the stray cats cause they'd keep coming back?"
I feel like you should have cut off those last few words and ended it right there. It is much more pithy then.
Loooove the story by the way. You knocked this one out of the park.
Love it, I liked the old ending but this fits better I feel.
I loved this story. It's a shame to hear that it was just for a contest... which I guess means you won't be making a sequel.
This has been one of the best Changeling fics I've ever read, and Pinkie made an amazing Queen!
The only thing that I was sad to see, or not see in this case, was Pinkie not "ascending" like Thorax or Twilight. I was kind of expecting that to happen once she put on the crown, but it doesn't make the story lesser in any way. Just... a surprise, lol.
Also, I was highly amused by the appearance of Maud and the implication that the rest of Pinkie's family is aware of her Hive. Ma and Pa Pie must be so proud of their daughter.
great story hope you do a sequel or a one shot where you got joy hive interacting with thorax hive
Fantastic expansion and revision of the old ending. Thanks for taking the time to refine this to an even better state than before.
Plus, this leads to a wonderful mental image of the Joy Hive pouring out of the earth like seven-year locusts and burying Super-Chrysalis in sheer numbers come the finale.
this is surprisingly cute. I like where is this going
This was amazing wonderful and so adorable I wish there was more but you did amazing I am proud to bestow this story a spot in my favorites and I also want to know how was cherry made was it he the love she gave of or was is something else
Now this is the ending the story needed. It would have absolutely won with it, and I'm very pleased to be able to read it now.
(three months later)
Queen Chrysalis looked up with a puzzled expression. "Strange. It's quiet. Where did everbuggy go?"
You've been reviewed
dawww, all the feels for this ending