Pulling the drapes against the golden light of an obnoxiously cheerful dawn, Luna threw herself at her giant princess-sized bed with an indignant snort. She treasured the few private hours she spent with her sister each day and knew that Celestia put special effort into making certain that business of state did not interfere with their dawn and dusk meals.
Today had been especially nice, an ad-hoc tea in the royal gardens on the cusp of dawn with some lovely lyre music. It was so like Celestia to take the time to find a pony skilled in an instrument popular before Luna's banishment, just to make her feel at home in the new palace.
So then why did she have to ruin it all? Usually Luna could handle Celestia’s incessant teasing. In some strange way it made her feel at ease. If Celestia felt safe enough to tease Luna about her abacus or the rather provocative armor of her Royal Night Guard, then that was a demonstration of her trust in Luna’s reformation.
‘Celly would never tease me like that if she thought that I could become Nightmare Moon again.’
But today had been something else entirely. It had all started out with familiar territory, Twilight Sparkle’s rather obvious interest in the Night Princess.
Celestia had begun delicately needling her as they nibbled their regal way through a desert of traditional rosewater and lime lokum, a sweet very much in vogue when Luna last sat upon the throne of Equestria. Taken from a pleasant reverie of simpler times and simpler pleasures, Luna had immediately allowed herself to become cross, much to Celestia's evident delight.
“Sister, I hardly think this is the appropriate place to discuss these sorts of matters. The servants...”
“Are just as concerned for your welfare and happiness as I am Luna, why I’m surprised one of them has not smuggled little Twilight into your chambers as a surprise.”
“Celly! This is an inappropriate matter for discussion over dinner.”
Luna was certain her cheeks were glowing brighter than the red gingham table cloth their snacks were laid out on.
"It's breakfast for me dear sister." Celestia’s smile had been so .. well, it had been hidden behind her teacup but Luna knew every infuriating inch of Celly’s little smirk from thousands of years of experience. She had been just as infuriating during the whole Starswirl debacle.
“I'm afraid you are going to have to face the facts Luna, you and Twilight would be just perfect for each other. You have such similar interests. I hear that she's even learned how to use an abacus now. The little dear is just so.."
"Intelligent? Focused?" Luna ventured.
Celestia lifted an eybrow "I was thinking more along the lines of 'Versatile' or perhaps even " The lifted eyebrow took on the aspect of a comical leer "Adaptable."
"Look, sister, Twilight's sudden interest in the history and customs of my era is flattering but it does not imply any reciprocal interest on my part, so please drop this whole matter."
"Oh Luna, Don’t think for a second that the way you pore over her friendship reports has escaped my notice." Luna cast her gaze towards the heavens in exasperation.
Celestia took a measured sip of her tea. "Or that I am unaware that some of them are missing from my collection.”
Luna froze, knowing that guilt was written across her face like a placard. She wondered if her lunar powers could include sinking into the earth in shame. ‘Oh no.. This could not look any worse.’
“Celly..”
“But not just any friendship reports. Just the ones that happen to mention our beautiful Princess of the Night, and in such glowing phrases too. Twilight was rather excited about finally meeting you again on Nightmare night wasn't she?”
“...” Luna found the tablecloth to suddenly be the most fascinating thing in Equestria.
“For two months she has asked after you in every report. She even found a way through her own research to send a letter to you with Spikes flame as a surprise. Am I correct sister?"
“Well yes, but...”
Celestia’s perfect brow lowered and her gaze hardened just a little as she took a regal sip from her tea.
‘I guess I was wrong, it can get a LOT worse.’ Luna steeled herself for what was coming next.
“You never saw fit to grace her effort and inventiveness with a reply.”
“That’s NOT true!” Luna thumped the table for emphasis, sending a tinkling shockwave through the precious china settings.
“Oh, yes, forgive me. You responded once. You complemented her on her discovery and wished her well for her studies. On official letterhead. In Old Equestrian. She sent me your reply, along with a letter begging me to tell her what she had done to offend you.
Luna, that response would have been considered unduly cold even in the era before your .. disappearance."
The urgent need to sink into the earth intensified .. ‘No, the earth's mere shell isn’t enough. Maybe the mantle. Down amongst all that molten lava.’
Celestia cooly sipped her tea. “I had to visit her in Ponyville to calm her down. She cried. A pony writing a thesis on freindship who couldn't keep a friend.”
Luna could just picture those huge lavender eyes tearing up. The same way that they had on Nightmare Night from pure sympathy as Twilight empathised with Luna’s rejection and loneliness. ‘... sinking down to the core with all that crushing weight and intolerable pressure.’
“Luna, I thought you liked Twilight ... at least as a potential friend.”
Luna snapped out of her descent into self recrimination.
“Celly, it’s been so long. After all those years of my banishment I just don’t know how to talk to ponies any more.” Her voice dropped “Not outside of our official royal roles.” Her voice fell to a whisper “And especially not Twilight. I did not mean to hurt her.”
An awkward silence fell over the table. Celestia dabbed her mouth with a napkin and rose from her cushion. Her voice softened.
“From reading Twilight's friendship reports, and what you told me yourself sister, I had thought that both of you made a real connection that night, I was looking forward to seeing you as friends."
Luna looked up from the table, meeting her sister's eyes. "I'm sorry Celly, I'll try to.."
"And naming your foals of course.”
With a gleeful giggle, Celestia easily ducked the telekinetically flung teapot.
“Please, Luna. Just write her a letter or maybe drop into Ponyville for a surprise visit. It would mean the world to her.”
“Well ...” ‘That sounds remarkably reasonable and straightforward... could I really do that? As a princess? Just drop in unannounced to visit a subject in their own home? What strange times these have become.’
“I’d recommend an hour after midnight - Twilight never locks her bedroom window.”
“GET THEE HENCE FROM MY SIGHT!”
Just to be sure (since is a character listed) before I add this to the TwiLuna group this is a story of Twilight being shipped with Luna right?
Very nice start to the story, though it might have been better to end the chapter with Luna planning upon how she would meet Twilight.
i think this is cool so far
ROYAL CANTERLOT VOICE ACTIVATED lol I like were this is going. ALL ABOARD! WERE SHIPPING OUT! tracked.
My list of tracked things is getting a little long...
"Hence"-Adverb:
As a consequence; for this reason.
In the future (used after a period of time).
Synonyms:
therefore - consequently - thence - accordingly
"Remove thyself from our/my sight!" would be correct Middle English grammar. Hence is incorrect.
Trollestia at her finest
okay, this is to good not to holler "anchors aweigh" (launch ship).
*also a twilu shipper*
232771 Ah, in fact the usage in the story is quite correct. 'Get thee hence', from the Middle English 'hennes', 'from here'. Indeed, I can list at least one use of the phrase from the King James Bible and one from Shakespeare, and chances are at least one of the two are right!
I'm liking this idea
Can't wait to see where you're going with this
Loving this....
Thanks for all the comments, they mean a lot to me. I don't mind saying that I was pretty anxious before pressing that 'submit' button. I stared at it for two months! A great deal of the story is already written so I'll be trying to drop two chapters a week on you.
Thanks for the etymology Starfall, I love that stuff. I looked a bit further into it and found that 'hennes' came from 'heonan' meaning 'away from here'. Now I'm reading old english poetry 'The Ruin' from 'The Exeter Book' is awesome.
See? Ponies are educational!
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Thanks, you just went back a few centuries farther than I did, which is probably better in Luna's case anyways, I really appreciate the knowledge!
232715 I don't think I'm giving away any spoilers if I say that this story will have some TwiLuna (it is kind of the whole premise), so please add it to the group.
I think I'll be browsing that group myself very soon - TwiLuna got me into reading fanfic in the first place.
234436>>234695 You are both most welcome!
It's nice not to mention rather original to see a story featuring Celestia being protective of Twilight with Luna.
haha, angry Luna is a good Luna ^__^ anyway, a little to rushed for my taste and perhaps overdoing the trollestia a bit much... but then again maybe that was because it felt so rushed that made it feel like it filled a bit to much.
Hehehe... I've only read the first chapter and I'm alrady cracking up. This is beautifully done...
A couple of style and typography notes, in no particular order:
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“Oh, yes, forgive me. You responded once. You complemented her on her discovery and wished her well for her studies. On official letterhead. In Old Equestrian. She sent me your reply, along with a letter begging me to tell her what she had done to offend you.”
"Luna, that response would have been considered unduly cold even in the era before your .. disappearance."
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No need for the paragraph break between the two passages above, but if you must, you should omit the final quotation mark after "you" in paragraph one. A single speaker's quotation that breaks across paragraphs without otherwise being interrupted by stage direction and whatnot means that you do not close the quote at the end of the first paragraph, but you do open the second paragraph with a quote mark. it looks a little strange in practice, but it's correct.
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"Oh Luna, Don’t think for a second that the way you pour over her friendship reports has escaped my notice."
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Caps on "Don't", of course, and the proper word is "pore"
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“But not just any freindship reports...."
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Typography here, of course.
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Luna looked up from the table, meeting her sisters eyes. "I'm sorry Celly, I'll try to.."
"And naming your foals of coarse.”
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"Sister's" in line one, and "course", in line two.
Overall, a nice first part -- you do seem to have a good grasp of where to put scene detail and of the particular character relationship between the Royals. Plus, Twiluna is always nice. A few more edit passes for grammar and typography would make this work even better. Faved, continuing to read. Thanks for sharing!
Celestia just keeps trolling Luna.
This is amusing and I'll probably end up tracking this story, but how the hell would Luna and Twi have foals since they're both mares..
This made me think of "What Princesses need" and the Lunar Puppies
Sup ponies out there I'm gonna be critiquing this story my ratings are 1-5 to an there are other ratings otherwise which I will wxplain IF YOU EARN THEM don't worry once I grow on your story I'll grow on you and I don't rate prolougues and epilogues (Yes I know I mispelled prologue I just am letting you know I don't rate on typos and nice nice
celly you troll hahaha dude keep up the good stuff.
Realistic Trollestia is simply too delicious for words, especially when it is Luna that she is needling. I APPROVE WHOLEHEARTEDLY!
And how does Celestia know that Twilight keeps her bedroom window unlocked?