After a night of fun and catching up, two best friends begin their walk home. While everything seems well and good, even the most well-worn mask can have cracks.
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This story was loosely based on the "Beautiful Sunrise" prompt from Bean's Writing Group. It started as something else, but I decided to create something different from that. Thus this story exists. I would like to thank my friends Bean, Mykola, Ran, Smokey, Gadot, and Short for all their help with editing and critiquing this story. I don't think I'd ever get this far without them.
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Thanks again for letting me help with this one, Shekh! A heartwarming story about being there for a friend.
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Thanks so much again, Gadot. I wouldn't have been able to get the story to this quality without the help of you and the others!
This looks good!
This was a good read; tugged nicely on the heartstrings. Well done.
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Thanks so much! I'm very happy to see that you like it!
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Thanks fam! I'm happy to see that I've done this topic justice.
Which is it?
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Whoops! Thanks for catching that! It's actually Bright Hope. Bright Cure was a previous name I've thought up for the character, my mistake!
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It's still not fixed.
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Currently busy with IRL stuff dude. Thanks again for catching it, I'll edit it when I can!
This was a good use of a first story. The fear is well-realized and the voice is clear and effective. Even a reader who doesn't have this fear will be able to understand the way the ponies are feeling, and that's one of the most important things you can do in genres like drama and horror to avoid the issue of reliability being entirely subjective.
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Thanks so much for your comment, Ice! It honestly puts a smile on my face!
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Well, it better. Or else Iād have to install one myself. ššŖ
A review for YOU
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Thank you so much for your great critique Nailah!