Rainbow Factory - A Poem - Part 3
Rainbow Factory - A Poem
By dashie76
Although I did not write the original Rainbow factory, the plot of this poem is my own.
We've finally done it...it's over...we've won...
The rebellion got back...the beautiful sun...
My friends have told me...that they would make sure...
My name would go down...in historical lore...
The mare with the apples...said once every year...
When...the cider...season was near...
She'd always put aside...one mug to remember...
The way that I loved it...and for that, I thanked her...
The animal lover...said my memory would live on...
That she'd give other pegasi...a project to work on...
A statue of cloud...commemorating me...
Proclaiming my bravery for all to see...
The pink one could barely stop crying to say...
That her gift to me was one for my birthday...
Once every year...on its...anniversary...
She would throw the "biggest, most bestest party..."
The dressmaker said...that she'd stitch me a flag...
A sheet of honor...a bravery rag...
She'd hang it on top of...the mayor's abode...
So all could see...the rainbow she sewed...
And finally...the bookish...unicorn explained...
That never again...would evil reign...
That she'd make the next artificial rainbows...
The best ones of all...that shined and glowed...
Alas...now...the time is nigh...
For me to pass on...for me to die...
To Pony Heaven...and the joy it brings...
Alas...I still regret...many things...
Leading the army...I just now beat...
Being vain...with boastful flying feats...
But most of all...making my friends...
Stay with me...till the bitter end...
And now...the light...comes...for...me...
Black dots...at the edge... of my vision...I see...
Just one...last...thing...to say with a sigh...
Thank you...for hearing...my story...
Good Bye.
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I know this story might not have as big an effect on the readers as it did on me, but writing that last stanza just felt incredibly depressing.
I don't know why.
Anyways, these last two parts, born of the 1,000 word minimum of Fimfiction, actually turned out pretty good. But if they aren't as good as the original poem, (first part) then whatever. I just hope you guys like it!
-MASH
1236640 You had better make a damn good story.
*edit*
You made a damn good story.
1248951 Wow, I love this. Rainbow Factory is basically what sealed my fate as a brony. While I know this would never happen in AuroraDawn's canon, it was still really beautiful. When reading the original, I liked to think it had a happy ending... we'll just have to see what Pegasus Device brings!
I has always been impressed with good poetry; needless to say, you have my praise. You created wonderful imagery with this poem, thank you.
Wonderful poem! dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra_smile.png
I want to thank everyone for reading my poem. I didn't think I would get anywhere near this amount of views and upvotes. So I want to say, to everyone, thank you. You're awesome! And have a nice day!
-MASH
Have a like
1264745
Thanks
DOUBLE DIGIT LIKES!!!
1262013
Thanks! But what, if I may ask, is Pegasus Device?
1384126I thank you x infinity for your praise!!
Also, as a side note, and for anyone who is interested, I am currently working on another collection of poems to upload! If were lucky, I should have it up for the end of next week, so look out for that.
Have a nice day!
-MASH
I LOVED IT!
You better be jumping out of your seat right now because I am rarely impressed with poetry and I thought I was gonna leave halfway through, but I didn't. Because IT WAS AWESOME!
( holy rainbows batman)
~Vortex
1424163
Holy Rainbows Batman...My God...I've heard stories of such a compliment...but I always thought they were fabrications...mere tales of longing and wonder...but now...now I see that I was false...
Much thanks to you, good sir. You...you have proven the impossible.
-MASH
>> dashie76
*ahem* I am a girl. But thank you, and you're welcome! Im glad that I have enlightened you to this reality!
Now. Please. Keep writting and continue to be awesome.
(Can I get an Amen!)
~Vortex
1424505
Amen, my lady!
...
I'm so sorry, I couldn't resist...
Also, I have another poem fanfiction up on my account if you're interested. It's called Poems of Ponyville - Volume I. Read it!
-MASH
Great poem!
I liked it
1432303
Thanks very much!
1472305I shall now YouTube that...
im more of a romance reader but this epicly awesome
also im am now scard of rainbow dash due to the name not from the story
HOLY CELESTIA. THIS. WAS. T H E. BEST. POEM. I. HAVE. EVER. READ.
PS, The last stanza made me cry
1656702YEAH! Right in the feels!
Why?! Why did Rainbow Dash have to die!?
UPVOTE!
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AWESOME story!
1761048I'm SO HAPPY you like it!
Also, Pegasus Device is out. Perhaps a sequel is in order...muahahahaha!
1763666 I love poetry and this is combining 3 things I love:
Ponies
Poetry
Rainbow Factory and its epic downfall in a bloody form.
1763903You like Rainbow Factory, huh? Have you heard the news? AuroraDawn posted the sequel! It's called "Pegasus Device," and I just read it! It's EPIC.
epic
Long live the ones fight for freedom to end that god-forsaken factory!!!
1763938
One error it's the prequel not the sequel awoken is the sequel
But that story inspired me to make one!
And that story is epic!
1890425I'm glad you like it and that it inspired you!
So Pegasus Device is a prequel, huh? I wasn't aware that there was a canon sequel already...I'll look on AuroraDawn's page.
1892762Its not on his page go google search awoken
Or search it on this site
I did got inspired to make this story from yours!!
Search the story on my page called
The story behind the Pegasus device!!!
It'll be really nice if you read it and comment about it!
1895698I'm so touched that I inspired someone...
I'll totally read it!
Also, I shall now search Awoken...
2041224I'm glad you like it! Hmm...I'm reading Eljunbyro right now...well, I suppose I could find time to read it.
For once we have an amazing Rainbow Factory related fic!
Good work, my fine sir.
2188824I thank you as well.
2265888Oh, God, no more Gutterloo please...
I'm glad you like the poem! And yeah, the battle wasn't really mentioned. But I wanted to focus more on the emotions of Rainbow Dash, and with the war, it would be tough to do that. But I might add a chapter...
2266341Please don't.
You, my friend, know how to write a poem.
ambris.deviantart.com/art/Twilight-Sparkle-Approved-262120085
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Thanks!!
P.S. The image won't load...
I Pinkie Promise that when I decide to become a music artist I shall animate this and sing it.
2795038My purpose is fulfilled. Thanks for liking it!!
Love the Rainbow Factory premise. Really enjoyed this.
3228584Thanks! I'm glad you liked it.
(On a side, note, I'm in the middle of reading The Secret Life of Rarity at the moment.)
3228641 'course I favorited it. I liked it. Surprised that they were able to kill Celestia. That was a bit weird, but whaddya gonna do? You enjoying Rarity?
YES..and sort of yes, because it's a bit weird seeing Rarity in the light you put her in. Part of the reason your version of Rarity creeps me out is because she's so casual about murder, and to her, she's doing the right thing. It's very interesting, to say the least. (Never thought about that thing with Celestia...that is kind of weird, actually...)
Woah... Rainbow, NOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!
My nephew bawled his eyes out at the end (he wanted to marry RD). This was well written, and creeped out my friends when I read the series of poems to my class on the first day back to school (we had to find a series of poems and read them to the class... after, my teacher took me aside and asked If I ever considered therapy) 
3818435 On, awesome.
I feel like a lot of my friends already think I need therapy because of the ponies. But they're so cute...I'm actually kind of honored that you read it to others in that way, so thank you.
3820398 heh...
what else was I supposed to do? I actually enjoy doing Brony artists proud. I used to play them on my radio show (banned by school admin, something about too many insensitive people...), I read the poems in class (as demonstrated) and I love giving feedback. What can I say? I love this community... and I hope it never ends.
3820420 That's deep...I'll have to remember that. Anyways,mi think I have extra motivation now to work on the next chapter of Doing Science. Go team!
3820503 Oh yeah. This also means I need to finish my current story.
I've been working on it for almost a year now...
3820514 Doing Science hit one year earlier this month, too. It's a cool feeling, to know that you've been working on something for that long. Rewarding, too.
3820532 Certainly. Now,if I could just get my mind off amazing fanfics and back to studying for my finals...
WHO DA BUCK CREATED FINAL EXAMS??!!
3820541 ....it's January.
Eh, maybe our school systems just work differently.