You are anon, you lived in canterlot with the princesses as safety reasons and was fine with it until one day you stumbled upon Celestia's private Library and found books that makes you question the princess of the sun.
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Sorry for being blunt, but... the grammar in this story hurts . The idea is sound, but the execution is... not good .
You need an editor, OR at the very least, you need to run the story through one (or both) of these :
An editor would be better because he/she could help you improve not just the grammar but also the story's 'flow.' But getting one is hard, especially if you're a new writer.
In any case, good luck !
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Thanks for the help I hope this helps me with making new stories😁