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Abyssi amentiae


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For more than a month, Princess Luna has been monitoring the human condition. And with each new day his jokes become more angry and malicious, a smile, even a small one, appears less and less on his face, and his gaze becomes colder and harder with notes of sadness, as if he had lost something important. Today she will personally solve this problem, as the Princess of Equestria.

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I'm guessing English isn't your first language. The sentence flow and format threw me off. I suggest using the free version of Grammarly or get someone to transcribe it. I do understand what the story meant though, the human is coming to terms he doesn't belong there.

I like it, but, i gotta inquire as to your reason for not using "quotation marks" as the lack of them makes it really difficult to follow when reading at a reasonable pace

Thanks for the advice. I will try to use the site offered by you. Initially, my stories should be translated by my friend from Odessa, but for more than a month he does not respond, to my regret.

And the very essence of this cropped sketch is that a person increasingly understands the hopelessness of his situation, that no one will help him, but tries to continue following the path of the superman according to Nietzsche in order to change the world for his goals and needs. But since this is all just a cut of a sketch, it's hard to understand.

I hope you liked this piece of text.

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I'm glad you liked it.

And as for quotation marks, in my literary language, quotation marks are not always used to show the boundaries of what a particular character says. I was quite surprised that so few dashes are used here to indicate the beginning and end of a character's speech.

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In that case then, I take it back. thank you for the nice horse words too!

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