Shepard dies at the end of the war with the reapers, a decision made a price paid. Now alive and moving forward in a new world Shepard now specter moves though life as a Pegasus in ponyvile as Captain of the weather teamhow will she make do?
Characters added as the story progresses
Not bad. You've got some missing words and punctuation, repeated words and what I think are run on sentences.
I look forward to seeing what kind of shepherd we'll be following.
Will shepherd or Specter be a seventh element or will she have her own adventures outside of the mane six?
I have no editor and haven't gotten that far yet
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Click on the chapter name, there should be a edit button by the title, then double check to see if the chapter stayed published after edits.
I've been told that its a good idea to wait a week between drafts, makes it easier to spot mistakes or something.
I myself have found that its a good idea to think ahead at least to a cliff notes level.
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I normally double back and look through it and read some of the parts the are there and think on them before changing them or parts around them so also I used text to speech on my phone to type all this not all "all" but most of it and