I am the guy who writes the Equestrian-Marvel Universe. If you don't know what that is, take a look at The Iron Mare. Oh, and I write other things.
A new entity has appeared in Equestria. It's been bringing nightmares that have driven five to insanity. When Twilight begins to get similar nightmares, what can she do? What defenses are there against such a nocturnal creature?
NOTICE: This does connect to 'Lost Family' via character. I would recomend reading both parts first.
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Liked it for Nacturne from LOL!
It shows potential, but the writing could use a touch more on the descriptions. Also, you may want to make the chapters a bit longer than what you already have.
Liked because Nocturne, but you have some cleaning up to do with your writing mister.
1401184 Lol. I know.
1401160 Wait for the next chapter. And I've never been too good on descriptions. Look at the description for the story. Not very good. But thanks for the feedback.
The story's going a bit fast. Maybe it would help to slow down and explain things. Details would help with that. Even if the action is fast details can slow it down enough for the reader to comprehend what's happening. Otherwise this is really cool.
1408089 Thanks for the tip. The next chapter is details and explinations, though. But it's always helpful to have people who give honest critique.
Sir, *puts on a cowboy hat* i tip my hat to you.
The story is BOUSE! Though i must agree with Amethyst Hope, it's a bit fast. You know it would be nice if you somehow connected this story with Recovery, not just with characters. That would be quite the sweet thing to read.
1896951 This is a different story that has almost nothing to do with my first storyline. This barely connects to the others. And it's the first of four stories, so look forward to the next three(whic will be a little slower paced). But thanks for the comment.