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Sofocles the Drake


A brony with a deep love for romance, dark stories, or both.

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11817378
What do you mean 2 versions?. 2 parallell universe mane 6 in the same story?, Yes.

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Yes, and how do you make that work, having two versions of themselves in the same world?

What happened to the second world? Is there cosmic consequences of having alternate versions in a wrong universe/world for too long?

Do they actually meant to permanently stay in the canon verse?

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All those questions i plan on doing my best to cover slowly as the chapter go on, i plan to make this somewhat a large story.

All in all this is a great story man. Hope you continue making more chapters in this fanfic.

How dark and serious will this story be compared to the source material of both Friendship is Magic and everything else this story is crossing over with?

11817991
Maybe a 8.5 out of 10 max, then again sex and death are something happening in this story so...

11817526
Thank you. Sometimes all neded for one to continue a story is support. Appreciate it.

Honestly I’m excited to see what happens next with the story.

I have read the whole story so far, shouldn't it be each one of the alternates the one who tell their stories? Ever since the Mane 6 began to interrogare the alternate Rainbow Dash it seems like she knows eceryone's stories since it was never stated that any of the other alternates have regained concience or are even in the same room at all, you pretty much forgot they exist as characters and they should be the ones who tell their own story.

Also, it seems that the Alternate Rarity have a high probability of actually making her version of Sweetie Bot in an mad grief-fueled bout of science.

Outside of that the concept is interesting and recomend you to give the other alternates their own dialogues explaining their situation.

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First of all thank you for seeing my story and the feedback!. Now about what you comment about, there is multiple reasons why in my story Alternate Rainbow knows or tells the very basic parts of the backstories of her friends (some of the reasons are spoiler so if you do not like to spoil yourself skip this)

1.- After a properly made volund (no, the first volund of spike does not count. It needs to have both or all the awareness of all parts to be "proper" volund) parts or big fragments of : memories, emotions and abilities among other things are "shared" between the parties. Remember a volund is pretty much literally to "bound souls together".

2.- Just like you or me, one can know to an extent the past of our friends, even more when in war times is key to know from where and were your commrades come from. This is specially important in synergy of a team.

3.-My original idea was to basically make a summarized small statment of what Stella (rainbow alternate) knew of what her friends past was and THEN expand it only for the viewers knowledge in a similar matter but i think this way is better. For now anyway.

4.- About the Sweetie bot thing, actually you are kind of spot on. Abundance is basically ironmare from her universe so yeah, expect a AI based on her death sister altough its not THAT advanced.

5.-I will consider what you mentioned and maybe either when i finish the story or later rewrite it so each alternate tells her story. Then again it is an option.


Once again thanks for your feedback and read! it means a lot bruh.

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You're welcome, Still love how this story is turning out so I'll wait patiently for the updates.

I see your point with the Volund which can be resumed in essence as a fusion, each person have glimpses of the other memories and with the girls fusing with Alternate Spike, AKA: Crown. Then each one of them would eventually get to see everyone's memories when they fuse with Crown since he is pretty much living their memories as well, then when they fuse with him they get the memories of Crown living each ones memories. So I guess Spike is currently out of commission as his mind is organizing everyone's memories incluiding Crown's.

Now I do wonder if as the way you described Alternate Rarity, AKA: Abundance; Would she have developed a way to always have her version of Sweetie Bot AKA: Charming Siren (or it would be Charming System? Bot? MK. ?) with her at all times? From pocket dimension to nanobots which would have make her double as Abundance Battle Armor like Iron-Man's Mk.50 armor. Still when Abundance see Sweetie Belle for the first time, I'm sure she wouldn't ever want to separate from her, even being more over-protective for her health and well-being than even Rarity and her family. (Bonus Points if Sweetie and Charming Siren bot Mk.? become instant "twins" for Abundance delight and Rarity's internal horror for the fate of her fabrics!)

Great job so far, keep it going!

And so, a Wild Serene Wishper (Fluttershy) has appear, what would would tiny Street urchin Constellar Blizzard (Rainbow Dash) will do?

Definetly get the equivalent of 6 stars wanted level over a loaf of bread, GTA style.

Now, just imagine the mixed feelings Serene will feel when she finds our Fluttershy's angel intact & alive and her family never abandoned.

And the answer tuned out, bring her to hers and her mom's camp site, hopefully with the Wild Flutters knownlodge of the forest, its resources and Street Rainbow's mom medical Knownlodge, Angel Bunny will make it out alive! (Definetly it will)

Great Job, I hope to see more of the backgrounds of the girls and how Crown (Spike) in the end formally met them (or if he knew them ever since he have use of memory).

And so, The Silent Flutters have just begun her path to become the best medical practitioner on the world, ever since Stella's (Rainbow's) mom literally and figuratively took hee under her wing when saving her tiny Guardian Angel Bunny.

I do believe that all who's left now is the Applejack Clone origins to be develed in order to contiune with the story (or at least getting Spike to wake up explaining Crown's origins trought flashbacks of the earliest memories Crown had of the girls.

Great job! I hope to see more of this soon, but you have to check the grammar of the chapter once again, found some misspellings and finger/thumb errors around.

So, the day of Crown's birth was the day the little Amber Applejack lost her remaining brother? And Applebloom's counterpart died Because she was so overworked so much at the age of 5 that she died of stress induced fever during the medicine shortage? I'm sure when Sol and Moon hear of this, some heads will roll, either figuratively or literally.

Damn, I guess when Applejack meet Big Mackintosh, Applebloom and Sugar Belle will not stop crying while not letting them go, so we're going to see her being as over-protective on their well being as Abundance is to Sweetie Belle despite Big Mac is already a full grown adult and already married.

Great job, now let's see how Amber met the Royal Princesses and Crown!

And so, Ambrosia will meet the newborn Crown!

Just to be sure, but correct me if I'm wrong: my guess must be that this is definetly should be between Abundance meeting Crown for the first time and before Stella goes Grand Thief Baby for a loaf of bread, right?

Aweosme job, keep doing such a great job!

And so, Ambrosia "Amber" Apple can be considered the second of Crown's future wives that met him right afther hatching, leaving Abundance as the third one and Stellar as the fourth leaving Serene Whishper as the fifth by proxy of Stella telling where her mom and her were as part of the deal she made with Princess Sol, so the last one who met him by default is going to be Soft Pillows.

Awesome! Great job, specially when you shown the regret her uncle and aunt suffered when her little sister died, to the point her uncle hit the bottle, HARD! (BTW: is Cider, not Sider, althought it can be handwaved that in that universe is written like that, I guess.)

I hope to see more of this story soon!

Can't wait for Twilight to explain their past to them

And so, Amber and Dawn met for the first time, and they are becoming fast friends! Great Job!

And With Amber, they complete the original prospects of Project Phoenix! (Althought I do wonder if Trixie, Sunset, Starlight and Tempest's equivalent are also Crown's wives? It would be amausing lf those two were looking for a way to bring back the girls and/or were sent to Equestria at a different time.)

Keep the awesome job!

So, Abundance is the one who invented the gun in that reality, Dusk changed her name and did lots of science along with Abundance, Amber create equipment to make fertilizer using the things neither the newly renamed Dawn and Abundance couldn't make heads or tails, everyone aported something and with Stella's constant injuries made Serene improve constaltly with her studies in medicine to the point practically becoming The Spearhead of Medical ressearch, and even Softy did SCIENCE! in Micro-biology of all things! (To think she literally bribed her way into the project/friendship with hyper-strong coffe!) so now she and Serene are the mothers of Micro-Biology in that world, discovering new anti-biotics and probably new vaccines!

Exelent Job! I hope to see more of this and return to the present.

Wow, being Crown is absurdly taxing, despite the good intentions they forced him to grow up ridiculously fast and abusing of his dragon constitution to train at level of adults would even consider taxing, due to the mentions that given how the situation keep getting worse, maybe it was because they knew they were running out of time. With little to no outside interaction besides his mom, his aunt looking for his mental health despite being literally trained 24/7 incluiding in his sleep (who I may suspect she have mixed feelings because Crown may be the carbon copy of their fallen dragon love interest.) and the girls possible hijinks he would have either colapsed or died at pretty much that age of five.

No wonder why Spike is out of commission if his brain is now strugling to cram and sort seven entire different lives which overlaps frecuently with his alternate self being pretty much the perfect heir of the nation's throne with absurd super soldier training. (I expect his mind and behavior to be as scrambled as breakfast eggs by not only getting everyone's memories but also behavior and manerisms, so he may not just be Crown, but the girls as well at times until his mind completely sort out the memories and adjust to the fusions more frecuently, so yeah the joke of him being the new Rainbow Dash or Constellar Blizzard, or anybody else for the matter in this case may be quite litteral to the point of even dress up in a drag as any of the girls's copies until something snaps him back to be Spike or get mixed with Crown again and start getting a hold of the Volund/fusions with more frecuent practice.)

Good job, I hope to see how were Crown's early daily interactions with the girls despite his scheduel pretty much leaving little to no time to be a child rather than the future saviour of the world in training.

Well, if somepony must be very annoyed with the timing should be Serene as she was about to kiss Crown when Stella burst into the room, now it seems to be that Stella had her own moment interrupted by Abundance.

But there's no time for that and the situation is grimm enought with the emergency briefing now it looks like we're going to see what were the group's first fusion or at least their first mission. (Please tell me that the AI will eventually become the equivalent of Sweetie Bot!)

Awesome job, I hope to see more of this in due time.

And afther the entire conordum analysis that maybe thei involement may nor be necesary at all, despite Wish and Stella objections for rushing to the pegasus district, Crown assures them that their mother and minions are safe!

And with that pledge for wanting to protect his friends despite their duty to him, Crown earned his first kiss from his first future wife! He may not know it, but the other girls will not stand idle with what Stella did, they will step up their game pretty much soon!

Great Job, I hope to see more of this as soon as you can!

Wow, did Stellar pretty much pissed off Serene for such reaction? Yes, she did, and the way she had finally staked her claim on Crown? He's going to be ackwardly walking strange, trying to hid his bonners for a while, at least Serene is ok with sharing Crown with her friends, though.

So, now into the battle plans, their tactic pretty much worked out, specially since Abby have become the mother of modern warfare, dealing with the possesed unicorns was relatively easy, now the hard part of dealing with the possesed pegasi is coming!

Great Job, I hope to see more of this soon!

And so, the battle continues, with Crown pulling what could be considered the impossible by practically single-handly cripling the possesed ground advance while evacuating whatever surviving troops he may find, the grenade's delivery method being practically sealed cards of holding did really ensured that he brought an entire armory within his pockets and the greandes gets primed for detonnation as soon as they get unsesled, now here come the hard part of becoming a group of Anti-Air batteries to take out the incoming possesee pegasi.

Great Job, I hope to see how this continue.

And just as I was afraid, the three dimentional nature of an air raid show its ugly face when it comes with air defense with just infantry weapons, specially when suicide flyers enters into equation regarding the already exausted magical defenses.

So a brawl ensues and is just as brutal as the the anti-air battle, the fact that Crown managed to save Stella and Serene at the cost of being stabbed is a show on how much he care for the girls (his girls, eventually) and just as the possesed didn't give mercy, crown give none to him in retaliation as the ending have shown.

Great Job, I hope to see more or this as soon as you can!

Managed to start reading this at last.
Hopefully I can catch up soon

If this takes place during season 9.
Did the same issue that happened to Spike in the season 9 premiere happened here or was that different?

And curious on how others like Smolder will react?
Think she might have feelings for him too?

11918684
Well that sucks..
Was hoping to see how it goes when Smolder and Ember meets their counterparts.


11918683
You're welcome

None of the image links seem to be working so far

11918817
Hmmm will check into that, if so i will probably upload them inti a boru and then share link.

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