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This story is a sequel to Play Date Continued
A third and final submission to the 'Shining Armor is a Terrible Dad' Contest.
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Lady General Princess Flurry Heart has learned a lot from her Father and now she is as good of a General as he is. He has taught her everything and now that knowledge will be put to the test when the Griffon Kingdom attacks the Crystal Empire.
Will Flurry Heart save her people as the Princess of Light and Hope or will she Fall into Darkness?
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I know you said you only wanted feedback on what the dates should be between her and her father, but I’m going to tell you something that you’re not gonna wanna hear, I find it wrong that a daughter goes out with her father, and then falls in love with him and then eventually he has sex with her.
I know that might not be your intention for the story going forward, but I find it very wrong, going forward If you choose this path, I will no longer be reading this story, I like it the way it is, but ultimately it’s your choice.
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A date can happen without sex, which is why I wanted feedback. A teen story certainly wouldn't have sex. I encourage you to post your ideas, ALL FEEDBACK IS WELCOME, As I said.
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Of course, maybe the first date should be in a café of some sort.
11859063
Excellent idea. I hope I can continue the story to your satisfaction. I make no promises as I will go with what the majority of readers want to see.
11859064
Ok, cool
Dating daddy so she knows how it's done is uncomfortably close to those creepy purity balls.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Gbdydk3SxSU
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I'm not familiar with that concept.
I imagine the first piece of Shining advice for dating would be: “Remember, always come to a date armed.”
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I'll definitely use that in the story. That's a good one.
On behalf of "My Little Reviews and Feedback", I have read and reviewed this story. You can read the review "HERE"
Incidentally, I've been reading this story and writing the review to a music compilation called "Songs of Crystals Glowing in the Dark"... it ended up being aptly appropriate.
"Cadance tried to play it down, but she was equally vexed by the fact that a lot of stallions were intimated by Flurry’s military prowess,"
do you mean intimidated? Intimated is a VERY different word
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Yes, thank you. Fixed!