Twilight thinks about her friends.
Story inspired by Dead Hearts - Stars
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These hearts are so dead you guys, you don't even know.
Uhh, it seemed decently written, but it wasn't compelling. At any point in the story, I could have turned it off and not cared about it after that.
I saw the comment that you didn't want to make it too overly emotional, but if you're writing a story tha has sad undertones and isn't trying to rip your heart out, you better have an interesting story. Twilight reading some books and shelving things isn't all that interesting.
1741554 I see what you mean and I think I know why it's written this way. You see, when I wrote this I wanted to do something new and just start from an abstract idea and we'll see where it goes. That's something I didn't do in my other stories and I won't do it again. I'm just experimenting with writing stories. That and I don't find this story as important as my others.
1743216 Fair enough. I figured that is was something new because you write well. Maybe I'll look through your other stuff.
1743257 I recommend Forbidden Friendship for the writing style and Everlasting Night for the plot (No, not a mare's behind, the story.).
1743271 Oh my, but how do they end? Completion my good sir/ma'am!
1743301 Umm...end, yeah. They're not finished and I'm not gonna spoil it. It will still take some time for them to end. Y'know, real life and stuff. Also, I'm a sir. cdn.veggieboards.com/7/74/300x220px-LL-7471e0bf_Like-a-Sir-300x220.jpeg
1743319 images3.wikia.nocookie.net/__cb20120320232553/glee/images/thumb/9/90/Neutral-feel-like-a-sir-clean-l.png/1280px-Neutral-feel-like-a-sir-clean-l.png indubitably.