Twilight's friends are demanding that she explain her recent actions, but all she seems to want to do is give a lecture about an obscure type of magical artifact to her new pet rock.
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This Is Amazing..
It's alright, took me a second read-through to understand exactly what had happened. It does seem to be lacking a real ending - it builds up interest and makes the reader want to find out more about what happened, but then doesn't deliver on that buildup, instead ending on Twilight admitting she doesn't know how to fix her problem. This would be alright as the ending of a chapter of a multi-chapter fic, but I find it doesn't really work this way.
I liked it, but I have mixed feelings. Why the comedy tag? And is it really complete? This is really sad! Poor, clever Twilight.
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You make an excellent point. Unfortunately, I don't have an ending for it in mind, and I suspect that I am unlikely to find myself compelled to write one. I guess I will just mark the story as incomplete so that readers will be kind of warned about this issue beforehand.
thhis one is very good, but it is definitively not a comedy... more like a tragedy...
The creepy factor just went off the charts... I'd like to see more.
Genius!
And very well written!
I like this, but there is just so much that you're just not showing us.
Puella Magi Twilight Magica
Of course both Celestia and Luna wielded the elements of Harmony at one time.........
So they at least are just "under the weather"..........
As for Shining Armor and Cadance
Oh my! Creepy as hell, and so well written.
I look forward to future installments... and yet I dread them.
This is good, but I really think some sort of beginning, a prologue, anything to give the reader context as to what is going on would be much better. As it is, it just seems like a scene from a chapter of something we haven't read yet...
1798551 Oh, that's quite a shame. I was hoping the Incomplete meant that you had a lot more to say in this story, because this is simply a fragment of one. A good fragment, but honestly it's not even complete enough to be a one-shot.
I hope you find the inspiration to continue this. The writing is excellent and the story has a lot of potential.
...What the? What's with all the sudden interest? I guess I have Archonix's very flattering review to thank for this.
...It's funny rereading this after having been away for so long. The pacing feels rushed, the descriptions are clumsy, and the dialogue is just a bit... off at points...
...and yet I can still glimpse the beautiful germ of an idea that compelled me to write this in the first place.
I want to finish this. Or rather, I want to rewrite this as part of a much larger story and do the whole thing justice. Unfortunately, what I have in my head is a half formed idea of a series of events with no clear end. It doesn't help that I feel compelled to try and integrate the cannon events from the end of season four.
I don't suppose anyone has a good idea for how to kill Discord?
Oooh. That was beautifully done, I'm curious to see where it goes. The world needs more stories exploring the elements, hehe.
I fail to understand the comedy tag on this particular story
*wanders in, late to the party*
Okay, this really is a story worthy of expansion.
Why is this cancelled? Great premise.