After getting embarrassed for the second time in a row at the hooves of Twilight, Trixie goes into a deep depression.
The travelling magician must then ask herself, what's the point in doing what you love when nopony respects you anymore?
(This is a quick one shot on how I thought the episode "Magic Duel" should have ended. The first half of the story is a recap of what happened during the episode. Rated T due to language used towards the end. And special thanks to jmj for all of his support.)
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Poor Trixie. She doesn't have nothing for herself
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lol poor me, 2 likes and 4 dislikes!
Can't say I didn't see it coming though.
It happens. I mean, it never happened to me, since I never published any of my early writing, but yeah, I've heard it happens.
That was pretty weak, wasn't it?
1817935 A lil bit...
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Eh ... never cared too much about down votes.
Especially if it's a thumbs down, and the person responsible doesn't give you any real reason about why they disliked it.
So Trixie swear to never use magic again and lives her life as an earth pony. Doesn't she know no matter how hard you try, you can not run from yourself. That illusion spell won't last forever. Without intervention, there is only one way this will end...with her death.
why so pessimistic, surely you would find a few die hard Trixie fans to give you a thumbs up with a decent comment. Although I'm left wondering if there will be more or a sequel to this given the open ending.
....
Continue....
1817945
It was intended as a joke.
1818081 Oh I know.
*Clears throat* Excuse me mister author would you like a review?
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This was intended to be a one shot, meaning that the story ended after chapter 1.
The only way I'd consider continuing this is if (and trust me, that's a pretty big if) enough people asked for it.
And even then it'd take awhile for an update since I currently don't have any ideas on how I'd continue this without f'king up.
Sorry to disappoint you.
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Sure, why not
I really like this.
This is actually more how I think Trixie should have reacted, instead of asking for forgiveness and promising to be a good pony from now on. Trixie doesn't seem like the kind of mare who would just shrug off being showed up again. Especially since she had all that power before. 
In my mind, I still think she'd react something like what you have here.
But it could have been the Amulet making her so proud up until the end, there. Trixie's first defeat was probably really humbling, so she might have been tamed a bit by that.
But what do I know?
Good job, you have my thumb up.
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Finally!
Someone who understands that the ending for that episode didn't make a lot of sense!
I know, right?! I'm pretty sure the writers just got lazy and wanted a happy ending so they didn't bother to work around Trxie's character to make it happen and just ended it right there. Totally disappointing.
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And that's irritating because not all stories have a happy ending.
And my whole point after I first watched the episode, and thought up Goodbye Forever, is this "Why is Trixie asking the pony that ruined her life for forgiveness?"
If anything, Twilight should have been apologizing to Trixie.
Even for a show that's all about rainbows and sunshine, that ending got on my nerves.
I do prefer your ending and I wish they could have used it but it's a kid show. They can't (or wouldn't) use the idea of Applejacks parents being dead for the same reason they couldn't use an ending like this, it's just a little to depressing for something in a kid's show. Sure it would be better and all of us bronies and older fans would love it but ultimately it's still a kids show. Seriously though I love this idea for trixie more than the one used in the show
Totally irritating. I think Trixie should apologize, but for letting power and thoughts of revenge consume her, not to mention cheating by using the Amulet.
Twilight had a lot of tricks of her sleeve as well and should have apologized for cheating. Although I think she took the correct course of action, as it could be the only way to get her to take the necklace off of Trixie, as I think she was beyond reasoning.
I'd also be all for you continuing this story and seeing what Trixie's new Earth Pony life is like. But if you can't get any good ideas for what would happen, I might be able to share some ideas...
"Flutter Shy" is one word, "Fluttershy."
That's it. That's all I really have to say. No like, but no dislike from me either. I advise you to keep writing to improve your skill. The more you write, the better you get, the better you get, the less dislikes you get. Sometimes.
Good luck.
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Thanks for pointing that out
1820063 No problem.
Looks like your upvotes/downvotes evened out and got way better. Keep in mind a lot of people don't bother even reading a story before passing judgment, especially if that subject is something that they find offensive or challenges their values. You remember what happenned to me. Anyway, I thought this story was very good. I'm surprised it only has 105 views. The only issue I had with it was that the beginning was a retelling of the show, but it did have some good insight through Trixie's perceptions. I did enjoy that. Also, sir, I apologize for missing the two word split of Flutter Shy in the second revision I did for you. I mentioned that two word names should always be capitalized, but I completely missed that you broke Fluttershy (which was one word) into two and capitalized it. My fault on that. I honestly just looked to check and see if you had fixed the errors I had found before. Sorry.
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Flutter Shy was my fault. I already explained why in my previous comment. His writing is improving and he takes criticism very well, but most importantly, remembers mistakes from previous critiques. I've edited for him for a short while but he is already improving greatly from his first chapter.
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Don't worry about it.
Nobodies perfect.
I still can't believe how many people liked this.
Still debating on if I'll turn this from a one shot, into an actual story.
My only concern is if i'll be able to keep the momentum going if I choose to continue.
You know just as well as I do that after awhile my ideas start to make less and less sense.
And seeing as how Goodbye Forever turned out moderately decent, I really don't wanna screw things up.
"Rainpath5466" did give me a few ideas that I could use, but still ...
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Thanks, glad you liked it
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I enjoyed this story a lot it would have been a good ending to that episode
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Too bad Hasbro/Lauren Faust would never create an episode that had an ending like this.
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Yes sadly but it is a show aimed at younger people lol
1864968
Ha, true
This story is bitter and true, yet it's a much better ending than the show, which I know is for kids so it's soft and loving, yet kids can handle bitterness if you give them a chance.
A.G.
now we need a sequel were Trixie befriends a bunch of kids who are impressed with her magic and look up to her despite not knowing what she did the past couple of times in Ponyville. well just throwing out ideas.
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That's pretty much what one of my ideas already are/were for the story after this one.
2806832 so is Trixie going to have a wreck-it-Ralph type ending? if so, think that would be a nice closer and would set up a good change, let alone show trixie what she learned.
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Never saw that movie.
I heard it was pretty good though.
The ending that I have planned, I doubt that anyone will see it coming except for a friend of mine who I told the whole plot too (He doesn't mind spoilers and neither do I).
But that's assuming that by some miracle that I actually manage to finish writing the story.
2806931 well regardless, you'll have my attention
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Thank you.
Oh, and I loved that story you wrote about Shining Armor where he got manipulated by Cadence
2806963 thank you... well, not my best work and i ended it way too soon in favor of its sister story, "Forbidden Fruit". who knows, maybe i'll redo it so it can be its own thing.
I will always love Trixie having hissyfits. I'd love to see what would happen down the road, when she gets tired (or drunk) and the spell falters---or runs into some racist Earth ponies who start badmouthing unicorns.
Aaaaaaand like an idiot I see there is a sequel shortly after writing my comment. We all derp sometimes
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Yeah ... thinking about either deleting that, or taking it down and rewriting the whole thing.
5129062
Why's that? Did it start going in a direction you didn't like? (I haven't started reading it yet; I'm saving it for when I need to distract myself from my family's craziness tomorrow. Yay Thanksgiving!)
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There're several different reasons for why.
One of the ones being that I don't really feel like working on it anymore.
*Edit*
The only reason why I wrote it in the first place was because a lot of people on here, and some of my friends in real life wanted to see "what happens next".
So I decided to be nice and put something together.
Now I sorta feel bad because its just been sitting there collecting dust.
*Double edit*
Plus I don't like the story itself.
Not anymore.
Don't really see why the few who've read it enjoyed reading it as much as they did.
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Oh, I gotcha. That can be tough. Well, at least you made some people happy, right?
5129203
lol, yep.
I still get messages from time to time from other people asking if I'll ever continue.
NNNOOOOO !!!! TWILIGHT !! DO SOMETHING !!!
I think I need a sequel.
What happen with Goodbye Forever: Second Chance?
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That was a loooooong time ago and my memory is pretty fuzzy at this point.
From what I remember, I didn't really like what I had written and I ended up losing interest in trying to continue.
Why is Second Chance wiped? Can anyone tell me that? Thanks.