Twilight bumps into Big Macintosh - romance starts, but when Spike learns of it he'll do anything to keep them apart.
A Mare's Tale takes Twilight and her friends through twists and turns at every bend...
Mulitple chapters, romance, humor, suspense, angst, mystery...!
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Alright, review time. Now while it is a good story, you don't need to keep the chapters short. Cutting it off so suddenly isn't a good way to project your story out. People like stories with a lot of chapters, but only if those chapters exceed more than a thousand words. So I suggest taking a few chapters and combining them together.
Now at the end, where you say instead of a thousands years of life her life span has been shortened? Alicorns are immortal, can't shorten something that has no end.
Good story otherwise, it's nice to see a change from the horde of FlutterMac shippings.
Big Mac and Twilight!! Woot!!
This story? It sucks.