“Eyes On You”
Interlude: Reflection
Trixie nudged open the door to the bedroom proper, just enough to poke her nose inside. She felt a little hypocritical for not knocking first, but she really didn't want to wake Twilight if she was actually asleep.
A quick glance around the room told that the bookish unicorn was missing. Curious, Trixie pushed inside and cast her eyes about for some sign of her partner. Twilight's pair of saddlebags still rested at the hoof of the bed, and her stack of books still sat atop her bedside table, so she hadn't gone far.
Across the room, the curtains that hung across the balcony door fluttered in a gentle breeze. The door seemed to have been left open a crack. Trixie crept over and peered out through the glass. It was dark out, but the pale moonlight was enough to illuminate the crouched, lavender figure on the balcony.
Pushing open the door with her snout, Trixie stepped outside, where she found her partner, knelt down and facing out towards the city. To Trixie's surprise, Twilight didn't have her nose in a book for once. In fact, she was looking up into the night sky – heedless of Trixie's approach – and nodding occasionally, as if counting.
“Twilight?” Trixie called out gently.
Twilight gave a start and turned her head. “Trixie! What're you doing out here?”
The showmare smirked at having caught her off guard. “I was coming to tell you to stop studying and get some sleep. We have a big day tomorrow, after all.” She paused and curled her lip in thought as she stepped up to Twilight's side. “But you're obviously not reading... what are you doing?”
Twilight opened her mouth, but stopped herself short of speaking. After a short pause, she shook her head with a smile and looked out to the sky again. “Nothing, really. I'm just thinking about tomorrow.”
“Care to elaborate?” said Trixie, now standing over the cryptic unicorn.
“Oh, you know. About meeting the other competitors, finding out about the first event, meeting the Princess--” Twilight's casual tone died, and she tried to mask it with a cough.
Despite her efforts, Trixie saw right through her. “Are you still nervous?” she asked, trying to sound sympathetic, even if she was a little miffed.
Twilight flashed a goofy smile towards the horizon. “Of course not. I mean, after you poured your soul into that confession yesterday, it'd be pretty rude of me, wouldn't it?”
Trixie drew back from the sudden jab. “O-oh! You're making fun of the Great and Powerful Trixie?” she said, flicking back her mane and turning her nose up exaggeratedly. “Hmph! Maybe I shouldn't have said anything in the first place.”
Twilight giggled, which brought a smile to Trixie's lips. “If you hadn't, I'd probably still be worrying,” said the bookish mare. She proceeded to nuzzle Trixie's leg affectionately before going back to looking at the stars.
The little gesture sent a warm feeling coursing through the showmare's fetlock, and she was almost disappointed that it lasted for only a split second. Twilight's cuddles weren't exactly much of a rarity anymore, but that didn't mean that Trixie enjoyed them any less.
She reminded herself of the reason she'd come out here in the first place – to tell Twilight to get some rest. It didn't seem like a few more minutes could do any harm though...
With her mouth set in a defiant line, Trixie knelt down beside Twilight and followed her gaze to the sky. The lavender mare cast her a sidelong glance, and simply smiled when Trixie pretended not to notice.
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A few more minutes passed in companionable silence. And then a few more. And probably a few more after that. Twilight couldn't express how grateful she was to have Trixie sitting there beside her. She hadn't even realised it until the azure unicorn stepped out onto the balcony, but she really didn't want to be alone tonight.
Maybe she was still a little tense from leaving Ponyville, and her tiredness was just making that seem worse. If that was the case, then sleep would probably do her some good, just as Trixie had suggested. But she wasn't ready to sleep yet.
If she went to sleep, she would wake up with it being tomorrow. And tomorrow, everything was going to happen all at once. She would never dream of putting it off altogether of course – not with how much it meant to Trixie – but putting it off for just another hour or so couldn't hurt.
The azure mare at her side seemed to stir, as if she was considering something. As curious as Twilight was, she forced herself to keep silent and stare straight ahead, not wanting to put Trixie off.
When at last Trixie spoke, it was with an unusual quietness to her voice. “Twilight, there's something I want to talk to you about--” They both turned at the same time, and their eyes met. “--Before we get caught up in the Display.”
Her tone made Twilight shiver a little. All the same, she did her best to smile encouragingly. “Okay.”
“I've been doing a little 'reflecting' of my own, after our little conversation earlier,” Trixie continued, glancing down at the balcony as she spoke. “Thinking back on how we ended up here.”
Unsure where Trixie was going with this, Twilight simply tilted her head and waited.
“When I first woke up in that hospital tent, after you... found me,” she added awkwardly. “I was confused, and a little disoriented... but that's no excuse for the way I treated you--” She gulped and forced herself to meet Twilight's eyes again, though it obviously wasn't easy. “--Like you were taking advantage of me or something. And it was the same again when you brought me into your home.”
Twilight, admittedly a little awestruck, managed a shake of the head. “It's okay, Trixie. Ponies can do silly things when they're scared, it's not your fault--”
“I wasn't scared,” said Trixie firmly. “I don't have any excuse.”
Twilight's objections died on her tongue.
“But, even with the way I treated you,” Trixie continued. “You never stopped trying to help me. No matter how hard I pushed you away, you just kept being so... so annoyingly kind and understanding.”
The volume of Trixie's voice made Twilight a little uneasy, and she gulped on reflex. “Are you mad at me for that?” the purple mare asked, not quite as casually as she intended.
Trixie licked her lips and turned her gaze out towards the city of Manehattan. “At the time, I might've been. But not anymore. If you hadn't put up with me, hadn't kept trying to help me, then neither of us would be here now. Not on this balcony. Not about to compete in the Display. Not friends.”
“Oh,” said Twilight. It was more of a rasp, really – her mouth had gone completely dry. Must've been the cold, night air.
“I'm... glad--” Trixie began, breaking off almost immediately and curling her lip. “I mean, I'm happy--” She worked her jaw for a moment longer before letting out a sigh and stretching a fetlock to lay in front of her. There was a short pause before she muttered a quiet “Thanks.”
She was clearly disappointed with how it came out, but Twilight was just the opposite. It wasn't often that she got a 'Thanks' from Trixie, especially not one so profound.
On a warm impulse, Twilight stretched out her own fetlock and crossed hooves with Trixie. The touch sent a tingle through her body – familiar and welcome – and she knew that Trixie felt it too. The azure unicorn turned her head to offer a questioning look, but she made no effort to pull away.
Twilight couldn't contain her smile as she stared into those lilac eyes and finished the sentiment that she thought, and hoped, her partner had been trying to get across...
“I'm glad I met you, Trixie.”
The split-second look of surprise that spread across Trixie's face before she melted into a smile was almost enough to make Twilight giggle with glee. The showmare didn't have to say anything for Twilight to know that she felt it too.
In that moment, hoof crossed and eyes locked with Trixie's under the gentle embrace of the moonlight, the bookish mare from Ponyville library was struck by a ridiculously wonderful urge. The warmth of Trixie's coat, the scent of her breath, the glistening of her eyes... Twilight didn't even think, she just felt as if she were being magically drawn forwards...
BANG!
All at once, Twilight pulled her hoof away, shot upright and jumped backwards. What she may or may not have been about to do was stricken from her mind as she cast about for the source of the noise. It wasn't hard to find the near-blinding light of fireworks in the not-so-far distance.
“The opening ceremony,” Trixie breathed, getting to her hooves a lot more casually than Twilight. Apparently, she'd been unfazed by the sudden noise. “How long have we been out here?”
Twilight had to work her mouth for a little before it would make any sound. “L-Longer than I thought,” she muttered. “It must be past midnight.”
Trixie huffed and turned to throw Twilight a mock glare. “If I wake up grumpy, I'm blaming you for keeping me up so late.”
“Me?” said Twilight, creasing her brow. It took a moment for her to actually notice the playful tone, being startled as she was, but then she offered a nervous chuckle. “O-oh, right! Well, then I guess we'd better get to bed.”
With a little smile, Trixie nodded and led the way inside.
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Trixie closed the door behind herself and Twilight, just in time to muffle the next wave of firework explosions. This part of the opening ceremony, which was really more of a simple celebration, would supposedly go on throughout the night, pausing in the morning, shortly before the competitors arrived at the stadium. Luckily for the two of them, that still left a half decent amount of time for sleep before the big day.
As Trixie crossed the length of the room – veering away from Twilight, who headed straight for her own bed – she found herself adopting an excited smile. It all began tomorrow, only forty winks away, as it were. She pushed open the door that led out of the bedroom with nary a second thought--
“Trixie,” Twilight called out suddenly.
An eerie sense of deja vu washed over Trixie, but she tried to shake it off as she turned to her partner. The mare in question had her forehooves perched atop the soft bedspread, and she was smiling thoughtfully as she kept her eyes locked on Trixie.
“Do you want to share the bed?” said Twilight bluntly.
Trixie's hooves locked up. “...What?”
Twilight's smile didn't so much as falter. “Well, it's got to be a lot more comfortable than the couch, and it's plenty big enough for both of us, now that I think about it--” Her voice softened a little. “--Not to mention... I'd kind of like the company.”
Try as she might, Trixie couldn't will herself to come up with a quick quip or smart comment to counter that. It was a perfectly normal-for-Twilight thing to ask, and Trixie wasn't surprised or flushed in the slightest. The room had just gotten unnaturally warm all of a sudden, that was all.
Trixie felt her bottom lip quivering a little, and she bit down on it to make it stop. It wasn't as if she didn't want to sleep on the wonderfully comfortable bed, but there was a part of her which fought against the idea. Sharing a room with Twilight was something she'd been looking forward to since she first heard they were staying in a hotel. Sharing a bed was something she hadn't even considered. It would be... close. Intimate, even...
'Why am I even considering this?' Trixie asked herself, as the room grew hotter by the second. She shook her head and offered Twilight a pained smile.
“T-Trixie will sleep on the couch,” said the not-so-casual showmare. It might've been less awkward to just say 'No, thank you', but she didn't want there to be any confusion.
Twilight opened her mouth, as if to argue, but then closed it again and shook her head with a nervous grin. “Right, of course. It was just an offer.” She hopped up onto the bed and sank gracefully into the mattress. “Goodnight then, Trixie.”
“Goodnight, Twilight,” Trixie managed. She wasted no time in turning for the door again and pushing it open, only to stop half-way over the threshold. Now that the initial discomfort of Twilight's offer had passed, Trixie began to register her words properly.
'...I'd kind of like the company,' she'd said...
A glance back at Twilight told that the purple unicorn was arranging the pillows on her bed with a half-hearted smile on her face. Trixie curled her lip. Now that she thought about it, Twilight had seemed a little 'off' all evening. It wasn't so bad that she looked as if she needed another hug, but still...
An idea struck Trixie. With an 'I'm brilliant' kind of smile, she hurried out of the bedroom...
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Twilight watched Trixie's tail vanish through the door with a solemn frown. She scolded herself for letting her mouth speak before her head again, and wondered whether she'd upset her partner. Sharing a bed might be perfectly normal for Twilight and her friends back in Ponyville, but her relationship with Trixie was different. Everypony seemed to know that by now...
'You can't just go mouthing off without thinking, Twilight,' she told herself, striking a pillow with unnecessary force. 'What if she--'
She jumped in fright as something bashed against her door. A moment later, it swung inwards to reveal something that looked very much like...
“Is that the couch?” she wondered aloud, hopping down from her bed to get a better look.
Sure enough, she found that it was indeed the couch that was lodged part way through her door frame, with a certain azure unicorn on the other side, trying to ram it across the threshold.
“Trixie, what're you doing?” said Twilight, brow creased in disbelief and wonderment.
“What does it... look like?” Trixie grunted between pushes. “If we're going to be room mates... we should at least... sleep in the same room, don't you think?” She stopped pushing, probably realising that she was only making it worse, and threw Twilight a look. “Would you mind?”
Twilight blinked dumbly at her a couple of times, before breaking into a smile. Without thinking to say anything, she lit up her horn, magically reached out to touch Trixie and the couch, and teleported them both into the bedroom.
The showmare hit the floor with a yelp, only for Twilight to pick her up a second later and pull her into a quick hug. Saying 'thank you' would probably be silly, not to mention a little embarrassing, but Twilight was silently grateful all the same.
As the lavender unicorn snuggled into her bed that night, she flashed a smile across the room. Trixie, whose head was resting atop a couch pillow and whose eyes were already half-lidded, returned it sleepily. Twilight would've liked to watch the adorable showmare drift off to sleep, but already her own eyes were drooping, and she knew she'd never make it.
Resigning, she flicked a shroud over the firefly lamp at her bedside and buried her nose into her sheets, comfortable in the knowledge that she wasn't alone.
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Trixie, Y U No cuddles.
"Because Trixie has more propriety than you, you silly commenter."
:D
...All my brain can think of at this moment is a thousand Bronies (and Sweetie Belle) poking up out of some illogically existing bushes somewhere in the background, and giving a resounding "...OH COME ON!"
Great chapter though!
NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO
So close...
This little dance that the two are doing has got to end soon, right? RIGHT?!
Heh, nice way to throw both of them off, yet make them more comfortable at the same time. This Display will either bring the best or the worst out of both of them.
Continue on!
Stop playing with my emotions like this.
Here comes the moment we all waited for...
... and Trixie declines. Why?!
I hope that doesn't make Twilight all depressed for the next day and cost them success at the thingie.
Sweetie Belle says it all
KIss her, damn it!
Curse you...CURSE YOU YOU FIEND ! It's not nice playing with others emotions ...
So, so close. But well played Unlicensed, well played.
Thank you!...and she declines...CURSE YOU!
Well I guess the show's about to begin, this is where it gets fun...er...more fun...How do you keep making the story better?!
"It must be gone midnight.” I think that should be past or have gone past.
A very beautiful chapter. However, I'm with Sweetie Belle on this one.
Trixie is insane. She has to be to be able to turn down that bed. Someone find the green lantern corp and get them to send this girl a ring quick. SHe might just have more will power than Hall Jordan. The near kiss was painful though. so close yet so far.
Oh Trixie. Ya really should take what you want when it's offered.
DAMN IT!!!! Stop teasing us! KISSSSSSSS!!!!!!!
Oh, Come On!!! So close, yet so far.
And then Trixie has to say no to sleeping in the bed. Of course. Foolish mare. Can't you tell that's exactly what you want?!
But, that might cheapen the experience once it finally comes. So by forcing them to keep pushing it off, they're only building up the awesome amounts of d'aww that await!!
I finally get it!
p.s. please (sir or madam), may I have another?
REALLY cute chapter. I swear, my heart was pounding throughout the entire chapter. Glad to see Twilight being a bit more open. Also glad to see her gradually starting to accept her feelings for Trixie. Of course, the other mare knows she feels the same way towards Twilight, but being the stubborn pony she is, she's just not being honest with herself.
Anyhow, loving the romantic development here! Like many of your readers, I disliked seeing Twilight get cut off like that. Urgh. One day, you'll steal a kiss, Twilight. One day.
Some memorable quotes:
In my opinion, this was really powerful. This one line shows how much Trixie has matured. She is able to take the blame and assume responsibility for her actions. Nice job with the character development!
What.
WHAT.
Did Trixie decline because she has to sort out her feelings or something? Seems like a relatively logical conclusion, but still. WHAT.
You did a great job at teasing us with this chapter, sir. Come onnn.
Really though, keep up the good work, and can't wait for the next update!
Augh, the electricity was all there and the mood was so right It's such a sweet chapter.
Trixie opens herself more and reveals her regret over the way she treated Twilight. . . and Twilight is just so accepting and happy for her
If only there was more time for them to spend with each other on the balcony. Even without the intimacy, I just love when they are spending time with each other.
Another roundup! Before I start though, I just want to let everyone who didn't see the blog post know that I've rewritten and extended this chapter (Interlude: Reflection) to better convey Trixie's feelings and make the scene a bit more believable. If you want to take another look, most everything after this...
...has been changed. It is now much more coherent, hopefully more relatable, and is twenty percent cuter. Give it another look if you have the chance.
Now, onto the comments!
2187572 Cuddles are cute, but I must resist overusing them! But it's easier for me because I know what's going to
happyhappen in the end2187604
2187613 Haha! Thank you very much! Well, at this point I'm starting to feel bad for interrupting them so much. Any more and I'm going to get some serious hate, so I'm going to see if I can get through the remainder without any more explosions or annoying baby dragons. Fingers crossed!
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2187700 Yes, very soon! ...Relatively speaking Hehe, thank you for your comment!
2187782 Youch, they're breaking out the sad Fluttershy faces! Okay, I'll stop teasing soon!
2187840 I rewrote this chapter's ending to better explain 'why', more out of my own compulsiveness than anything. It's got lots to do with how she 'really feels' about Twilight. That was probably a rhetorical why, but the above is just in case Anyway, the moment you've all been waiting for is not quite here yet. But it can't be too much longer now!
2187927 It might've done, and that's not what I was going for. I think Trixie would've realised that Twilight was feeling a little insecure, and that's part of why I re-wrote the end of the chapter. Take another look! (if you want to )
2187932 That's how I roll
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It's ok. I MAY be a tad obsessive.
2192272 Well... she DID seem a bit crazy but the good kind of crazy^^ so... yeah youre good^^
2187954 Haha, I love that clip! That was actually my inspiration for this chapter
(but not really)
2188062 Soon! Relatively soon!
2188076 Argh, another sad Fluttershy! It burns! I know it's not nice, but I have a perfect scene set up for how they will finally end up together, and I've gotten to the point where I'm starting to make excuses for them not to get together until then. Not sure how long I'll be able to keep it up... hopefully the Display will distract them from their increasingly obvious feelings!
2188198 Past midnight sounds better, thank you As for making the story better and better, it's largely thanks to everyone helping out with all the advice and encouragement in the comments. And also because I'm learning/developing as I go... at this point, I'm scared to look back at chapter one, because I know I'll be like "Urgh, what was I thinking?!"
Thank you again for all of your comments!
2188461 Thanks! And yes, it's getting that way, isn't it? *nervous chuckle*
2188569 "In brightest day, in blackest night, no evil shall escape my sight!" Haha, brilliant! There are definitely some hidden/repressed feelings there, to keep her from what she thinks is the world's comfiest bed. I know I'd have trouble turning it down!
2189650 She's not sure what she wants... maybe she'll find some clarity throughout the Display
2190065 There ya go!
Oh, you were talking about Twilight and Trixie? Soon, maybe, but not today!
2191418 Yay! Someone understands the method to my madness! You may certainly have another, I'll just need some time to write it. Bear with me!
2191759 I think I'm done with the convenient interruptions now, I don't want to get predictable I'm very glad to hear that you liked Trixie's character development here, as that was a big part of the chapter (I just needed to cram that last bit of development in before getting to the Display).
This was admittedly poor, so I've rewritten it to be clearer (as I mentioned here). I think you'll like the rewrite, please let me know what you think if you get around to reading that part again.
And thank you as always for your kind words. I really, really appreciate it!
2191931 Thank you! Hearing you put it like that makes it sound really romantic I love when they are spending time together as well, and I have some more adorable scenes to that effect planned for later. For now, it's time to write the start of the Display! Stay tuned
2192411 would be suprised if it were^^ lol^^ Also, Im looking forward to their excuses not to be together^^ That sounds really interesting^^
Another brilliant chapter! And am I the only one who is annoyed at the 'perfect timing' parts of this? Well anyways, I am really REALLY looking forward to the next chapter.
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You're quite welcome, thank you for making such an enjoyable story for me to comment on.
Looking forward to the competition. It's going to be epic. That jerk, who's name continuously escapes, won't know what hit him, and Trixie will get ALL the gloats.
"Was there every any doubt?"
"Maybe just a little, I'm a tad nervous."
"Still? Do not worry Sparkle, I will be there to help you. Just keep your eyes on me and react to what I do, make it natural; you are a very talented spell-weaver."
"O-oh, ok. Thanks Trixie."
P.S. Will re-read modification later, for now: classes.
Edit: Just read the updated, Trixie is a genius. Nuff said.
2192344 Read it, neat little addition with the couch, now it does look like Twi is going to be fine
Although if you didn't reply to me I could've missed the edit completely
Keep doing what you're doing, this is a pretty great story!
Definitely like the rewrite a bit better, ends the chapter on less of a down note.
2192411if its the worlds confiest, then then only god could stop me from turning that one down. Soon Trixie, soon. You can not resist the increadible bed with the mare of dreams for ever. BWAHAHAHA!!
The addition of moving the couch into the bedroom was especially adorable.
2192411 As long as I don't have to wait months for it, I'll be okay. Days is a much nicer wait, but whatever you can handle.
Please carry on.
now I must read how the last chapter was altered. Thank god I like reading all the random comments, or else I would never noticed.
Welp, I like the developments.
And now for the obligatory D'aw.
*clears throat* D'aaaaaw, they'resocuteit'salmosttoomuchtohandle! Squee!
Love the revision!
I seriously smiled when Trixie tried to get the couch into Twilight's room. When in doubt, get the couch.
Things are progressing very well for the both of them. Can't wait to see them become more honest with their feelings. I mean, they both may have come to terms with their emotions, but they are still clearly having troubles trying to bluntly admit it to one another. Nevertheless, the fact that they're having these internal conflicts is great because many people still portray their feelings with subtle hints instead of blatantly stating them. Nice job with connecting the real world with your story.
Anyway, I am SUPER tired. I never knew life could get so busy. I apologize if half of the things I said did not make sense. I'm getting veeeeery drowsy, but I still have work to do, so until next time.
And as always, keep up the good work!
I didn't read the first version of this, due to a change in schedule and me having to play catch-up, but I digress. This was adorably awkward for both of them. Let';s hope the dance ends soon and they get to... other maneuvers. :p
2192563 Hehe, what I actually meant by that is that there is no excuse for them not to be together, except that I keep interrupting them when they're about to get to the good part Mostly because I have this perfect picture of how they'll finally get together, but also partially because I wanted to build up their feelings some more first. No spoilers, but it's going to be awesome! I hope...
2192662 Thank you! And you are most definitely not the only one - just check out some of the other comments I'm actually getting a little annoyed with them myself (EDIT: The interruptions, not the comments ). No more convenient interruptions!
2192788 Awesome! Thanks for giving it another read. The danger of re-writing like that is that some people may not realise that I've re-written - despite my blog posts which are supposed to notify everyone who is following the story - and then the next chapter doesn't make sense without reading the revisions Anyway, I'm glad you noticed, at least
2192916 Great, thanks for letting me know! Up note endings are better, but not as good as cliffhangers
2193134 Yay! Thank you, I'm glad you thought so.
2193262 2193284 This next one will definitely be more like days, and future chapters up to two weeks each, depending on how busy/inspired I am. And thanks for letting me know you liked the developments, I appreciate it!
2196431 Excellent, thanks once again It's good to hear that you like the 'actions speak louder' approach, which I'm so fond of using. Implied feelings are a lot more fun to write than blatantly expressed ones, because they have more potential for misunderstandings, anxiety etc. And, as you said, it's more relatable that way anyway.
Life sure does get busy sometimes, I hope you manage to get some sleep soon!
2208344 Huzzah for adorable awkwardness Thanks! I'm looking forward to the end of the dance as well, as I'm sure Twilight and Trixie are... in their own, adorably awkward kind of way...
2209024 Oh, I usually don't think to check the blog posts or anything... I just kinda fav the stories I want to read as they update and only go read the new chapters as they come, and unfav when they get completed to avoid clutter (and usually feel bad about doing that ). Although I often skim over a previous chapter to remember what's been going on in the story, but yours is unique enough that I usually don't need to because I can remember it.
2209024 I'm sure it will be^^ *sits and waits for the next chapter*
I read this whole story from start to finish last night, and then slept on it so that I'd feel comfortable writing a review in the morning. I came up with some likes, some dislikes, and I planned to bring up the disappointing ending.
Then I opened this story again and noticed for the first time that it was marked as "incomplete".
Well, obviously I can't complain about an ending that hasn't occurred yet! I don't know why I thought that this Interlude was the last chapter; my eyes must have been playing tricks on me. But I am more than happy to see this story continue.
Keep up the good work. This story already contains one of the more memorable scenes I've read in a fanfiction; that being Rainbow Dash watching as the train carrying Twilight and Trixie starts to roll away. It was such a perfect ending to a character arc, and I hope that further chapters do nothing to diminish it.
RRRRRRRRRRRRRAAAAGE!! http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/InterruptedIntimacy x 3. Author, this damn trope is getting old. It's cheap, lazy writing. Annoying.
FUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU-
Seriously though, I did a heart dissection today. I completely opened the Aorta, the left ventricle and atrium and removed a massive blood clot by cutting away the tendons... that heart was in a better shape when I finished, than my own when I finished this chapter. GOD DAMN FIREWORKS! THEY ARE NOT TO BE TRUSTED!
2224173 You're not the first to mention to me that they thought this Interlude was actually the ending/epilogue at first glance. I find your lack of faith disturbing (But not really)
Thank you for your kind words on the end of Rainbow Dash's arc, I'm glad to hear that someone sees it like that I look forward to writing more chapters - and, eventually, the real ending - for you to enjoy!
2231857 Oh... you're not going to like chapter twenty-three...
Kidding. Yes, I know the convenient interruption in this chapter was annoying. I can safely say that I don't have any more planned. This was the only one I had planned, actually, which was probably why it was annoying. Spike just kind of snuck up on me. Anyway, it's not likely to happen again
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2235558 I think that's good! Unless you mean it literally, in which case I'm impressed by your ability to comment despite the state of your heart Thanks very much! And yeah, those fireworks are dodgy... not as bad as Spike though
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“But, even with with the way I treated you,” Trixie continued. “You never stopped trying to help me. No matter how hard I pushed you away, you just kept being so... so annoyingly kind and understanding.” There's an extra with to remove here
I don't think anyone could have made any better comment then what you just stated good sir!
Your comment was perfect hahaha, brilliant! Exactly what I was thinking right then!
And then...they frick-fracked
it is a really good story, i already want a sequel.
Trixie being pretty heartfelt in this chapter. Me like.
Until the two get kiss-blocked again, this time by fireworks
Trixie dragging the couch into the bedroom...smarten up Blue Mare, stop being so stubborn already!
For the love of all that is shipping,
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I can see it now. Every time they try to kiss, some random thing will happen to interrupt them. Eventually they will realize this and Twilight will try testing the theory. After a series of improbable events occur, they'll agree to stop trying to kiss. Then, during the finals of the contest, they will mistime a spell and end up kissing on stage in front of everypony whilst a seemingly harmless statue silently laughs his head off. He'll pick it up though.