Alternatively titled: "Uneasy Hearts Weigh the Most"
It’s been two weeks, and Rainbow Dash couldn't be happier that she was dating Ponyville’s most dependable pony, Applejack. Applejack, while unsure of how it would turn out at first, finally starts feeling comfortable enough about their relationship and tells Dash that they can finally tell their friends about it.
As she’s planning how to best go about telling their friends, Ponyville is met with wonderful news: Applejack’s mother, Apple Butter, is going to be visiting Ponyville, making it the first time in ten years that either of Applejack’s parents have visited! With the entire town planning a welcome party, the two mares may find it hard to tell their friends about their relationship, and they’ll come to realize why Applejack’s mother might make it even harder.
How long has this been up and people are already disliking/liking this already? Did you guys even read it?
Was wondering where this was when you posted the blog. I'm gonna wait till part 3 comes out, read the whole thing at once but the premise is nice. We never see the parents as an obstacle (mostly because even before Apple Family Reunion it was most peoples headcanon that they were dead), so I'm looking forward to your characterisation of Apple Butter.
2006250
I can give you three reasons: 1) Some people auto down anything with same sex shipping. Despite the inevitability of this due to the cast of the show. 2) Some people auto down shipping in general. 3) This has one of AJ's parents in it, and since it was confirmed that they're dead in the actual show, people down due to disregarding canon, despite 9's starting to write this before Apple Family Reunion aired.
I've never read a same-sex ship before, but wow. It's that ending to the second part that really hit me. I find myself actually interested into seeing how this is all going to turn out.
There is, though, one spelling error that annoys me: (Chapter II)
It's then or three, from how I see it.
To sum it up, thanks for opening my eyes to a different plot-type.
(Keep writing please!)
HEY
THIS IS PRETTY GOOD
SHIPPING AIN'T REALLY MY THING BUT IT'S STILL GOOD
ALSO I FUCKING HATE STATISTICS, JUSSAYIN
LOVE
WUTEN~
Oh crap, AJ. You just made an incorrect decision.
2006250
I red it and it was a good story so far! Cant wait for more
Reading.
Reading..
Reading...
Reading....
Whoa wait wat
Somebody's actually writing AJ's parents!??
This is a definite first
Meh, I'm not one for Appledash due to the personality conflict, but I'll keep an eye on this.
Damn it AJ, you're the element of honesty. Honesty! Her situations gonna get so much worse before it gets better. I just hope AJ realizes that while her mom may have birthed her and cares about Applejack in her own way that it's no reason to try and please Apple Butter when she's basically trying to plan her child's life. A life she wasn't involved in.
Celestia damn it.
AJ you dun goofed.
I have to say... AJ... I love ya, but you just seriously bucked that one up and it's gonna be a rough time trying to patch it up. What's more, I have a feeling Big Mac is gonna be the one that finally sets her straight. Dunno why, just do.
Keep up the good work, really enjoying this one
Damn this story got intense you my friend just got a favorite and i will anticipate another chapter soon
An AppleDash relationship with AJ's parents; definitely gonna read this later today
Hopefully she will be able to make things right with Rainbow Dash, before she ends up all alone on an empty farm. I don't think AppleeBloom, Granny Smith or Big Mac gonna take the way Applejacks is acting well.
Yes. Yes please. Please moar. This is like
with 
and a nice helping of 
Wow. Nice job, because this is some quality Appledash.
This chapter hurt, right in the gut. Applejack had the worst choice laid out for her, and she certainly went about solving it in the worst way. I only hope she can sort things out before everything goes to shit...
I hope AJ gets exactly what she has coming after that stunt.
"Tell ya, what, we tell them this week, okay?” "All, uh, one, bars in Ponyville." "Ah’m thinkin’ about it Dash." Too many commas in the first two, not enough in the third.
And now that I'm done being a grammar asshole...
Hmmm, I enjoyed this one. Appledash is one of my favorite ships and you capture the voices of both characters quite nicely. "AJ's parents" is an interesting hook, and I applaud you for sticking to your guns even after the release of Apple Family Reunion.
I'll comment more on Chapter II.
"If she hadn’t seen the letter with her own eyes, and read it over what was probably fifty times during that week, she wouldn’t have." Wouldn't have...what?
"It wasn’t that that was bad a bad thing either."
And now for the plot...
Eugh, right in the feels! Good lord, you really know how to yank your readers through a blender. I sympathize with AJ's decision, but it was absolutely the wrong choice...now you've got me anticipating the next chapter.
Good show!
Well, that was completely unbelievable. Doubt I'll be reading any more of this.
2012522
Great job thus far.
I will definently be reading more of it because its good and I want to see Applejack realize her mistake.
Havent read it yet, but please add lines between paragraphs. The indents help but it stipl feels like a wall of text and just adding one or two blank lines between them will make it much easier to read
2020528
While I have done that before, I vastly prefer this formatting style, so I apologize.
To be honest I really didn't read this for the paring, AppleDash isn't my cup of tea, but I read it more to see someone else's take on Mama Apple. I do get kind of tired of fics stating that the Apples are all orphans.
T'was a good story. Lots of feels. Pretty well written two. Never thought I'd get worked up over the "arm" being in there, but oh well.
Best end ever. And I guess Apple Butter ain't so bad after all. She just made bad decisions.
"She slammed the door shit, nearly hitting Applejack’s snout."
Really enjoyed the ending. Very sweet way to reconcile the issues between the two. Would have loved to see RD and AJ inform the other cast members about their relationship, especially since that seemed so important to Rainbow.
2021144
I'm going to be honest, I kind of want to do another fic in this universe. I don't know. I'll get a blog post up about where I may be going from here.
Applejack you chose...poorly.
I think you meant do.
Great story!
2021356
2021144
Also thanks both of you for the typo finds~
This is good. I think it wrapped up a little to soon, there's so much more that Applejack could've said to Apple Butter, and I know I wouldn't forgive her for abandoning me so quickly. Then again, you were writing this for a contest, so deadlines dictate length.
Overall though, definitely an enjoyable read, I'd read something in this universe again.
~claps~ Another great Appledash fic to hit the 'complete' tag. :D Have to agree, I'm tired of seeing the mother-&-father-died-10-years-ago card being pulled up.
One thing that bothers me actually - why only just fix the story on her mother? What happened to her dad - is he dead, divourced, working somewhere far out? I don't think there was any elaboration on this, and seeing as you mention both of them in the first chapter, then only continued with her mother, I'm left wondering what happened to him. Unless you mentioned something in the other chapters that went over my head. Sure, it's for the contest but a paragraph or so explaining wouldn't have hurt. But oh well. :P
Still a great job, keep up the great writing!
This is a good fic so far cant wait to read onto the next chapters
OKAY NINES I AM READING YOUR DUMB STORY NOW :|
"Who totally exists and is alive and whose name I only mentioned to make sure which of our moms you're talking about, because we have so many and they are all so very alive? We are just inundated with mothers, and parents in general, is what I'm saying here."
AND THEN THEY HAD SEX
Okay, so once you get the past the whole "Applejack's mother is a real thing and now she is going to be here", this is a great setup because you're playing AJ's heart against itself.
Because she didn't, you see. :V
I need to write a fic where AJ's parents died because she stopped believing in them.
So. The family drama is riveting. How in the shit could AJ actually go and say that though? Son, I think you need to learn a thing or three about Honesty. Also, edit your shit bro, for srs. :V
You wove a great little tapestry of emotions and dialogue here. Everything fits together very well.
But...
I AM MAD BECAUSE THEY DIDN'T TELL THEIR FRIENDS
ALSO BECAUSE YOU NEED TO EDIT YOUR SHIT NINES SERIOUSLY OH MY GOD D:
srsly, I so mad :|
2031417
EDITING IS HARD
WHAT IS WRONG TELL ME
2031538
EVERYTHING D:
No, it was just small stuff. I didn't keep track, but every chapter had missing words, extra spaces, missing punctuation, that sort of thing. Stuff that reading aloud will catch.
2031608
Except that almost none of those things are actually read aloud. :V Oh well.
2031608
I dunno, people've been commenting errors. Those existed originally but a lot of them have been removed so far.
GIMME
2033479
I noticed a word with two g's that should only have one. That oughta help.
I'm not reading back through this for errors, that is your job, Mister Writer Man. :|
2033658
fixed, lazy bum. though technically it was a word, just in the wrong context.
"And that's the story of why they had to change MLP:FIM's Intro, because the baloon was abandoned and eaten by wild praire dogs"
Now seriously, I loved it! Thought I think you should write a fourth chapter with them telling their friends, or maybe Apple Butter's departure back to Hooveston, or something.
2035524
The thought crossed my mind to do an epilogue, but it would't really do anything... so maybe.
Feels central in this chapter
I didn't see AJ's response coming
You broke it
I want to read this, but the numbers don't add up. I'm pretty sure AJ can count to 4 (IV), unless this is like some prequel to get days of discovering the magic of numbers.
(seriously though, looks interesting!)