Huh. My headcanon is that the ENTIRE UNICORN COURT were idiots except for Princess Platinum, who played "ditzy teenage princess" to a hilt even though she had a black widow as a cutie mark and was, in fact, remarkably progressive. And cunning.
Oh my goodness. This is quite interesting. I must admit, I agree with Twilight that Rarity was overly evocative with her ornamental language. I could only actually bring myslef to read Twilight's commentary... which I think was probably more enjoyable, anyway.
I know there are like seventeen more pages, but i just don't feel
... I doubt Twilight would forget to capitalize that 'i', both because writing != typing, and because unless you're trying to show her absolute frustration with the plot twist and Rarity, it doesn't seem like a mistake she would make.
I vote Pinkie! Figured I get that out there first. I didn't think this chapter was going to all that great to be honest, but I had to walk away from my laptop for a few minutes, now my sides are killing me.
This is my new favourite fic, both the fic-within-a-fics and Twilight's notes. It's sublime. I had to stop myself cracking up and waking the whole house. RD's chapter was fab, but this one, jesus... Rarity's stuff is Mills & Boon written by Jim Theis. You are a god among authors.
On the fourth paragraph, Twilight forgot to mention that "cadence" is spelled incorrectly here. It's only with two "a"'s when it's Princess Cadance's name.
Ah, just as I suspected. Purple prose by the truckload.
I imagine that Applejack's prose is going to be overly laconic; basically, the polar opposite. Pinkie's fic will probably by plagued by rampant textwalling and irrelevant tangents. As for Fluttershy... I dunno.
When you finish the story, and if you don't have any idea's for the ending, I think if you either make Twilight write an amazingly good clip fic to show them how it's done, or They have a massive orgy because it seems like they all want Twilight so far would be a great ending!
Haha, that was a hilarious twist at the end there. I was really enjoying Twilight's uncomfortableness and then only to have it all actually point that way at the end... it was great.
I can't stop laughing. That was brilliant; absolutely brilliant. You portrayed Rarity's writing so perfectly and intelligently. This fic should be required reading.
Also, I would like to put in a vote for Fluttershy
I was gonna say Applejack, since she's best pony, but you've got me curious as to how Twilight will critique Fluttershy's work without hurting her feelings.
I vote for Fluttershy. And there needs to be an emoticon of her happy.
Rarity's Historical Fantasy is almost as difficult to read as Mary Shelly's Frakenstein; and before Clover/Twilight appeared I thought she was going to insert Fancy Pants and maybe have a scene where Blueblood is executed.
Also; I liked how a Sapient Race of Lamas was mentioned.
You really capture the personalities of the characters in their writing. I'd wager that most people are most interested in Fluttershy's chapter but I'm looking forward to Applejack's.
Be honest; how much time did you spend with your nose in a dictionary to figure out all these big words? And let me clarify when I say "dictionary" I do not mean Sweetie Belle. I know you were thinking it.
This just keeps getting better and better! I can't decide if I'm guessing that Fluttershy's gonna write a wangstfic, or a bdsm as all hells fic. No idea what Applejack would write. Maybe a hardboiled crime fiction with romantic overtones? As for Pinkie Pie? Magic Girl Tentacle Sci-Fi, of course.
Oioi. Almost lost me right at the beginning. Twilight telling somepony else to stick with simply words? Really? Well, maybe we can chalk that one up to pure hypocrisy...
Pony Gods! My last pose was such a mess, grammar-wise. Anyway, here's my vote for Applejack, since poor Twi deserves a break after this, and Applejack can't possibly be worse than Pinkie, 'Shy or Spike
I almost enjoyed reading that purple prose ! That's quite a feat. I vote for Fluttershy next, there are so many possibilities for her style. Ridiculously naive or incredibly perverted ? Is she hiding some weird fetishes behind her shy appearance ? Are her animal friends going to be involved ?
It's always fun to freak Twilight out, keep going !
This was a lot of fun to read, because of all the times that Twilight wrote the very same thing that I thought while reading Rarity's parts. "That's 'cadence' with an e," and "'Ocular spheres'? Seriously?" and so many more.
The revelation about their experimentation during a sleepover was very intriguing.
2248087 O SWEET LORD SHE'S SO CUTE. Somebody needs to create a "Happyshy Emoticon" petition. Get to it my underlings! What? I thought for sure that I had underlings. Darn. Also, I suggest Applejack, since it would be hilarious to see an honest clopfic.
LOL oh man Twilight and Rarity's next conversation is going to be very awkward, I wonder who is going to be next. I am especially looking forward to Fluttershy and Applejack, Fluttershy because I can think of so many messed up ways that could go and Applejack because she has been my favorite pony from the start.
Holy god this was great. I knew as soon as Rarity's story was about Platinum and Clover the direction it would take but man did you pull it off fantastically. There needs to be some kind of follow-up between Twilight and Rarity imo. Now if you'll excuse me I need to go nurse my sides.
I vote AJ. It'll be another tonal shift, like between RD-Rares. I think Flutters would write a 'clop-fic' about bunnies or something. OH! Have Flutters have the really weird fetish! if you do her next, I mean. I still vote AJ.
I LOVE YOU. This fic is SOOOO awesome and awkward! This is the first time I've seen the words "pulchritudinous" and "callipygian" used since I learned them. Makes me happy
Oh geez, Rarity and Twilight are gonna have one hell of a conversation!
Great chapter!
Huh. My headcanon is that the ENTIRE UNICORN COURT were idiots except for Princess Platinum, who played "ditzy teenage princess" to a hilt even though she had a black widow as a cutie mark and was, in fact, remarkably progressive. And cunning.
Okay, so next victim? Toss up between Pinkie and AJ.
Heh love the comments on here..... But trying to read the actual "book" GAG
Oh my goodness. This is quite interesting.
I must admit, I agree with Twilight that Rarity was overly evocative with her ornamental language. I could only actually bring myslef to read Twilight's commentary... which I think was probably more enjoyable, anyway.
I whish I could upvote this more than once :)
Done:
Rainbow Dash
Rarity
Voting for next:
Applejack
LOL this chapter was hilarius. I can't wait to see whose next. (I hope it's AppleJack)
I was waiting for Twilight to use the line "Brevity is the Soul of wit." But alas, it was a good read anyway.
I have no idea what anything meant in Rarity's story
This chapter. I could not stop laughing.
I'd love to see the conversation Twilight and Rarity have. So much.
Please, please, PLEASE write it.
EDIT: I vote for Fluttershy!
Wut?
Can you please write Twilight and Rarity's conversation as like a bonus chapter or something? I wanna know how that shit goes down.
I hope Applejack's fanfic is next.
... I doubt Twilight would forget to capitalize that 'i', both because writing != typing, and because unless you're trying to show her absolute frustration with the plot twist and Rarity, it doesn't seem like a mistake she would make.
Also: MOAR PLZ.
I vote Pinkie! Figured I get that out there first.
I didn't think this chapter was going to all that great to be honest, but I had to walk away from my laptop for a few minutes, now my sides are killing me.
This is my new favourite fic, both the fic-within-a-fics and Twilight's notes. It's sublime. I had to stop myself cracking up and waking the whole house. RD's chapter was fab, but this one, jesus... Rarity's stuff is Mills & Boon written by Jim Theis. You are a god among authors.
2246624 the victim is twilight
always twilight
FLUTTERSHY!
Also, I couldn't understand half of Rarity's story.
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I would love to see this as well. I want to know what happens.
LOL, that is so Rareity-ish.
I knew it. I knew Rarity's fic would involve something regarding a fetish
I actually don't like clopfics, but this is without a doubt the funniest I have ever read
On the fourth paragraph, Twilight forgot to mention that "cadence" is spelled incorrectly here. It's only with two "a"'s when it's Princess Cadance's name.
Just sayin'.
Ah, just as I suspected. Purple prose by the truckload.
I imagine that Applejack's prose is going to be overly laconic; basically, the polar opposite. Pinkie's fic will probably by plagued by rampant textwalling and irrelevant tangents. As for Fluttershy... I dunno.
2246857 Aw crap, it seems so obvious in retrospect.
2246923>>2246972>>2247285 I'm seriously tempted. I very well might if I can find the time.
2246981 Duly noted. I'll fix that.
2247115 Thanks. I was pretty much imagining "What would The Eye of Argon be like as a sleazy romance?" Glad to know it came across that way.
2247269 I don't think Rarity understands half the words either.
Also, the standings for the next chapter thus far:
: 7
: 8
: 7
4
Fluttershy is still in the lead.
Lol Rarity's horn fetish
When you finish the story, and if you don't have any idea's for the ending, I think if you either make Twilight write an amazingly good clip fic to show them how it's done, or They have a massive orgy because it seems like they all want Twilight so far would be a great ending!
Oh and I hope Pinkie or Fluttershy is next! Great fiction so far!
I... I just couldn't do it! Ye ancient gods of chaos, Rares, you've out-purpled A LOVECRAFT FAN!
There oughta be a law against this!
Oh, and I vote Spike, while Rarity is still traumatically fresh in Twi's head.
Haha, that was a hilarious twist at the end there. I was really enjoying Twilight's uncomfortableness and then only to have it all actually point that way at the end... it was great.
I vote for Pinkie pie!
Don't forget the perverted mind of Fluttershy!
Yessss! Purple prose! I knew it had to be.
Also that is just a little creepy there, Rares.
I can't stop laughing. That was brilliant; absolutely brilliant. You portrayed Rarity's writing so perfectly and intelligently. This fic should be required reading.
Also, I would like to put in a vote for Fluttershy
I was gonna say Applejack, since she's best pony, but you've got me curious as to how Twilight will critique Fluttershy's work without hurting her feelings.
I vote for Fluttershy. And there needs to be an emoticon of her happy.
Rarity's Historical Fantasy is almost as difficult to read as Mary Shelly's Frakenstein; and before Clover/Twilight appeared I thought she was going to insert Fancy Pants and maybe have a scene where Blueblood is executed.
Also; I liked how a Sapient Race of Lamas was mentioned.
You really capture the personalities of the characters in their writing. I'd wager that most people are most interested in Fluttershy's chapter but I'm looking forward to Applejack's.
Man, dood.
I kinda want Twilight to proof-read MY stories...cause I am sorta like her in a way, dood... I want it to be readable and...good.
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You definitely nailed the "Eye of Argon" vibe, but without the typos. Fun Story
I vote for Fluttershy
plz put the chat with twilght and rarity in
Be honest; how much time did you spend with your nose in a dictionary to figure out all these big words?
And let me clarify when I say "dictionary" I do not mean Sweetie Belle.
I know you were thinking it.
This just keeps getting better and better! I can't decide if I'm guessing that Fluttershy's gonna write a wangstfic, or a bdsm as all hells fic. No idea what Applejack would write. Maybe a hardboiled crime fiction with romantic overtones? As for Pinkie Pie? Magic Girl Tentacle Sci-Fi, of course.
Let's see Flutter's fic. Will it be hopelessly bashful and innocent? Or overly gratuitous and disturbing?
Oioi. Almost lost me right at the beginning. Twilight telling somepony else to stick with simply words? Really?
Well, maybe we can chalk that one up to pure hypocrisy...
Pony Gods! My last pose was such a mess, grammar-wise. Anyway, here's my vote for Applejack, since poor Twi deserves a break after this, and Applejack can't possibly be worse than Pinkie, 'Shy or Spike
I almost enjoyed reading that purple prose ! That's quite a feat.
I vote for Fluttershy next, there are so many possibilities for her style. Ridiculously naive or incredibly perverted ? Is she hiding some weird fetishes behind her shy appearance ? Are her animal friends going to be involved ?
It's always fun to freak Twilight out, keep going !
This was a lot of fun to read, because of all the times that Twilight wrote the very same thing that I thought while reading Rarity's parts. "That's 'cadence' with an e," and "'Ocular spheres'? Seriously?" and so many more.
The revelation about their experimentation during a sleepover was very intriguing.
2248087 O SWEET LORD SHE'S SO CUTE. Somebody needs to create a "Happyshy Emoticon" petition. Get to it my underlings! What? I thought for sure that I had underlings. Darn. Also, I suggest Applejack, since it would be hilarious to see an honest clopfic.
EDIT: Wait, the emoticon kinda counts, I guess.
LOL oh man Twilight and Rarity's next conversation is going to be very awkward, I wonder who is going to be next. I am especially looking forward to Fluttershy and Applejack, Fluttershy because I can think of so many messed up ways that could go and Applejack because she has been my favorite pony from the start.
Oh, to be a fly on the wall for the incredibly hilarious awkwardness that will be Rarity & Twi's next conversation!
I still demand a chapter where Twilight proofreads one of Lyra's man-on-pony fics. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra_dealwithit.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Discord.png
Holy god this was great. I knew as soon as Rarity's story was about Platinum and Clover the direction it would take but man did you pull it off fantastically. There needs to be some kind of follow-up between Twilight and Rarity imo. Now if you'll excuse me I need to go nurse my sides.
I vote AJ. It'll be another tonal shift, like between RD-Rares. I think Flutters would write a 'clop-fic' about bunnies or something. OH! Have Flutters have the really weird fetish! if you do her next, I mean. I still vote AJ.
I LOVE YOU. This fic is SOOOO awesome and awkward! This is the first time I've seen the words "pulchritudinous" and "callipygian" used since I learned them. Makes me happy