Running from your past has ended you up in Ponyville. The people there are as friendly as any other place you've been, and you take a quick liking to the place. After purchasing a small apartment, you meet a very beautiful rainbow haired girl and you slowly fall in love with her without knowing it.
some of the grammar on this is rather iffy... but pretty good concept.
I agree, great concept. I'll read the rest tomorrow.
Nice story you got, can't wait for the family drama to come.
Damn good chapter
Another good chapter.
Wunderbar
"Twilight, elegance has left..."
Okay sorry to be nitpickey, but shouldn't it be rainbow or dashie, or twilight said? Sorry just jumped at me
All in all, great chapter though!
Pretty good, first second person point of view I've seen. Nice going.
I wonder what they dressed up like....for Nightmare Night!
Ponies are vegetarians I thought.
Shit, I missed something. Human RD? Human everyone? What?
2312791 I'm sorry if there was any confusion, but yes this is humanized
In one fic I've read, the main characters take a liking to Scootaloo, and end up adopting.
me gusta, continue
ADOPT THE POOR CHILD
so sweet
Me Gusta
Okay c:
mm'kay. Good chapter, bro.
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These aren't ponies.
I like it, but I found quite a few typos.
On your... on your what?
You try toflatten down your yellow and black hair.
This is a nitpick, but it's ID (capital letters).
First question: What is your name? Sonic Wave.
700 paper bits? Do you take out paper dollars when you pay for something?
Passing many people on the way.
Ah think ya broke 'im.
why
3669850 Well after being away for so long, we think you, the fans, deserve more in this story. We have grown in our writing ability and we want the to reflect in our stories. the story line will not be changed too drastically but there will be noticeable changes.
"retrieving the tree apples"
Where else do apples come from?
Srsly though so far so good.
Ooooh boy, this first chapter reminds me of that 'game' "Welcome to Ponyville" Act one... That thing gave me the creeps.
3671718 is it dead? please don't let it be dead!!!!
This sure has been a long week and a half....
OMG Sonic tought them how to gamble!!
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No Our fandom is dying.....WE MUST RESORT TO PLAN K...KILL JAKE PAUL!!!!!!